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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

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Posted: 11 years ago

Hi All

Me again 😊

Thanks again for the kind comments on the earlier posts... Here goes something I wrote after witnessing the 'hug'

Unhein zaroorat hai ek ham-dard ki

Hum toh apne hi humsafar nahin ban paaye

Aankhon pe unke ashkon ki chaadar hai

nazaron mein humaare toofan ke saaye hain

Pehne hain woh gham ka chehra be-pardah

Aur hum chilman mein zakhm chupaye baithe hain

Dhoondti hain unki aankhein ek sahaare ko

Hum apni zanjeeron ko taak rahe hain

Woh humaari aagosh mein pa rahein hain raahat

Kya hum bhi apne gham kho rahe hain...

Na unhein zaroorat hai lafzon ki, Na hum kucch bol paa rahe hain

Kya hum hum-zabaan ban rahe hain

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PS: I chose NOT to write about him pushing her away. In my mind, that obviously didn't happen 😆

On a serious note, I wanted to capture the magical moment, not the realisation of the harsh reality 😳

All feedback welcome!

Edited by always_a_TV_fan - 11 years ago

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--Sia--

@--Sia--

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Posted: 11 years ago

Awesome lucky ...Good to see you posting regularly

This is honest feedback 😳

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Junoonian

@Junoonian

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Posted: 11 years ago

Awesome :). You have captured their ability to share their pain without really speaking to each other.

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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: --Sia--
Awesome lucky ...Good to see you posting regularly
This is honest feedback😳

Thanks Sia :)

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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Junoonian
Awesome :). You have captured their ability to share their pain without really speaking to each other.

Thanks for commenting :)

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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: kamala2012
very nice. thanks.

Thanks for reading and commenting 😊

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bohemia

@bohemia

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Posted: 11 years ago

Another fabulous one. 👏 Loved it. Particularly

Unhein zaroorat hai ek ham-dard ki

Hum toh apne hi humsafar nahin ban paaye

Aankhon pe unke ashkon ki chaadar hai

nazaron mein humaare toofan ke saaye hain

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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: .bohemian.
Another fabulous one. 👏 Loved it. Particularly

Unhein zaroorat hai ek ham-dard ki
Hum toh apne hi humsafar nahin ban paaye

Aankhon pe unke ashkon ki chaadar hai
nazaron mein humaare toofan ke saaye hain

Thank You 😃

I had almost removed the first 2 lines 😛

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Soul_Stirrer

@Soul_Stirrer

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Posted: 11 years ago

Omgg u on this forum tooo😳.

Loved the lines...just started watching humsafars...its osmm and yeah in my mind too the pushing away didnt happen😳

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Lucky

@alwaysaTVFan

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: Scribble_Tweety
Omgg u on this forum tooo😳.
Loved the lines...just started watching humsafars...its osmm and yeah in my mind too the pushing away didnt happen😳

Hey 😳

yes, i watched it from the beginning, but just started writing 😊 Thanks for commenting

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