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Posted: 9 years ago
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Her flaws
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It's mystified, how she mask her beauty behind her arrogance,
Her dazzling persona will leave you awed,
Her existence was flawless to world, yet some hidden scars burning her skin, no one had seen it but him,
She was a beam of elegance.

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When he peeled off the first coating,
Her skin was radiating beacon of warmness,
She was a burning flame; her bright luminance can give you light,
But it can burn you down into nothingness

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He scorched her layers further, intrigued to know her better,
Her skin was paled and worn out, with lost hopes
She looked sad, a little broken,
Her eyes were full of fear and pain

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When he had dig deep inside, the last layer,
All he could see, her flawless skin, now glowing with flaws, naked and fragile.
She was suffocating to breathe, in this poisonous air.
Her arrogance, her hopes, her pain and her vulnerability were unleashed now, Which she had kept buried them deep beneath the surface of her flawless world.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#2
It was indeed splendid 👏
Have always admired your stories and now your poetry too is good ^_^
All he could see, her flawless skin, now glowing with flaws, naked and fragile.
Lines which made me smile :)
It was so well written ^_^
And do continue with poetry :D
Thank you for the PM!
Love Ana ❤️
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Posted: 9 years ago
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beautiful dear. your description of a broken girl and how he went deep inside was amazing
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Posted: 9 years ago
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awesome... keep writing 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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speechless it was something out of world 👏 👍🏼
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Its beautiful...loved it 👏
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Posted: 9 years ago
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didu!!!
this is awesome!!
left me speechless!!

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey shivani
After a long time a work from u
That's jus brilliant piece of work from u
The way u had written about her is show stealer
The whole poem was amazing
A beautiful piece of work
"Beautiful" is the word that comes out from my mouth after
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Posted: 9 years ago
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All he could see, her flawless skin, now
glowing with flaws, naked and fragile.
She was suffocating to breathe, in this
poisonous air.


Beautiful writing Riya ^_^ This was one of the best poem I have read in a while. You obviously know I had two persons in my mind while reading this and that just made it all the more endearing because I could imagine everything through your words.

Brilliant!

Chitra :)
Edited by ..MiStLeToE.. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome ,how flawlessly your wrote the poem! Loved it! ^_^

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