OS: Darmiyaan - When hearts beat in unison...

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi guys! I was writing a fanfiction series with my friend Zainab di. Since I have joined IF I decided to post this from my user so that Zain di can update the following chapter. Since this is my first try on a fanfiction, I would love some feedback so all comments and feedbacks are appreciated. Please bear in mind that this fanfiction is based on what happened before the show took a 9 month leap.

Silence... A pin drop silence filled the room...

Ragini shed a tear in the darkness...

She was all alone... Yes, all alone... Her grief was beyond words... Darker than darkness and absolutely nothing could make here heart lighter...

Her children were upset with her... And she had no one to console her... Her poor boy was suffering a long time in jail and her daughter was angry with her marriage... She was a strong woman but this time, nothing could stop her tears... She was angry with herself because she had upset her love... She had been unkind to her children and above all, she had been unkind to her Nachiket...

Yes, she was a mother but the situation had made her say harsh things to her Nachiket...

Another tear trickled down her cheeks...

She missed him so much... He was soon going to leave back to U.S. with his children after she had decided that they would separate...

A song broke the silence... Her phone began ringing...

Saathiya yeh tune kya kiya

Beliya yeh tune kya kiya

Maine kiya, tera intazaar

Itna karo na mujhe pyaar

Her hands shivered as she answered the call... She gathered all her strength to pick up the phone and didn't bother to look at who had called... She was undoubtedly sure that it was him...

"Hello... Kaun?" she asked... Her voice was heavy with sobbing...

"Ragini, woh main bol raha hoon..."

"Nachiket..." she just couldn't help it and broke down...

"Ragini! Sab kuch theek toh hai na?" He began to get worried...

"Nachiket... Mujhse raha nahi jaa raha hai... I need you Nachiket..." she spoke from the bottom of her heart...

"Ragini tumhe kya hua hai? Main abhi aa raha hoon..." He cut the call and left to her place immedietly...

He arrived at her place and saw her crying profusely in the corner of the room... It was past midnight...

She turned around to find him looking at her... Her eyes were red and she needed someone to console her...

He sat down next to her and held her hands and kissed them... Surprisingly, she didn't refuse or move away... He slowly wiped her tears...

"Jaanti ho na? Nahi dekh sakhta tumhe rote hue..." His eyes began to moisten...

She put her head on his shoulder and cried her heart out... Unknowingly, he began to cry too and his tears flowed into her hair...

"Forgive me Ragini." He said... His voice was full of guilt...

"Maaf toh maine tumhe bohot pehle hi kar diya tha Nachiket... Par khudko maaf nahi kar paayi main... Main haar gayi... I have failed as a mother Nachiket..."

"Khud ko dosh kyu de rahi ho Ragini? Galti hum dono ki hai... Its us who have failed as parents... Not you alone Ragini..."

"Nachiket main jaa rahi hoon... Marne ke alaava aur koi raasta nai bacha mere liye... Main jaa rahi hoon aur suicide karungi..." she got up and freed her hand from him and walked out of the room...

"Ragini! Yeh tum kya kar rahi ho... Ragini wait tum please meri baat samjho sab kuch theek ho jayega... Ragini please aisa mat karo..." he got up and walked after her...

She was completely broken and nothing could stop her tears... She ran up the stairs and walked up to the terrace... Hot tears kept rolling down her cheeks... Every tear felt like he was stabbed and his heart was bleeding... Nachiket followed her and stopped dead when he saw her ready to jump...

"Ragini! Yeh tum kya karne jaa rahi ho? Ragini tumhare bina koi zindagi nahi hai... Ragini please don't do this..." his heart had stopped beating...

His alarm got him crashing back to reality...

Nachiket had been sleeping and he was at Karan's place... In 2 days he was going back to U.S. with his sister, Pam and his 3 kids, Aagham, Suhani and Ranbir.

Phew... Mujhe toh laga ki meri puri duniya khatam ho gayi thi... Nahi... Yeh toh sapna hai... God knows how she is right now... Ab toh bas bohot ho gaya... Arre after all she's a mother... Uspe kya beethi hogi uss waqt sirf wohi jaanti hai... I really can't afford to lose her again... I need you Ragini... I really need you...

Tumhara naam mere dil ke har dhadkan pe likha hai... Tumhare bina zindagi matlab jeethe jee marr jaana... Kuch bhi ho jaye par I will win you back...


Fin.

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MansurKhan56 thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Superbly scripted Dear 👏.Keep it up...😛

Lol I can't add such beautiful songs in my FF updates😆


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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: MAK56


Superbly scripted Dear 👏.Keep it up...😛

Lol I can't add such beautiful songs in my FF updates😆


Thanks a bunch. :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Simi darling " sathiya yh tune kya kiya" update it soon dear. Lovely.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: poojadas77

Simi darling " sathiya yh tune kya kiya" update it soon dear. Lovely.

Thank u so so much pooja di...hopefully zain di will update next but if she is unable to find time i will update :) thanks once again
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Posted: 10 years ago
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👏 👏

Loadsss of lovee baby 🥱

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: ZainabSidd

👏 👏

Loadsss of lovee baby 🥱


Thanks di!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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My darling Simi joined IF😳
This was amazing! Beautifully written Simi! That song in between added the flavour and those last beautiful lines spiced up your update. Really well written. So that was his dream! Turn the dreams into reality dear!


Waiting for the next update eagerly! Please hurry:)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: RaginiJoshi

My darling Simi joined IF😳

This was amazing! Beautifully written Simi! That song in between added the flavour and those last beautiful lines spiced up your update. Really well written. So that was his dream! Turn the dreams into reality dear!


Waiting for the next update eagerly! Please hurry:)


Wow sucha wonderful compliment from my idol?!! Thnk u sooo much ragini di thts very sweet of u... Reality banne ke liye thoda sa space chahiye neil ragini ko... they will begin reminiscing their past... btw the song is the ringtone lol... but thanks for such luvly feedback thats very sweet of u :) 😊😳😛
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: AngelsFlyAlone


Wow sucha wonderful compliment from my idol?!! Thnk u sooo much ragini di thts very sweet of u... Reality banne ke liye thoda sa space chahiye neil ragini ko... they will begin reminiscing their past... btw the song is the ringtone lol... but thanks for such luvly feedback thats very sweet of u :) 😊😳😛


Nice ringtone 😆

Seriously well done! Looking forward for how the story unfolds. You write really well. Keep writing and keep entertaining us:)

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