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Mein na saach mein ek pagal hoon.. idk y i did it.. and y m i posting it.. but listrning from heart is one of my school principle guidness 😆 ... i wrote it 2 weeks before last week as i was bore in my english class.. 😆 .. actully i was not at mood od studing.. so when my teacher gave us laptop for writting eassy, i took the ADVENTAGE of writting this... now to the point i know its gonna be so bad... i know i will make u feel bore.. i hope not.. as this is my first tried plz tell me or point me my mistakes.. plz

part 1

Nisha is in viraj house.
After she saw divorce paper.
The same track.


Conversation between kabir and vasundhara
K: mom yeh meri nisha ho hi nehi sakta. Woh esa kabhi nehi kar sakta.
V: but kabir woh tumhare saath bhi nehi rehna cahta hai.
K: i dont know mom. But im really sure that yeh woh nisha nehi hai jise mein pyaar karti hoon.. Kyuki jis nisha se mein pyaar karta hoon woh asa nehi hai.
v: per..( interrupted by kabir)
K: mom plz. I need some time. plz( then he walked away outside)
v: yeh kabir bhi na samaj tahi nehi hai.. Ki uske liya sahi nehi hai.. Yeh nisha humare bete ki life pura spoil kar dia hai. Hame kisi bhi tarase is nisha ko kabir ke life se bahar nikal na hoga. ( then she called leela)
L: ha vasundhara ji boliya.
V: woh hame upse waha ki haalat puc ni thi. Kya cal raha he waha par.
L: ji nisha to divorce paper dekne ki baad abhi bahar gai hai ji.. Shayed viraj se milne gaya hoga.[ as usual tune]
V: viraj???
L: ha viraj singh rathor. Nisha ki boss.
v: (monologue) kya...yeh hamne kiya kardia. Itni baari galti. Badle ki bhavna me mene apni dono beto ke bich takrar barha di. Itni baari galti kese hao gai humse.
L: vasundhara ji aap ho na waha pe.
V: hum aapse bbad me baad karte hai. Then she cutted the phone
L: aab inko kya ho gaya.
V: ye humse kya galti hogaihe..


Otherside kabir on road.
K: yeh sab kya horaha he.. Sab kuch kitna accha calrahatha. Lekin achanak sabkuch... [Tears started flowing from his eyes] aur nisha ne mujhe divorce kyu dia.. Mana shayed woh mujse pyaar nehi karti hai. Lekin meri jane ki baad woh mujhe divorce dena cahti hai.. Yaha tak ki hamra gar bhi chor dia usne... Nehi yeh woh nisha nehi hai jisse mein pyaar karti thi...
[suddenly someone came and tapped kabir shoulder]

Viraj house:
[nisha went to his house.]
N: mr. viraj singh rathor darwaja kholiye. [knocking hard] mr. vira...
[he opened the door]
V: miss nisha aap yeha. Hame bol deti hum aapke paas aa jete.. Aap ne taklif kyu li.
N: oh pls. Taklif ke baat to aap karhiyahi maat. Kyuki jitni takleef aapne mujhe di na utni mujhe aur kisine bhi nehi di.
V: miss nisha...
N: mrs nisha... Shaadi ki hai mene.[showing her manglalsutra].. Kabir se.
Aur aap samj te kyu nehi hai ki mein aap se pyar nehi karti hoon.
V: miss nisha y r u lying. Kabir is not here anymore... i know u love me... And ager aap mujhe pyaar nehi karti he to aap ne usdin mujhe kyu restaurant buliatha...
N: mene aap ko nehi kabir ko buliatha.. I dont know why u always come between my happiness, my and kabirs happiness. Aap kyu ai meri zindegi mein. Shayed aap kabhi na ati... aaj aap ke waja se kabir mujhe chor ke chali gai hai. Aap ki waja se usne mujhe divorce paper bheji hai..
V: kya divorce paper per usne to mujhe.. [ could not complete his world]
N: aap ai kyu meri life mein... meri aur kabir ke bich mein... Shayed aap na ate.. Aur kabir hi ati meri life mein.. To aaj mujhe itna kuch nehi sehna parta... Pls aap meri zindegi se chali jaia.. Kyki meri life mein aap ki chapter close ho chuki hai... bohot pehle.. Pls. [she just walked away]
V: [tears started flowing] yeh humne kya kardi hai... humse itni baari galti kese ho chuki hai... aab jab galti humse huihe.. Hume hi use thik karna parega... aur yeh divorce papers... how could this possible.. kabir ne hume kahatha woh 1 saal complete hone ki baad divorce papers bhejegi.. phir yeh.. Hume yeh saab pata laga na hi hoga... [ imagine it was the same how it was in show]


[Kabir on the road, thinking of the situations, someone tapped him and made him shock]
That person: kabir tu [ saurav].. tu yaha par hai.. [ anger was clear on his face]
K:[scare ] ha... haan sau... saurav me...mein yaahan hun.. mein London nehi gai...
S: kya??? Agar tu London nehi gai to Ghar kyu nehi gai.. patahe nisha ki kya haalat ho chuki he [ kabir was lil confuse].. roro ke uski haalat bura ho chuki hai aur tu...
K: woh kyu roagi.. mein hu hi kon uski.. woh toh viraj se pyaar karti hein na...
S: woh tujse pyaar karti hein... kabir.. haan.. she loves u more than anything...

