ViDha New fanfic : Shaapit (cursed), complete 2 parts

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Hello all the wonderful people in the IKRS forum,
I am Teddy. I started watching IKRS about a week ago, and since then the show has grown on me. Here's my first attempt at writing a short fictional encounter between Viplav-Dhaani.

Hope you all will enjoy it. I will be very glad if it reaches maximum number of IKRS fans.

Characters: Viplav, Dhaani, two (imaginary) friends of Viplav and the famous 'ghat' of Benaras 😊

It's written entirely from Viplav's perspective 😳

Disclaimer : The characters are the creative properties of channel and makers. I own nothing. No intention to hurt any religious beliefs and apologies in advance for any mistake.

Shaapit (Cursed)

The three of us were chilling at our familiar spot, the 'ghat'.


People normally go to clubs or discotheque for hanging out with pals...and here we were, lolling around in one of the holiest places in India, doing sweet nothing, with thoughts bubbling inside our heads that were far from spiritual.

Lying spread eagle on the cool stone, I stared at the sky blankly.

My mind was far from blank though. The strange restlessness, which had accompanied me life-long, only grew stronger as days inched towards my departure.

"Bhai, America jaa ke tum hum logon ko bhul toh nahi jaoge?" said my buddy DJ, sounding uncharacteristically thoughtful.

DJ, aka Dwij Nath Pandit, was one of those dreamer from the small town who did little except dreaming.

I knew them too well, as a few years back, I was one among them too.

DJ's long list of wishes starts right from his name. "Seriously, what was maa-babujee thinking? Doing my naam karan or taking revenge on the newborn baby!" He had this special talent of tireless ranting for hours about the things that's wrong in his life.

It's difficult to pacify a guy whose problems start with his name.

Take my other friend, Kundan Damodar Shashtri who has rechristened himself as KD.

"Baba, samjha kar yaar. Nobody in her sane mind would date a guy named Kundan Shastri." KD used to say ruefully.

He had a point though.

"Baba, itna soch mein kyon padh gaye? Tum humko, Banaras ko miss karoge na?" KD prodded again.

I pretended not to hear him. Perhaps because the answer was not known to me either.

Maybe I was scared of the truth and even more scared to say it out loud.

This ancient city, with it's dusty, narrow lanes and people with narrower minds suffocated me sometimes...and I was not the one who could be chained easily.

"Tumhe kissi Angrej ke ghar paida hona chahiye tha." my sister used to say.

Perhaps she had been telling the truth all along.

"Baba, woh dekho tumhari item aa rahi hai." DJ's voice cut through the tangled web of thought fogging my mind.

It amused me sometimes how he had no sense of place and propriety of language at all. This meant he was free from the shackles of decorum and prejudices as well.

I straightened myself up and stretched my hands. The unmissable white saree caught my eyes instantly.

A carefree gust of wind floated from the side of the river, ruffling my hair. It then changed direction abruptly and started playing with her saree.

"Main abhi aaya." I jumped down on the dusty road, busily wiping the back of my denim with my hands.

For a few minutes, I followed the white shadow without thinking.

Calling her or trying to stop her would not work, specially in the busy street. I had tried that before and each encounter ended with her near-magical disappearance from my eyesight.

Soon we reached a deserted and relatively dark lane. The dark curtains of evening was settling fast. There was nobody in the vicinity, except us.

I cleared my throat and called out "Ae ladki."

She stopped dead on her way. Then she turned round with a painfully sluggish motion. Those big, almond-shaped orbs fell on me. I could see the transformation from wild-eyed curiosity to blazing contempt in a span of few moments.

I took long strides towards her, lest she vanished again. She seemed rooted to the spot though, showing no sign of movement.

"Hi. Remember me?" I was standing on her way, deliberately blocking her path. I'd be damned if she escaped unceremoniously this time.

I was looking straight into her eyes. Strangely, she didn't avert her gaze. We stood there in silent, neither backing down from this cold war, before she spoke.

"Tum mera picha kyon kar rahe ho?" her voice was eerily calm, which was a little unnerving, but I didn't show it on my face.

