SidNi TS : Death plays Cupid

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Please suggest some title although this is written keeping "hospital of love" in mind. But that title doesn't sound good!😆

SidNi TS


Roshni's POV


"Wow it looks so serene from here na? The view of the city! Mumbai ,all are running to make it happen but this city drags you back down!" his voice stopped my track of disturbing thoughts.


I looked around only to see him standing beside me by the railing ,a smile adoring his charming face. He was looking down as if he was totally smitten by the lights that adorned the city.


"Hello, please leave!" I said rather rudely but what do you expect from a girl who is there on the terrace of a building ready to commit suicide.


"Haven't you chosen a rather short building to jump?" he asked and I realized he was so close to me that I couldn't breathe for air. I was about to push him when he moved back and a look of horror crossed his face.


"Oh I know you are confused. Uh ma'am I moved back because you never know today's girls. Who knows you will hold my collar and take me along with you up there?" he pointed up to the clouds and I had a sudden urge to do what he suggested.


As if reading my mind he continued ,"Aww baby wants to do it na?" he asked pulling my cheeks and that was when I felt the last bit of patience I possessed evaporating.


"You good-for-nothing stalker ,just leave me to handle my life or I swear you are going down with me." I said poking a finger at him and he held my hand and pulled me closer to him and I bumped on his chest.


"Leave me." I struggled to get out of his grip but he was really strong. He made me face him and I noticed his features for the first time. Even in the changing lights his face was visible quite clearly. The boyish charm radiated from it and it seemed like God had made him taking out a lot of time.


"Ya ya you can carry on checking me out. I won't charge for it but you know as a favour in exchange I want something!" he said and I realized he was mocking me at first and then grew serious in a split second. How did this guy do that?


I decided it was useless to argue and nodded. He left my waist from his deadly grip and I should have been happy. Note this "I should have been happy" but I wasn't. I was missing his warmth already ,God Roshni get a grip on yourself ,I talked to myself.


"Doesn't anyone love you?" he asked me and I was taken aback. Who was he to question me? I looked in his grave eyes and realized he really wanted me to answer that!


"No ,no one loves me." I said as Zain's face came in front of me. I was about to burst into tears in front of a complete stranger and I wanted to kill myself thinking of this only.


"Don't think of the guy who gave you pain. Isn't there anyone in this whole wide world who loves you?" he again asked a bit more seriousness laced in his tone.


"I said na there's no one to love me." I said as the faces of my mom and dad flashed in front of me. My so-called friends everyone I hated!


"Then I fear you can go ahead." he said showing me a hand asking me to jump down from a five-storey building I was totally determined to do this 15 minutes earlier then what had changed now? Why was I suddenly so hesitant?


I looked at him and found him analyzing something. Now I know what has changed ,this guy has made me doubt myself ,doubt my decision.


"How dare you?" I went and grabbed his shirt rather like an hungry tigress. "Why did you say all that crap?" I asked demanding an answer from the person whom I had just met ,whose name also I didn't know


"Listen ,I have put a doubt in your head which confirms that someone loves you. Just find that someone!" he said and I was lost deep in thoughts again.


"You don't know anything about my life so don't assume things." I said but my voice didn't hold any sense of conviction and if I had noticed it then this FBI guy had for sure.


"What did you call me? FBI guy!" he cracked up in laughter and I made a mockery of myself just before I was about to die. Why did I have to be loud God?


He kept a straight face after alot of laughing and I was ready to hear another lecture but his next words angered me to an unimaginable extent!


He came closer and held my shoulders and staring in my eyes he said ,"I will love you. Please don't do this!" and in the spur of the moment I was so angry that I didn't see anything.


I jerked away his hands as he kept on shouting behind me to stop. The whole world was a selfish place ,this guy thought I was one to mess with ,I was a girl who needed someone and he would love me? What was that supposed to mean? Obviously what every guy wants and he was another one of them. I was a fool to believe he was any different!


I closed my eyes and jumped down. The only thought revolving in my head was "Timmy" and I realized that there was someone who loved me but it was too late. I stared at my hands as I was falling and tears flew out of my eyes.


Siddharth's POV


I was numb. A girl had just fell down from a building in front of my eyes ,I was having tears in my eyes I realized. What is this that I am feeling? Why did I tell her that I will love her and why did she jump all of a sudden?


Halka halka sa guma hai
Jaane kya mujhe hua hai
Har nazar dar badar ajnabi


I ran down at full speed not caring who came on my way ,I pushed everyone and reached near her. She was on the ground blood covered all around her. I couldn't stop my tears for some unknown reason even when I tried dabbing at them every second.


I shook her face to make her get up although I knew it was all vague. "Get up ,get up please." I said and didn't know when the please slipped out from my mouth.


Humko bhi yehi gila hai
Jo bhi aaj kal mila hai
Har kadam dum badam ajnabi


I didn't wait for any more time and picked her up in my arms. All the while I kept staring at her totally like a love-sick guy. I couldn't gauge the possible explanation behind my actions. Why was I so concerned for this girl lying in my arms? I took a cab and asked the driver to drive fast ,I could hear my panicked voice all the way to the hospital.


