ZAYA OS : Hamara Naseeb (part 2 on page 4)

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Salam guys , i am stalking this forum the last 6 months but never posted anything , made this account recently to read your stories which are amazing , i know you guys but stayed as a silent reader, now exams are over , missing beintehaa sooo much , i tried other shows but nothing was equal to beintehaa so restarted watching all over again (bohot bol liya now coming to the story ) it's the moment when aliya agreed for halal nikah but this story is different .


Hamara Naseeb



She was praying namaz ,searching for her answers , when she felt him coming slowly towards her. She finished praying when he started speaking : "Malika-e-Zain,ye log humain darane ki koshish kar rahe hain , lekin ye nehi jante , ke hum aur humari mohabbat kitni dheed hai ".

She was silent , not a word was spoken , she folded her prayer mat , she got up , still not facing him , she sat up on the swing and said ,her voice heavy: "Hum apni mohabbat ke junoon main andhe ho chuke hai Zain." At this point , Zain Abdullah felt something burning inside him , it was not his still fresh wounds , it was her words which hitted him like a hard slap on his face.

"Yeh yeh kya keh rahi ho Aaliya ? Hosh main to ho ?" "Ab hosh main aayi hoon". Realization hitted her so badly , that Aaliya Ghulam Haider had bow down infront of destiny. "Anjaane main hi sehi , lekin hum uss khuda ke khilaf ja rahe hain jisne , hamari dillon main ,ye mohabbat paida ki hai.".

Zain Abdullah tried to overcome the burning sensation , which was killing him. This woman was not his Aaliya , his Aaliya was not that weak . "Aaliya ". His voice was a mere whisper , a whisper of hope , his last hope . He got up , his voice choking with tears:"Meri Aaliya itni kamzor ho hi nahi sakti".

He made her face him . "Haina ?" . He asked this question , trying , to assure himself . She looked down , she didn't want to look into his eyes , she didn't want to become weak. "Ye hi hamate rishte ki haqueequat , hamate naseebon main yehi likha hua hai" "Pagal ho gai ho tum ?". He said in disbelief.

"Aaliya kya hogaya hai tumhe , ye jante huwe bhi ke hamara rishta , hamare saanson se jura huwa hai aur-".She cut him off and turned away .

"Hamara k- koi rishta nehi , t-teen talaaq ke baad , hamara rishta fanaa ho chuka hai , sab kuch khatam ho chuka hai" .
Zain Abdullah would not lost , not so easily , he had to try a last time . He hold her by her chin , her eyes red , they reflected his own emotions .

"Hum koi raasta nikale ge , sab theek hojaye ga ". She jerked his hand away.
"Zain aur Aaliya ka ek hona namumkin hai ".
"Hum namumkin ko mumkin banaya ge"
"Bas karo Zain ! Haquuequat ka saamna karo !"
She brought him infront of the mirror , to make him see , their broken reality,
but he just saw her, he smiled .
"You know , you are looking beautiful".
She opened her mouth to say something , but he placed his finger on her lips.

"Dekho Aaliya , khor se dekho , ye hamara mustaqbil hai , ye hamari haqueeqat hai , ye Dad ki amaanat hai ye Allah Talaah ka diya huwa tofaa hai"
She had to stay strong she turned to face him , she gulped down , took a deep breath : "sahi kaha tumne ye rishta , Allah Talaah ka diya huwa tofaa hai , mamu ki amaanat hai , par aaj ye rishta gunaah banke reh gaya , aur use se bhi bhara gunaah Halala Nikah hai , jo mujhe manzoor nahi hai".
"Aaliya, tumhare beghair mere koi kaal nahi koi aaj nahi koi mustaqil nahi , koi to rasta hoga".
"Hamare raaste kabhi ek nahi ho sakte".
Every word she uttered killed her, crushed her soul, but she had to do it.
"Aaliya main... tumhare beghair nahi jee saktha ".
He was crying, holding her hand.
Yaad hai tum nehi kaha tha, ke jis din , mera dil , aur di- dimagh ek hi baat kahe ga tum chale jao ge ".
She turned away and whispered :"Chale jao Zain"
Aaliya Ghulam Haider cried , there was no shame now.
He got closer to her , his eyes brimming with tears, and back hugged her , she let out a sigh , turned to face him and hugged him back , they cried together for losing each other ."Chala jaonga , tumhari zindagi se tumhare liye".
He hugged her more tightly , for the last time , he left her and went away , she opened her eyes in shock.
"Aaliya Zain Abdullah , ek baat hamesha yaad rakhna , Zain aur Aaliya kabhi alag nehi ho sakte ,tum mujhe aap ne aap se kitna bhi door bhejdo , mera dil hamesha tumhare pass rahega , Allah Hafiz ".

She smiled between her tears because she knew that this was not the end .


Shukar hai hogaya , this was my first OS criticism is always welcomed and you can throw all your dairy milk at me i won't object and yes Keep loving zaya and keep tweeting agar Alleh ne chaha to harshika wapis mil jaya gen.
Thank you !
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-Minion- thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
#2
its really emotional and beautiful.
you wrote so well.
keep writing more.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: -ZaYaholic-

its really emotional and beautiful.
you wrote so well.
keep writing more.


Thank you so much , it means a lot !
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Posted: 11 years ago
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its ur first nd my eyes r moist wid tears..it was excellent nd u r an amazing dialogue writer..if possible can u plz continue..:)
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: AnnRosewood

its ur first nd my eyes r moist wid tears..it was excellent nd u r an amazing dialogue writer..if possible can u plz continue..:)


thank you so much you guys are so sweet , and i LOVE your stories and thank you for your comment this is a really sweet comment !
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Posted: 11 years ago
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AWESOME!!!!
FABULOUS!!!!
FANTASTICO!!!!👏

It was like watching a BI episode...really really well written dialouges...
I LOVED IT...very emotional...
Plz plz plz...continue this...it would be awesome...
Or write something more...😳

Welcome to the forum...
I am habeeba...😊...your name???


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: 786ahf_bi

AWESOME!!!!

FABULOUS!!!!
FANTASTICO!!!!👏

It was like watching a BI episode...really really well written dialouges...
I LOVED IT...very emotional...
Plz plz plz...continue this...it would be awesome...
Or write something more...😳

Welcome to the forum...
I am habeeba...😊...your name???




THANK YOU you are such a sweetheart , i already know your name , mine is Saleha , should i call you Appi ? By the way , can i make a request can you continue your story on zaya , i think the eleventh chapter is called you will be mine please and thank you
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Omg it was so emotional
lovely os
u made me miss zaya more 😭
pls contn soon or write sumthng new
n PM me
😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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That was emotional yet beautiful
Amazingly written 👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: kavya18

Omg it was so emotional
lovely os
u made me miss zaya more 😭
pls contn soon or write sumthng new
n PM me
😊


I am also missing them so much but Insha Allah im sure they Will be back thank you so much for your comment and i Will perhaps continue it and yes Will pm u for sure Thanks !

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