K: accha woh agar mujse pyaar karti hein to uske mujhe kyu nehi roka... kyu usne usdin viraj ko restaurant buliatha... kyu jab mein jarathi uske mujhe yeh nehi kaha ki she loves me... agar woh mujse pyaar karti he to kyu nehi aya station jab mein jarahiti...
S: nehi nisha ne restaurant tujhe bulaitha... and jaha tak station ki baat hein.. usdin woh tujhe rokne gaithi... yaha tak ki teri mom aur Ramesh uncle bhi gai thi waha par... [ kabir was shocked.] Aur... rehne de y I m explaining that to you.. mujhe to lagta hai tuhi usse pyaar nehi karti hai... issiliya hi tune divorce papers bheji hai na...
K: kya... woh papers to [ almost break down... monologue: per mom ne to kaha nisha ne...]
S: kabir...[ noticing kabirs tears].. kya hua.. r u ok... tu thik hai...
K: mujse bohot bari galti ho chuki he... mene nisha kabir saath... kese kardia mene... y didn't I believe her...
S: aab to sab kuch clear how chuki hai na.. to...
K: saurav I need some time... tab tak Please tu kisi se kuch bhi mat bolna... plz...
S: per kabir...
K: plz...
S: ok.. per tu ajana ok... and nisha ko iss bare mein nehi banate wala.. U hve to tell her everything.


KN house:
N: [tears from her eyes were bleeding, album on her hand, sitting on sofa, remembering their mammaries, thinking of what t do next].. Yeh sab kya hogaiya, kyun hua yeh sab hamare saath. humdono kitne khush the, koi problems nehi thi, lekin aaj yeh divorce paper yeh sab meri saath hi kyu hua?? Kyu mujse meri saari khushi hamesha chin jati hein.. [tears was flowing from her eyes, then she dozed offf]

On road:
K: [monologue] kyu kiya apne asa mom? Apne apni bete ko hi itni baari saza kyu di, kyu mujhe aur nisha ko itni door karna chaha, apne badle k liy aap inta kese gir sakte he... apna dunya mantithi mein apko. Lekin apne mujhe hi meri zindegi se door kardia... ek baar bhi na socha ki mera kya hoga.. [ he did not notice when he came middle of the road, when he was crossing the road a truck came.. And... blood was all over, only word on his mouth was Nisha...]

Kn house:
N: kabir...[ when she thought kabir was calling her, she screamed]
That time saurav came, then ran to her. Tu thik hein na nisha.
n: woh kabir usne humme buliya hein... woh kisi musi baat mein hein..
s: nisha tu beth yaha pe... ek min... [ he brought a glass of water] yeh lijiya.
N: nehi.. I dont want it.. Mujhe meri kabir se miln hein. Usne mujhe buliya hein...
s: par, tu pehle[ nishas phone rang, she picked up it]
N: hello.
The person: ji kya aap mr. ku,ar ke relative hein
N: [ sounds scare] haan.. Mein uski if hoon.. Aap kon..
TP: ji woh actually... unki accident hui hein. [ nisha went freeze]



i know i made u feel bore.. sorry for that.. hahahahaha
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Posted: 9 years ago
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very nice ... loved it!!!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: cutivenika

very nice ... loved it!!!!



Abe oi.. jhutti.. but thanks..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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please update the next part ...!!!Waiting for it!!!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Zamiahurain002



Abe oi.. jhutti.. but thanks..




what jhutti ????😕😒😵
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: cutivenika





what jhutti ????😕😒😵



Jhutti matlab lier
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Posted: 9 years ago
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oh i thought chappa🤢 😛 !!!!! no no i'm no liar seriously i'm telling it's really nice!!!!😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Zamia congo for your first story 😉
Superb start 👏
Kabir ka accident
Update soonish😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sujayricky

Zamia congo for your first story 😉
Superb start 👏
Kabir ka accident
Update soonish😆



Very funny..first time I m laughing at people's comments.. but that's inti bakwaas story ko superb start kehne ke ia
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Zamiahurain002



Very funny..first time I m laughing at people's comments.. but that's inti bakwaas story ko superb start kehne ke ia


Aere story toh acha hai na yaar toh bakwaas kaise hua 😉

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