How to survive a break up. Two shots. MEHBEER. UPDATE PAGE 2. - Page 4

Originally posted by: meerab...

That's a fantastic piece of writing...hats off dear👏!!!
I loved each and every word of it...specially the kheer part and when he was outside her house and she kissed him...so sweet😳...
Please come up with more stories dear...❤️.🤗

Originally posted by: beauty14

If you thought it wasn't possible, you've done it again! Wow. Just brilliant!👍🏼 you did, too! You made my day! Again.

I loved loved loved it! ❤️ mutual, I loved writing it for you guys! 😆My favorite part was the last paragraph. Lol not because the chapter was bad (don't take it that way, I loved it😃), but because the last paragraph was a perfect summation of Meher's feelings. That right there is exactly how both Meher and Abeer feel but refuse to acknowledge in the show. The magic hasn't died, it's just been buried down.

I really love how both parts correlate with one another. Throughout both parts, they both recall the memories which at one time were so beautiful, but now just the thought of those times feel suffocating. Sums it up. Yes. Thanks so much! It is so kind of you to give me all these pretty words I don't really deserve! 😊

And YES! I'd love to read more of your work! That's not even a question. 😆

Thanks for PM! Do write soon. I will! Bless you! 😉

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

Brilliant. U deserve a huge applause for this. Do I? You are very kind. Thank you!
Firstly u wrote two pov's and describing exactly same mental state and keeping characters close to canon is very hard. But u managed it without the characters being OOC. That was ge intention, certainly. Thanks for giving words to my thoughts.
I don't think I need to commend u on ur writing because it shows its own worth. Clear, precise and yet sharp to make the emotional bar of the story even higher.
One of the best stories I have read till date.

Originally posted by: princessaaliya

wow, wow, WOW! 👏

just brilliant!

do keep writing!

Originally posted by: cutiesanaa

i hav no wrds twas awsum ⭐️ 👏 👏
brilliant
keep updating more n pls pm me!! 😳

Originally posted by: tikit

Love do continue.

Originally posted by: IttiSiKriti

Edit #2: Aright *takes deep breath*, so finally. Here we go.

Ok for starters, I'm really loving the sarcastic "nonchalant-How-To-Manual-esque" tone you've used.

Ugh the moments, the moments :') Truly though, that's what makes break ups from significant relationships the hardest, almost everything reminds you of them. You've got that down really well, amazing as a writer you are.

"One look at her and all your walls crumple down to the ground, all at once, because she gets on your nerves and she didn't even try."

^By far my favorite line. To me, this in essence captures the struggle they are going through quite well.

Ahh. Oh gosh. Ok. Wow. That was, um.

I don't even know how to articulate myself here.

First time in a really long time I read something through with a giant smile on my face even though I still had that nuanced heavy-hearted feeling showing up here and there as you blend the sarcasm with the reality of his bleeding heart. To say I loved it would be an understatement to what your writing made me feel. As of now, I can only say I'm super excited and relieved that there's more.

Onto the next part.

Part 2:

Aggh, I couldn't comment up until now because I didn't want to stop reading. I'm genuinely feeling for these two characters that I know don't exist. But this, "How do people really survive break ups? You don't know because you didn't." It really touches a cord. I feel like I know her, I can feel what she's feeling, I understand! That is the genius of your writing.

And that is your biggest tragedy.

Gosh that line. What do I do now?

At this point, nothing I say can be enough. Please write more and let me know when you do.

Finally, thank you Spree, for this experience.

Kriti

*lets breath out*

Originally posted by: VJDIPA

Ek aur chakka maara writer ne aur reader clean bold🤗

Originally posted by: devilaonmoon

WOWW!! 👏👏

Originally posted by: ..Steph..

Well written !

If I said it was touching, it would be an understatement ! That was his side of the story, what we all are unaware of is Meher's side of the story ! do you think maybe you can whip up something from her point of view? :)