"Tumhe pata toh hai. Aur kitni baar bulwaogi? Achcha chalo I will say it one more time. I. AM. SORRY. Aab toh mujhe maaf kardo. Warna dadi mujhse baat nahi karegi." I folded my hands dramatically, to emphasize my point.

"Nahi milegi. Aab jao." she was about to walk away when I gripped her wrist.

"Aare, tumhe baat samajh mein nahi aati kya? I said sorry, aab baat ko khatam karo na. TV serial jaisa kheench kyon rahi ho yaar ek issue ko?" I was getting exasperated with her antics.

"Hath chhodo, warna bahut pachtaoge." She tried to free her arm from my grip.

"Pehle promise karo poori baat sune bina bhaag nahi jaogi. Waise Milkha Singh tumhara rishtedaar hain kya?" I loosened my grip and stepped back.

She was eyeing me through her long lashes. Finally she nodded and I released her arm.

She whirled round instantly and hurried across the lane, trying to escape from me, apparently.

"I'd be damned if I let you go again." I muttered under my breath.

"Aye ladki. Ruk jao. Arre suno toh sahi." I hurried after her.

"Suno. Main akhri baar bol rahi hoon. Mera picha mat karo. " She pointed her fingers at me threateningly. "Aur yeh 'ladki, ladki' kya laga rakha hai? Naam hai mera...Dhaani, samjhe?"

"All right, all right, Dhaani jee, aapko 'ladki' bulane ke liye phir se maafi chahta hoon. Aap doh minute meri baat sunenge, please." I threw my hands in the air apologetically.

"Thik hai. Jo kehna hai, usse jaldi kaho aur yeh tamashaa khatam karo." she gave me a deadly glare.

"Yeh jagah aise baaton ke liye sahi nahi hai. Kahin aur chale?" I smiled at her encouragingly.

"Kahan?" she clearly had trust issues, specially with me. Well, who could blame her!

"Koi aisi jagah, jahaan itna sannata na ho."

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We were standing right outside the badi maidan, where the 'Swatantrata divas mela' was in full swing.

After standing nearly for five minutes and suffering numerous mosquito bites, I began to lose it.

"Ab andar chale, ya uske liye bhi invitation deni padhegi?" I gestured her to move ahead.

"Nahi nahi, main kaise andar ja sakti hoon! Dimaag kharab ho gaya hai tumhara? Koi agar dekh liya toh hum soch bhi nahi sakte kya anarth hoga". she shuddered at the thought.

"Arre, yeh kya baat hui! Azaadi ka mela hai. Thodi azadi toh tumhe bhi milni chahiye." I was honestly taken aback by her reaction.

She looked at me with a strange expression in her eyes. Her lips quivered, as if she wanted to say something, but finally chose to remain silent.

"Look, you won't get this opportunity again. You see those girls. Some of them are wearing saffron, some of them green, and some of them are wearing white. If someone sees you, we can easily tell that you are a part of the 'Swatantrata parade'." I mentally patted myself for this brilliant idea. "Aab chale? Mithai ki itni achchi khusboo aa rahi hai, mere muh me toh pani aa raha hai."

She finally stepped inside the carnival, somehow reluctantly though.

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NEXT PART : SEE BELOW 😉
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CONTINUED...

"Batao tum kya khaogi? Jalebi-rabdi-sewai halwa - jamun ek se badhkar ek mithai milti hai inn dukano mein?" I took a deep breath, filling my senses with the mouth-watering smell of sweets.

"Shiv Shiv! Main yeh sab nahi khati." she shook her head firmly.

"Toh phir kya pasand hai tumhe? Panipuri, hawa mithai yeh sab cheezein?" I raised my eyebrow.

"Arre nahi nahi. Main toh surya-ast ke baad sirf phal khati hoon, ya phir raat ko sone se pehle thodi dudh pee ke so jati hoon." her innocent gaze was on me again.

"Achcha!! Mujhe nahi pata tha ke dharmik log sirf hawa kha ke pet bharate hai. Bhai main toh bahut kuch khane wala hoon, If you want to join me then you are most welcome. Agge tumhari marzi." I shrugged.

