MaNan SS||*New Life with Shrink*||Chap 14:pg 85(22-04) - Page 18

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: ankita_t

<font size="2">Hi,</font>


<font size="2">I haven't read the novel and now i don't have plans to read it coz i wanna explore this story from your narration. I was waiting for you take the story ahead and i am glad you did it soon.</font>


<font size="2">A facet of your Nandini 'now and only now' , it really clutched my thoughts and i could visualise everything that was happening with her. Her anxiety and vulnerable state was beautifully depicted by you in words. The urgency to pour her heart into words in the form of poems and letters actually were the initial signs of her breakdown... Your research does shine out here...</font>


<font size="2">Stories are written in different styles and we all broadly use 2 styles- Descriptive and Narrative. You really are very strong when it comes to descriptive style of writing. You are suave and fluent when you describe characters and incidents.</font>


<font size="2">The imagination of 'HIM' and the 'jargogle' of thoughts regarding the 3 men was narrated in a very subtle manner, yet it conveyed the deep thoughts that were running in the mind of the protagonist. I could visualise her doleful eyes when she had a constant fight in her mind regarding the way she treated all the 3 men in her life. Her nerves being edged whenever she thought of HIM was quite a thing for me to read...</font>


<font size="2">I'm looking forward to the new part soon coz i like reading in flow... so you got to pull up your socks and pen the next chapter soon... Yes, we make mistakes while writing and we learn from them. I know you'll take everything positively and keep going strong...</font>


<font size="2">By the way, i haven't been to Juhu beach too, would love to go there sometime...Well i really like the new title. It does convey what you have in store for me ahead...</font>


<font size="2">Thanks a lot for this story.</font>

<font size="2">Lots of Love</font>

<font size="2">Ankita</font>





Hi di,

I am glad you want to read my work. .you knw the name and the concept still my work!!

Thats a huge achievement for me and now i am more determined to write better. .

About the research thing, i tried my best and modify a little bit, but certain things need to be as it is, otherwise it would mess up everything. .

I have no knowledge of writing just words are written as i visualize it infront of my eyes

About her thoughts of 3 men, i actually forgot to put a note at the end, whether it was upto the mark as i felt, i went little overboard. .do let me know about those last 2 3 paras. .

I was going to describe juhu beach, but i felt it unnecessary with so much important stuff like kiss, confession. .

Thanks for d support
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: UggliBuggli

Aye kya hogaya.. 😲She kissed JOSEPH..😲😲

I was expecting it to be manan..😒
Coming to update it was commendable..⭐️
I seriously want to comment lamba..😒
But too weak to think too much..😭😭😭
And about advises from grandspops
Once I am fully recovered I will PM you..
I promise.. 😃😃
By the way I LOVE GUJARATHII FOOD..❤️💔
So in future definitely I will come..😊
And dekhna I will win..👍🏼
It's a challenge baby..😉

TAKE CARE!
STAY BLESSED!!
KEEP SMILING!!!


hehehe..
Manan.!!! wont that sound too early..???
i mean there is still alot to come..
i am telling dont expect manan..
and ya take care of your health you are falling ill on and off
you are most wecome to have gujarati food and abotu the challenge thing then let me tell you are challenging a gujarati and that too for food.!!!!!!!!
So lets see..😉
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: zohasad2.0

this is so interesting and intriguing. very different and creative.


thank you so much..😊
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Angel_manan

Amazing update.
Beautiful written.
Loved it very much.
Thanks for pm.
Waiting for next update.
Keep smiling.
Stay blessed


thank you so much.😊
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Posted: 9 years ago

Chapter 4B

My World(Maniks Pov)

I was standing in my cabin looking at my graduation certificate and I travelled through the memory lanes

Flashback

Space institute of Medical and technology, London, UK

7:30 pm

We all were gathered in the ground of our huge campus for the graduation ceremony. We all were wearing the black coat meant for graduates along with the cap which was actually double the size of us. The dean, principle all congratulated us and declared us the graduates.

After completing my studies of Psychiatrist, I was going to join the National Mental health Institute, Mumbai, being the senior doctor as I was considered a star child who never got less than A's in his academics. But it was very easy for me as I have been doing this since like my first step in the school.

