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arnavmaan

@arnavmaan

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#11

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Rashi Bhargava

@newmoon18

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#12

awsme update
loved it

asr and his big fat ego he will never apologise
he blamed khushi for his mistake
he's really great

excited for nxt

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maria

@Maria.

Sparkler

+ 7

Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Nice concept.

You have a potential to write.

PS.Just want to give you a bunch of suggestions,if you don't mind.Use MS Word,it'll be easier for you to get rid of spelling and grammatical errors and the second is,write the dialogues in inverted commas like this" ..." and make paragraphs.i hope it'll help you.

@and dear,you have written wrong spelling in title, its Dark.correct it:)

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Sara Ali

@SaraAli1

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Originally posted by: Maria.
Nice concept.
You have a potential to write.
PS.Just want to give you a bunch of suggestions,if you don't mind.Use MS Word,it'll be easier for you to get rid of spelling and grammatical errors and thesecondis,write thedialogues in inverted commas like this" ..."and make paragraphs.i hope it'll help you.
@and dear,you have written wrong spelling in title, its Dark.correct it:)

thank you so much for advise .i am happy you point out my mistake next time i kept in my mind aur kosish karongi kaam mistake ho.i am weak in garmmar.
I am new so that,s why i doing so much mistake.hope i give you best upate one day .i am using mobile so pata nahi paragarp ka masala hota hai bar bar.main kahi dafa theek kart dati hun. Pher bi sahe say nahi hota.

Edited by SaraAli1 - 9 years ago