4 AM: A time of suspended pain

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Hey guys!
SO, the episode left most( all?) of us pretty emotional..
Amidst all these beautifully-worded posts, I did not have much else to add that already didn't there...
So I penned it down the way I knew: in verse.
It's a short one (thank God!) and is inspired from one of the things Rida said in her reply to my comment on her post

I will unravel today,
That iron-sheathed thread of softest silk,
That heart that hid years of pain,
That rusted iron is cracked, broken;
It rusted when your tears fell on my hand
lovingly, painfully.
I felt like I deserved love (maybe)
I saw myself in the light of your eyes
And I...
I liked myself.
You unpicked each knot,
with every smile,
every gentle touch,
you pulled me back.
You pushed me away:
But I was always yours.

This thread,
here,
I give you all of broken me.
piece me as you will.
( if you want me to stay);
I give you this broken soul
( it was always yours)
mend it if you wish.

Unraveling,
I found myself in your arms,
held together by your gentle,
firm touch.

Hold me, please.
I have no more threads to bind
myself with;
Hold me tight
so i can finally close my eyes
And sleep:
It is 4 am

Geet

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Lyrical and musical like your name Geet
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Geet its brilliant . I aint a person who read poems butMaNan had made me not just read it but understand it to its depthness
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Geet - Oh God these words , I cannot , just cannot. You just took me back to the episode and those emotions. Cannot thank writers and PaNi for acing it and your words, mind-numbing.
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WOAAAH OMG WHAT WAS THAT GEET? I don't even have words like WOAAH. i'm spell bound and i just freak let me connect some thoughts and words together because this is so deep and so beautiful and so wonderfully penned and so lyrical and amazing and just struck a chord so hard with my heart, took me back to the episode and their emotions, him, wow!

Such poignancy with which you've written this.
WOW.
DUDE WHAT EVEN.
WRITE MORE MORE MORE! YOU NEED TO!!

THIS WAS SO GOOD and makes me all emotional again. The unraveling begin, only in her arms, can he unravel and he does, the undoing, undone he is. WOW. IM SO EMOTIONAL AAJ!!!

Your words and our boy <33 :'))

Rida
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Originally posted by: AnomanderRake

Lyrical and musical like your name Geet


Aww, thanks Adhi🤗
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Originally posted by: fan145

Geet its brilliant . I aint a person who read poems butMaNan had made me not just read it but understand it to its depthness


🤗YAY!! i love it when a non-poetry reader reads and likes my poems!!
The things babies make us do, eh?
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This is so beautiful Geet!!!<3
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Originally posted by: charminggenie


Geet - Oh God these words , I cannot , just cannot. You just took me back to the episode and those emotions. Cannot thank writers and PaNi for acing it and your words, mind-numbing.


Thanks Genie🤗
It felt so so painful and wonderful that we all had to write, na?😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: MaybeSomeday...

WOAAAH OMG WHAT WAS THAT GEET? I don't even have words like WOAAH. i'm spell bound and i just freak let me connect some thoughts and words together because this is so deep and so beautiful and so wonderfully penned and so lyrical and amazing and just struck a chord so hard with my heart, took me back to the episode and their emotions, him, wow!

Such poignancy with which you've written this.
WOW.
DUDE WHAT EVEN.
WRITE MORE MORE MORE! YOU NEED TO!!

THIS WAS SO GOOD and makes me all emotional again. The unraveling begin, only in her arms, can he unravel and he does, the undoing, undone he is. WOW. IM SO EMOTIONAL AAJ!!!

Your words and our boy <33 :'))

Rida


Aww thanks baby for those wonderful words!🤗

@bold: YES. haina..Tomorrow..sheesh!! we must be ready for more fangirling..

But proud of babies today! our boy will come out stronger from this BUDDY-business

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