Habits formed in childhood die hard and I have been meticulous about housekeeping from an early age. Hence I never hesitate to clean the mess of my house and I want everything neat and clean. Dad passed away when I was seven and since then my mother raised me singlehandedly. As a child, I would feel miserable seeing her struggle to make both ends meet, and to help her out, I would tidy up the home before she came back from work. I wanted to make her life a little easier. Ever since I have told her I am moving back, she is over the moon even though I am relocating to Mumbai, not Gwalior where she lives.

I know how she managed to make it up to my studies. She never let me work and always forced me to study. She wanted me to become a doctor. Infact we both had same goals. Our goal got a determination after HER sudden death that too because of depression.

My mother has struggled a lot for bread and butter. Yet she never complained, never shared her pain with me. Whenever she would be upset due to regular struggle for life, she would look at me and my all trophies that I have achieved till date. This made me more focused towards my goal and to be a successful man and give all luxuries to my mother.

Now that I have achieved that, I want her to enjoy her life, I want her to enjoy all that she had missed in this 25 years by raising me. I want her to go on long holidays, click lots of pictures and do all crazy stuff that she craves for.

But she is 50 now, so she prefers HARIDWAR more than GOA.Sigh!

Cabir my room-mate, too got placed in the same institute but in other department.

Cabir has only two goals when it comes to women, One, to get them to bed on the first date and two, to get them to bed on any date. Such a playboy!

Cabir is about 5 ft 9' and muscular to boot. He has the kind of body that can make it to the cover of a men's fitness magazine. He works out thrice a week and plays football. He is very conscious of his appearance, and with his kind of looks and charm, he is popular with women.

In the three years that I have known him, he has slept with at least eight women, even while having a steady relationship with Eva. Initially, I had found it very odd, my moral compass being at variance with Cabir's.

Friday nights are, by default, music night at a local pub. Cabir and the others in my department (all English, I was the only Indian) have a routine they do on these pub visits. They call it pulling'. This basically means attracting women and charming them enough to get them to go to bed with them. When they had first mentioned to me that they would be out at the pub pulling', I had asked Pulling what?' at which they had all burst into laughter.

Later I had learnt the subtle differences between the slang used by the British and the kind used back in India. In the UK, shagging meant having sex, while in India, it meant pleasuring yourself.

Flashback Ends

This is how we are here. I was still lost in my thoughts. A ward boy barges in and

"Sir Patient no 7 is not having her medicine" And I lost my temper. How dare he??

"How many times do I need to repeat, call her by name not by patient number"I shouted at him and without bothering to have another word with him, I moved out and made my way to her room with two nurses.

"Oh! Shit! I am late she will punish me for sure. No one can save you today manik" I mentally prepared myself as I saw the time, it was 10:05 am and I had to be in her room by 10:00, which I royally forgot when I was in my memory land. Damn you manik!

I saw cabir coming from the opposite direction. I signaled him and he understood as this is a routine for us.

I walked to a room, whose door had a big king size mini-mouse sticker over it. Actually I had personally stuck it on the door having two reasons one she loved mini mouse and another she hated when someone refers her as a patient number so with the help of the sticker the number was hidden.

I peeped in to see how much damage is done. And I saw a petite figure looking out of the window with all grumpy expression, various frown settled on her forehead and lips slightly parting at various time duration which means she is cursing someone. What someone it has to be me.

I slowly made my way in the room and cleared my throat to gain her attention as words are suddenly invisible in my dictionary. By then cabir and other two nurses too had entered and cabir knows damage has been already done by me. He shot a glare at me for being so careless. And all I can do is to plead him to cover up the damage.

"Ye hath mujhe dede manik" I guess this is the 31st time he has come up with this line to make her laugh. Though he knows it never helped, yet he repeated the same dialogue. he thinks this is the funniest dialogue! I saw her face got more red and I gulped, I am afraid of this mini-7 year old monster. By now I was furious, firstly she is not taking medicine and here cabir, instead of helping, he is just making it more complicated.

