Jaiwanta Bai-Amar SS: A Grandmother's Love

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Jaiwanta Bai -Amar SS-Grandmother's love

Hi . I have been reading stories by all these writers. It gave me a inspiration to write this SS.
I hope you appreciate my writing.

Part 1

This is the time when Udaipur was being built.

It was afternoon time. Maharani Jaiwanta Bai was busy praying to her kanhaji. Amar Singh just arrives.
AS: Dadi-Ma,Dadi-Ma(Grandma!Grandma!)
JB:Kya hua Amar singhji.kyu pukar rahe hame ?(What happened Amar Singh?why are you calling me?)
AS: kuch bi nehi dadi-ma. Apke saath hame toda samay bitna chate hai.(Nothing grandma.I want to spend some time with you.)
JB:toh ye bat hai. Sabse Pehle aap kahnaji ko Pranam kare .phir mei Apke saath samay bitaogi.(So this is the matter.first pray to Lord Krishna then i will spend some time with you.)
Amar Singh did pranam to kahnaji and took Prasad from Jaiwanta bai.
As:Humne suna hai ki aap veer gada bahut sunati hai aur bhojan bi bahut achi banati hai.(I have you tell nice stories of brave warriors and cook good food.)
JB:kisne kaha yeh sab apko?(Who dold you this?)
AS:mere Dajiraj ne.ve hamesha kehte hai ki apke ki wajase hi ve intne bade shur-veer bane hai.(My father.He always tells me that he became a brave warrior because of you.)
JB:laghta hai pratap ne apko mere bare mei bahut kuch batya hai.(It seems that Pratap told you a lot about me.)
Neither of them noticed Kunwar Pratap's arrival and was listening their conversation.
AS:Haan dadi-Ma.wo hamesha apko yad karte hai. Hume bi Dajiraj ki tarah veer yodha bane chate hai.kya aap hamara madate Karege?(Yes grandma.he always remembers you.I also want to a brave warrior like my father.Will you help me?
JB:yeh to achi baat hai ki aap apne Dajiraj jaisa veer yodha bana chats hai. waise bi humari madate ki apki koi avshkta nehi padegi apko.(This is good that you want to become a brave warrior like your father.Anyways you won't need my help.)
AS:kyun Dadi-ma?(Why grandma?)
JB:kyunki aap Pehle shei hi itna accha yodha hai,apki Dajiraj ki tarah.(Because you are already a good warrior like your father.)
AS:Sach me Dadi-ma!(Really grandma.)
JB:Haan Amar Singhji. Hum jhoot nehi bolote hai. Aap mere liye ek yodha hi hai.(Yes Amar singh,I do not lie.To me,You are already a warrior )
KP:apki dadi ma theek keh rahi Amar singhji.(Your grandma is telling the truth Amar singh)
AS: Dajiraj (Father)
JB: Kunwar pratap. Aap kab aye?(Pratap.When did you come?)
KP:Abu aye hai rani ma.jab chote Kunwar apse madate mang rahe te tab.
Waise Amar Singhji apne dadi ma ye nehi kaha ki aap Kese un Mughal sainiko ko mara aur saw ki raksha ki.(Just now mother.When little prince was asking you for help.Did you tell your grandma how you killed those mughal soldiers and protect everyone Amar singh?)
JB:Kya!yeh toh Hume pata hi nehi ta. Amar Singhji batayie ki apne Kaise sabki raksha ki?(What!I never this.Tell me how did you protect everyone Amar singh?)
AS:jab hum sab ek toote hui qila ke andar teher rahe te,tab achanak kuch mughal sainik aye humko bandi banane ke lite aye te,. maine unse lada aur unko maar diya.jagamal kaka me humari sahayta ki. Humne Chand bua aur choti dadi ma raksha kiya hai .(When we were staying in a broken fort ,then some mughal soldiers came to capture us, i fought and killed some soldiers jagnamal uncle helped me.I protected chand aunty and other grandma.)
JB:Kya baat hai Amar Singhji.apne sabka raksha kiya aur shatru ko mar diye.aap ek sache Rajput hai.(wow Amar singh.You protected everyone and killed enemies.You are a true rajput).
KP:Haan Amar Singhji Hume aap par bahut garv hai.(Yes Amar Singh.I am very proud of you.)
Amar smiled at these praises.
AS:Dadi ma Kya aap mere liye apne hatho se bhojan banage aur kilage?(Will you cook for me and feed with your own hands grandma?)
JB:awashya Amar Singhji.(Ofcourse Amar singh)

Amar singh and pratap leave the room.

Finished the first part. Give a review. Tell me if I should continue writing this or not.



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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow nonie! This was beautifully written and loved the bonding between jb and amar. 👏 😳 Amar is simply cute as always and he is a true shoorvir. 😳 I liked the idea a lot and am looking forward to what is in store for us in the coming parts. So please do continue.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nonie welcome to the writer's gang
Amazing start to a wonderful story
Waiting to read more of it


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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ramya06

Wow nonie! This was beautifully written and loved the bonding between jb and amar. 👏 😳 Amar is simply cute as always and he is a true shoorvir. 😳 I liked the idea a lot and am looking forward to what is in store for us in the coming parts. So please do continue.



Thank you for the compliment Ramya. I glad you like that idea. I got this idea when seeing jaiwanta bai hugging amar 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: twilightlover29

Nonie welcome to the writer's gang

Amazing start to a wonderful story
Waiting to read more of it



Thank u for the wonderful compliment Garima . After reading your stories,u gave me a inspiration to write😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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aawww this is so cute please continue writing this
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Hi
I am gone for a meditation course for 15 days. So I will be able update only after that because phones will be taken away. I hope you understand my situation
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That's perfectly understandable enjoy the classes.

Once you come back I want to know about these classes.
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aww...i always wanted to see their bond in serial...now by writing this u made my dream come true...awesome start dr...continue soon
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A BIG welcome to you as a writer dear!! đŸ€—

Great start Nonie... I'm really excited to see how this story progresses!


Love,
RuVa


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