"Main nahi kha sakti. Yeh paap hai." She pressed her lips together and gave me a helpless look.

Her words suddenly angered me. I rubbed my temple impatiently. "Arre, umr kitni hai tumhari? Badi aayi paap-punya ke baat karne wali! Itni si toh ho, aur baatein itni badi badi?"

"Tum toh itne bade ho, phir bhi yeh tameez nahi ke ladkiyon se unki umr nahi poochni chahiye?" She rolled her eyes at me.

I gaped at her in disbelief. "How old are you, please tell me again?"

*Does she even understands half of the heavyweight words coming out of her mouth?*

"Tumne abhi tak bataya nahi tumhe kya pasand hai? You know jab main chota bachcha tha, main bahut he gusse wala tha, ekdum 'grumpy kid'. Then my dadi used to feed me lots of sweets, specially prepared by her. Aur phir mera gussa ek dum se shant ho jata tha." I smiled fondly at the memory.

"Tum bhi mithai kha liya karo. Kya pata tumhara gussa bhi thanda ho jaye!" I winked at her.

"Khane se sirf 'rakshash' ka gussa thanda hota hai, insaanon ki nahi." the corner of her lips twisted in a rare smile.

I liked the twinkling of her eyes with the hint of that smile.

I probably liked it more than I should.

My eyes followed her as she walked to the nearest 'panipuri' stall and ordered "Bhaiya, yahan ek patta dena."

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"Ouch! itni zor se nahi, mujhe dard ho raha hai." I yelled over the rush of wind.

"Kya karoon. Humein bahut darr lag raha hai." she screamed.

"Isse pehle kabhi try nahi kiya kya?" I tried to ignore the sharp pain in my arm where her fingers were clawing my flesh.

"Shiv jee ki kasam, kabhi nahiii" she squeezed her eyes shut and chanted under her breath.

"Matlab jhule mein yeh tumhara pehli baar hai?" I couldn't suppress a chuckle. "Aur shayad akhri baar bhi?"

She didn't answer. Her face had turned a little pale, but the rush of colour to her cheeks told me somehow she was secretly enjoying the ride.

The giant Ferris wheel took another spin, and I could feel the air leaving my lungs with the steep drop. Beside me, she gave a small squeak. "Shiv Shiv. Shiv Shiv." I could hear her chanting.

Before I could stop myself, a hearty laugh escaped my throat. Soon enough, I was laughing madly. This whole thing, to me, was utter crazy madness.

I liked this madness.

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"Arre itni tez kyon chal rahi ho? Andhera hai thoda samhalke chalo." I hurried to match her pace in the near darkness.

"Lagta hai baarish anewali hai. Tum thoda tez nahi chal sakte? Meri mai bahut paresan hogi. Sab meri galati hai. Mujhe tumhare sath jana hi nahi chahiye thi." she wailed in despair.

I couldn't believe her. A few minutes back, she was just fine; gushing over the little 'pocket Ramayana' she bought in themela, giggling and eating 'barf ka gola' (ice popsickle) like a teenager (well, she probably was a teenager); and suddenly I became the 'rakshash' again.

"Tumhara problem kya hai? Tum logon se itni darrti kyon ho?" I felt my temper rising again "Thodi hans logi toh kya aafataa jayegi? Hanste hue achchi lagti ho tum, pata hai. Itni sadu nahi lagti."

She stopped to look at me. I could only make out her silhouette in the darkness.

"Tumhara baal safed kaise ho gaya? Itni kam umr main!" the tips of her fingers touched my hair.

"Ohh! mere baal safed nahi hue, Dhaani jee. Yeh woh safed rang hai jo aap se maafi mangne ki chakkar mein mujhe taufe mein mili hain." I closed my eyes, trying to ignore the heat creeping up my neck when she touched me.

"Badi pakki rang hai. Doh deenon se utri nahi." I joked.

"Mujh pe 18 saal se yeh rang chadi hai, aur tum do din mein paresan ho gaye." there was a hint of smile in her voice.