"ha take mine, and also add two of these both nurses too which will sum up to 8. Have it and be An OCTOPUS, that suits you better" I said while gritting my teeth, fisting my hand and shooting glare at him. Wow, he looked scared with my sudden outburst and gave a apologetic look. We were having out eye convo, which was broken or too be more precise was happily disturbed by a soft giggle. We both look at the way from where we got the melodious giggle. It was our angel smiling and giggling on cabir's plight. We both looked at each other and sighed. Finally the damaged was covered up and smiled.

Muskan, her name. someone dropped her outside the door of Institute with a note that as she is a girl we cant raise her as our child. Please take care of her'. Like seriously, what kind of parents would be they who didn't think how she will live here. What if everyone does this. Whom they will get married and have baby boy. They don't even understand simple logic that to get a baby boy they atleast need to have a girl. What a shame on society. Since then I took care of her and she lives here. Currently she is having fever that is why medicine. Look at irony, despite of having no mental health problem she has to stay here.

"Angel I am sorry I am late I know I am bad. Please give me any punishment but never ever be upset with me okay.!" I said her all lovingly.

"Its ok bhaiya. Mujhe bus wo medicine nai khani" she complained cutely and I went all aww on her. she was soo understanding atleast more than cabir. huh!

"who wants to have chocolates and icecream with a ride at beach" Cabir said excitedly. Here he comes to again be the reason for the damage. Fever- icecream-beach. Seriously cabir!

"Me!! I want. Manik bhaiya will you please take me to the beach"She said pleadingly and I cant afford to say no to her.

Well on beach I will take care and for icecream I will somehow make her forget about that. so yes my brain says it is no harm as far as I am with her. I will take her to the beach.

"okay we will go but firstly you have to have your medicine" I get back at her with the main topic. She pouted but then seeing me having no mercy on her she had her medicine along with her few adorable known curses to me.

"ok angel lets go to beach"I said and we made our way to the beach. We had lots of fun. I made sure she doesn't go near beach. Finally she forgot about icecream. We made sand castles. We were back within one and half hour as I cant risk her health.


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Okay guys, here is manik's world. i thought to give a little intro on his side.

And those who expected manan meet. 😛i am so sorry guys😭. wo bhi hoga like 1 update k baad.


Edited by Drashtiii - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Amazingg.. 😃
Aww Muskan 😳 even I love Minnie mouse 😛
I love this determined Manik..
Like it's so adorable to see Manik so determined for his mother.
Cabir playboy 😆
Sorry for chotu comment di.
Aa vaar nani Dhingli ne maaf karido 😊

But yess...update toh was damn amazing.Aap bhi toh ho na..mastt 😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
Res!
Unres!!
Aweee its damn cute...
I loved this part..
Honestly i read it 7 times!!
You have described it amazingly.
Kaise kar lethi ho aise?!
How?!
Muskan is sooo cute..
If you can please update her pic in next part. So that we can visualize her..
Manik's reply for cabir..
Hahahhahahahahaha...
It was damnnn funny..
I am still giggling..
SaCh bolu toh
Manik's POV is amazing than Nandini..
I am seriously scared reading about her.!!
Sorry for small comment..😭


TAKE CARE!
STAY BLESSED!!
KEEP SMILING!!!
Edited by UggliBuggli - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Nice update...
Manik's POV was imp too...and it waz quite nice..
So he has struggled alot...he z eating da fruits of his hard work..
But one thing that I didn't understood is dat whom MANIK refer to HER...who died coz of depression... I guess it can't be Nandini coz it was flashback..
I am getting curious..
Waiting for more...
Continue soon..tc
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Posted: 9 years ago
nice update .
u amazingly penned manik's POV.
poor boy gone through lots of difficulties in his life.
for bhi he is a nice guy.
ln manik's POV there is no nandini why?

manik graduated from UK and joined in Mumbai so how could he related to nandini and Cochin ?
so much mystery is unrevealed.
mini 7 years monster wow l really liked it.
thnx for pm and this lovely update.

plz update ASAP.
eagerly looking forward
stay blessed and keep smiling.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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hey don't think i ran away from this story... I'm so busy with studies... This week hectic for me, I didn't get enough time.. & also my wifi connection sucks... I didn't read previous chappy also.. Hope i may be read two chappy tomorrow i know you don't need my explanation but being a responsible reader i inform you,

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