As soon as we reached the hospital ,I shouted around for doctors and as soon as she was taken in I collapsed feeling my world shattering for a girl whose name I didn't even know.


Iss taraf jo hai udaasi
Iss taraf bhi hai zara si


I stared at her from the window pane as she was getting operated. Why do I feel so connected with her? I decided to find out about her when the police came to investigate about the suicide and my involvement in it. Seeing my disheveled state they didn't push it further and satisfied themselves on what all I told.


Dil ki raahon ke do ajnabi
Anjaana kehne ko hi tha
Mera tha woh jo bhi tha anjaani
Hai magar nahi ke tu
Hai yahin kahin


They handed me over a bracelet and wallet they got from the place where she fell. I put my hand forward to take her belongings and seeing her bracelet my world stood still. I turned towards the door again and the tears didn't seem to stop anymore. The policeman patted my shoulder in a bid to console me but the revelation I had just witnessed had shattered me.


This was so sheer injustice on God's part. How could this happen to me? She was there fighting for her life while I clutched my head for any of it to make sense. The pain in my head and heart didn't seem to subside as I realized she was my "Ronny". I had finally met my Ronny after 10 years but life was playing games with us. This time I won't let anyone separate us, not even GOD!
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skinnypal thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oh god aayu what if i tell you i wanted to write a sequence in this song? Like yesterday only? 😆
So, it was written very well. I loved it to the core 😉
The dialogues were bang on, the feelings were well described! 😊
Ronny and Timmy 😆 Nice nicknames 😉
And yeah i love this song, the description was good! 👏
Waiting for the next part to see how Roshni will react 😳
Continue soon.. pehle this one 😆
Edited by skinnypal - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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How can u come wid a unique idea each nf evry tym that's y al ask u to write a story...awesome wriitng😃😳👏
It was aweose I loved it to d core..😳😳my God..d way rosh felt some connect same way sod felt...oh god...poor rosh..so many bad things to her... I loved sid s funny dialogues wben in serious situation...
I loved d hospital scene ..d way he was very scared...nd realised it was his Ronny..rosh also thought of sod ..roshni also thought...aww.now eagerly waiitn for d back story of Ronny nd Timmy... Continue soon..eagerly waiitn
P.s keep it as hospital of love itslef..😛 nice name
Edited by Purni12 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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wow superb do i am satisfied with this hospital of love stry of u rs so thy are long lost friends timmy and ronnny
thank god it wasnt tomy i mean the name😆
memory loss ronny ko hosaktha hai na she fell frm height😳

do continue soon starry
Edited by prathe - 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: skinnypal

Oh god aayu what if i tell you i wanted to write a sequence in this song? Like yesterday only? 😆

So, it was written very well. I loved it to the core 😉
The dialogues were bang on, the feelings were well described! 😊
Ronny and Timmy 😆 Nice nicknames 😉
And yeah i love this song, the description was good! 👏
Waiting for the next part to see how Roshni will react 😳
Continue soon.. pehle this one 😆


Lol ok pal really?? Haha write then!😉 thank you ,glad you liked how I wrote it! Glad u liked it so much pal!😳
Oh nicknames were nice? Well they were spontaneous..😆
Okay boss pehle this one! Ya see how Roshni reacts.😛
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Originally posted by: Purni12

How can u come wid a unique idea each nf evry tym that's y al ask u to write a story...awesome wriitng😃😳👏

It was aweose I loved it to d core..😳😳my God..d way rosh felt some connect same way sod felt...oh god...poor rosh..so many bad things to her... I loved sid s funny dialogues wben in serious situation...
I loved d hospital scene ..d way he was very scared...nd realised it was his Ronny..rosh also thought of sod ..roshni also thought...aww.now eagerly waiitn for d back story of Ronny nd Timmy... Continue soon..eagerly waiitn
P.s keep it as hospital of love itslef..😛 nice name


Don't know it's just songs that trigger ideas in my mind.😉 thanks purni ,glad u liked it! Hehe glad u liked the funny punchlines of sid even when Roshni was about to jump.😆
Glad u liked how the hospital scene shaped up. Backstory ahh u will know soon! Ok let's see if I keep it that only!😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
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aayu nice start..loved it👏u described their feelings perfectly😛...Ronny n timmy are childhood friends😆thats why they felt some connection towards each other😳But i didnt expect her to jump😆anyways looking forward for HOL😉
Edited by ChandzLoveSidNi - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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titles
1) hospital ne mila di jodi

2) accidental friends

3) Fall of love

4) death plays cupid
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Originally posted by: prathe

wow superb do i am satisfied with this hospital of love stry of u rs so thy are long lost friends timmy and ronnny

thank god it wasnt tomy i mean the name😆
memory loss ronny ko hosaktha hai na she fell frm height😳

do continue soon starry


Thanks mirchi ,it means you aren't satisfied with other stories?😆
Ya maybe they are friends ,maybe not.😉 Tommy sounds like a dog🤣 haan Ho toh sakta hai..😳
Will do Mirchi!
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Originally posted by: prathe

titles

1) hospital ne mila di jodi

2) accidental friends

3) Fall of love

4) death plays cupid


Oh I liked 3 N 4. Especially 4 mirchi ,I guess I'll go with it if I don't get better ones. Thanks!😊

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