Her words stirred something deep inside me. For a few moments, I stood silently.

I thought of saying something to her. Something which could ease her pain. The way she was smiling back there in the mela...the way her hand clutched mine...we were so close in the tiny seat of the ride!

A silver flash of light pierced the sky, followed by a deafening rumble of thunder. In no time, fat droplets of water started pouring from the heaven.

"He Shiv jee, ab kya hoga?" I heard her muffled cry.

"Jaldi chalo, uss mandir ki taraf." I clutched her wrist and ran towards the nearby Shiv mandir.

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We both were panting breathlessly, leaning against the wall of the temple.

"Andhere mein kuch dikhai nahi de raha. Aab main ashram kaise jaoon?" she gasped.

"Baarish thoda kam ho jaane do, phir main tumhe tumhari ashram tak chhod dunga." I tried to console her, trying to catch my breath.

"Tumhe badnami se bilkul darr nahi lagta?" her voice trembled.

"Mujhe kissi se bhi darr nahi lagta. Yahan tak tumhari Shiv jee se bhi nahi." I grinned.

"Aise baatein sun na bhi paap hai. Shiv jee naraz ho jayenge. Agar Devta naraaz ho gaye, toh Shrap (curse) denge." she pleaded.

"Bakwas. Bilkul bakwas bull..." before I could say anymore, she pressed her fingers on my mouth to shut me up.

The strange sensation swirled inside my chest again. Her wet skin was smelling like jasmine. Her breath was coming in shallow gasps. The mad thumping in my chest matched her erratic breathing.

"Aisi baatein keh kar kya tum apne aap ko 'shaapit' (cursed) karna chahte ho?" she said in a barely audible whisper.

"Aaj ke baad hum dono 'shaapit' hone wale hai." I whispered back.

"Kyon?" she breathed.

I leaned my face slowly towards her. My senses filled with her wet earthy fragrance. Softly, very softly, like caressing a bird, my lips brushed against hers.

Her entire frame trembled, like the flame of a candle in the wind. I sensed she was about to collapse and wrapped my arms around her firmly.

I wanted to stop. I knew my one act of craziness could ruin so many lives. but the moment I felt the touch of her wet, soft lips against mine, desires raced like fire through my veins. I deepened the kiss, passionately devouring the warmth of her lips.

For the briefest of moment, her statue like frame seemed to awaken from a deep slumber, but the next moment, I found myself being violently pushed away from her.

"Rakshash! Rakshash ho tum!" her voice broke. She buried her face in her hands and turned away from me.

"Haan, woh toh main hoon." I mumbled.

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😊 Do let me know how you feel about the story.

Thanks for reading.

Teddy❤️

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow..
What an amazing OS Teddy!

Those dialoges, the innocence of both Viplav and Dhani, then that kiss..show how beautifully their relationship may shape up. ❤️

This romantic story drove me far away from rarth to heaven.🤗

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HI TEDDY LOVED UR STORY YAAR IT'S SHORT & SWEET.😃
THE ROMANCE OF VIDHA IS DEFINITELY ALL R LOOKING FORWARD TO.

THE KISS SCENE OH GOSH WISH TO SEE THIS IN THE SHOW & THE WAY HE SAID FROM TODAY BOTH R GOING TO BE CURSED WAS 😳
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Omg!!!! Teddy, you're such a teddy...
😊 Awesome story...liked d mela part very much...
Den those dialogues, yeh rang 18 saal se chada hai mujhpe aur tum do din mein pareshaan ho gaye...😊kudos yaar...
Please do write more...nd pm me wen u do so...
Loved it...😊
Love,
Pratiti
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swasan_naga, kashish_777, max_thakker, AISHU183,


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Beautifully written...loved it nd more the part when rakshas kissed her..a passionate kissed..she calls him rakshas without any reason now he just give a reason to call him rakshas...wonderful.. do write more...
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Warm Welcome Teddy Dear 🤗
Wonderful story with a wonderful concept 👏
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Thank you so much guys...for your love and support

Angelicdeepti, tarun1234567, zeba_kausar, tahera57, Guruvishva


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