How to survive a break up. Two shots. MEHBEER. UPDATE PAGE 2.

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ammygurl

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: Sanskruti16499
Fabulous
it's an outstanding
loved it

Thank you! 😊

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Manita

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Posted: 10 years ago

#42

What a write-up !
You are a fabulous and gifted writer with a knack of expressing feelings so vividly in words.
Kudos !

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TeekhiMishti

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Posted: 10 years ago

#43

This was one of the first writings i had read on mehbeer. And lemme tell you i am one huge sucker for sadism and pain. Girl have you captured their 8 years journey and how.! I am in awe. 👏👏

I am so sorry i never got to comment earlier. But i thought for such a splendid piece of work the comment should be appropriate.

PART 1

If anything is better than pain and suffering it is the ML's pain and suffering 😆 I loved how you showed abeers transition. His every effort could be felt through your words. And how he failed could be clearly implied. 👏

I loved the dating part- 8 years is too soon? 😆 100 years would be for abeer.

I loved how he did everything because of her, changed so much, yet he never got over her and that could be clearly seen.

The ending conclusion was beautiful for the 8 year story. He hated her yet when she came back she bought back a part of him with her.

He wanted to torture her but seeing her bought him peace of mind and he could finally sleep.

He never really moved on.

This was such a pleasure to read . :) Abeer is a cutie pie kameena. bas 😆

Loved the way you integrated the orange shirt ;)

PART 2

Firstly thank you for writing a sequel. To see abeers journey and then to see mehers journey through the same was beautiful. You have really put their 8 years on paper. it is like reading each of their diary.

Meher is definitely the one who suffered more. And i feel really bad for her. But poor abeer bottled everything up and now is lashing out and no one even cares.

I loved how she is in denial just like abeer. and thinks she has succeeded but one look at him and everything crumbles. this badtameez dil i tell you 😆

Thank you for writing this amazing piece of work. You bridged the gap between their divorce and 8 years meet perfectly. now even if we dont get how mehbeer survived these 8 years i can read your OS and imagine that this is exactly how it would've been. Do write more. Preferrably sadistic 😆

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hilly

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Posted: 10 years ago

#44

Dudeee. 2 shots has been so so brilliant. I'm in love reading their inner monologues- be it Abeer or Meher.
Loved how you coordinated the 2 shots with each other's memories & loved how you started off with the office memories... the part where both wanted to hurl at each other, shaking each other's senses and asking .. 'you're happy without me.' Love the realization of Meher that the arrogance and that devious smirk that oozes out of Abeer is anything but winning and to be proud of- rather he's just burning in his own pain and rejoicing that his heart has start beating once more- he was never over her and he has a purpose to breathe. her. Same with Meher. Felt for both - whether it was Abeer's smirk or Meher's poker-face being emotionless- both were outstanding!

Loved the humour and sarcasm you put in with Abeer- suits him so well. 8 years too soon and swigs of Jack Daniel's and that orange shirt- such amazing perspectives to his inner monologue compared to the outward arrogance. I love his part a tad bit more. just cuz.
& ending of Meher's- omgsh. They're hearts are deff outuned to another. She's defff been in denial just like Abeer.
Flashbacks in the show are soo aaamazing. can't wait until everrything is out.

I just can't get enough of what I read. The feeels the memories give me. omgsh. They feel so relatable though I know they aren't real and the words are like playing like a reel in front of me. What irony- surviving a break-up and yet never really had survived in the real sense- since they're so in love, hate themselves for it and never really detached from each other to even call it a break. Everything hits off real in your 2 shots. I can't even...

The years' gap in this makes so much sense what they've been through- such torment that it has killed them. hope they show flashbacks in the show of how they deal with the 'seperation'-al breakup'

I'm so hooked to BD and it's not enough. I wish I hadn't caught up as quickly as I did. Kinda obsessed with these two!

I would defff love to read more and moreee.

& I would love your take on. - Meher's box of secret and the whole FIL's alimony check. There's something fishy with that and Abeer dad was deff involved. The suspense is killingg me.
I wonder what it turns out to be in the show.

keep writinggg! <33

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