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Chapter 1 : Old Memories

It was 10pm in the night.The roads were given a bath by the rain sometime back. The trees were looking very fresh after the rain. The frogs were croaking ribit ribit in some corner.The street lights were been kissed by the rain insects.The breeze was giving a chill effect.It kissed her cheeks and flew.The roses In the neighbours garden was fresh and the dew drops on the rose was drippig very slowly.The clouds were clear now and she saw the moon slowly coming out after the rain from the just then sheltered clouds.The moon was looking at her and giving a HAPPY FACE BIG SMILE. So brave she became,she is walking alone in the night .The moon thought so.Wasn't she afraid of anything, the moon thought about her , who was returning to her home after her night walk alone on the streets of their layout with a umbrealla In hand and keys and mobile In her night pjs pocket and a small stick in the other hand.

She was in her thoughts while walking. " Do I call him or Not", she was thinking and confused. I know I shouldn't as he may busy in his meetings and today being Nov 7 not sure whether he would have left the office or he would be in office and busied himself with work and clients. It is 10.30 pm now , so might be he woul have left, she thought and dialled his number.The call connected, the ring tone was ringing continousally but no answer from the other side. She was now biting her nails and cut the call and slipped her mobile in her pocket and walked back home. A tear in her eyes, and the gloomy face told a story though.She took her foot steps slowly, one by one and reached home finally. It took more than 20 minutes to reach home. In normal timing it would take 5 mins, she took 20 mins and came.

She was Astha, 9 months and 2 weeks pregnant.Doctor had asked for latenight walks so her baby in her tummy will not trouble during her night sleep.The doc had advised.She opened the gate.The gate needed greasing , she thought and opened the main door of the house.She came inside the house and removed her shoes and finally after 5 mins search she found her homewear softy chappals and got herself settled in it and went to wash room. She had controlled her bladder's needs till this time.She came out as fresh now.

I know baby.. pl stop..Mama is gonna get some thing for you.Pl stop kicking me ,she said ,to her little one and went inside the kitchen to have her 2nd round of dinner.She opened the fridge and grabbed the little ones favourite.It was 10.45pm , she started with little bit high tone to the little one , look baby , stop hitting mama.Ur one move, it gives so much pain for mama.She was warning the little one. She knew that the baby was hungry and due to hunger , the baby was indicating by the kicks and hiccups .She grabbed the burger from the fridge and warmed it in the micro wave for a minute and came munching bite by bite from the kitchen. Now the little one was silent . She had a sip of warm water from the flask and sat in the hall sofa.She let out a noisy burp. Yaa , the acidity problem , she had to release the burp , if not she will puke .

She was relaxing and saw the clock.The little one after its food started kicking again. Yes baby, I know, You want to meet ur Sankadevi and Laad Governer.She got up with a big glee in her face , and like a small baby she switched on the TV and started watching IPK 1.The little one to settled down .She was watching the TV and set the timer for TV to turn off and kinda dozed of too sleep.. She tried some how to be awake till the serial got over and finally slept off sitting in the Chair.

He was driving his car at 120 speed .He knew that he cannot let her be alone at this time, but was feeling and uttering a word SORRY to himself and self talking , saying ..SORRY ASTHA.. He was lost in his thoughts.Today if Papa was there ,he would be the happiest person.A lone tear from his eyes ,which were forming a stream by then, slowly cascading from his eyes .It was his fathers birthday today.Does any person remember after fathers death about his birth day . No idea, but here Shlok was remembering about him ,very badly on this particular day.They both were the best buddies.

Niranjan Agnihotri a central Government employee , Retd . Joint Director of Coffer Board India lived a honest life and was loved by every one. From elder to younger.He passed away when the little one was 3 months in her womb , due to blockage of blood vessel , which carries blood to the brain. It was 3 weeks time, when they diagnoised and finally doctors giving no hope that they could correct it with suregery. I think once a person looses his will for living and no hope from doctor the motivation of living for a person automatically diminishes.It happened for Niranjan to. He stopped living from inside and finally with paralysis and stroke with in 3 weeks period , he left this world.

Shlok and Astha were living alone in Bombay. After they heard the news they went asap to Pune to see the dead body of NA.Shlok was not given the rights to do the final rights as Astha was carrying,so Varad had to due the final rights for their father. Shlok was dejected and always cursed himself that , he couldn't do anything to his father in the last minute.

Present.He drove all thru Bombay in the not so bussed busy hours at 11 pm in the night and came out of trance and was driving back home. By the time he reached it was 12 pm.Astha had left the door open.The door was not latched. He parked the car and opened the door and stepped inside. He knew she will shout at him.She was awake all the days till he came and had his dinner and slept.

He came inside the house , saw her peacefully sleeping on the chair. Stop.. on the chair. He bit his tongue and went closer to her. He woke her up and made her rest on the bed and put her pillows all over and gave her teddy bear in her hands to hold on to. Kissed on her fore head and was about to leave , she caught hold of his ties and pulled closer in her sleep , with eyes closed , and pouting her lips for a KISSY ON HER LIPS TO HIM.. this was her habit.Though married for so long , she still was a baby and acted like one. No Astha , he said and tried to move. She woke up after his voice and pushed him away.She slowly got up and yelled , Shlok my bowl..He was nervous and kicked his legs and got the Bowl.She puked and gave a stare at Shlok.He gave her some water to settle and kept the bowl down.

Astha started her bajan now.Shlok .. U know I cannot take ur ALCOHOL smell , why did u even come into my room.She scowled and pushed him off. He knew this would happen. He put up with all her tantrums and though she hated the smell , he kissed her on her forehead and made her settle in the bed and covered her with her Quilt and locked the door and left to his room.

Both slept peacefully. She slept . But he was into deeper thoughts. He was recollecting his days with his father. He took the book , his fathers ," THE BAGAVAD GITA " and kept close to him and went into deep slumber.

Next day ..it was 9am in the morning. He could hear vessel sounds from the kitchen and Astha giving morning doses to Lakshmi , their house maid.

He came fresh with a White Sleeveless Round neck casuals and black night pants. He came fresh after bath. With his spectacles and tup , tup Chappal sound in equal rhythm , 1,2,3 he came down the stairs.

He knew from the morning raga , how her mood was and was bit feared to step inside the kitchen. Lakshmi went to sweep the rooms.

He knew this was the time , he could go and confront his Cutie angry wifey.He went inside. She was chopping onions for making Upma. He knew that she is in mount Everest.Only way to keep her calm is too.. he thought and hugged her from behind , his chin resting on her shoulder and hands on the big tummy. She was angry , she pushed his hands off and was into chopping tomato. But he dint let her go.He kissed her cheek from behind and turned her now towards him to face him and SAID .. " LOOK INTO MY EYES ASTHA "..She dint..except a tear drop fell down from her eye.

He knew she was sensitive... very much... He kissed her lips and said

A BIG SORRY AND TRIED HUGGING HER ,BUT THE LITTLE ONE GAVE A KICK ON HER TUMMY ,INDICATING , IM GONNA KICK U DADDY ONCE IM OUT, IF U TROUBLE MAMA EVER AGAIN LIKE THIS..

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wonderful Update Deepa...

Astha is a brave girl...During her pregancy she going for walking along at night...
what to do our shlok is a work alcoholic...
Poor Astha has to do everything on her own...
Naught kids...started kicking her too much...
Poor Shlok lost NA...that too very early...
even though medical system has improved...in somecases its out of our hand...
He is so heart broken that he cant able to do anything for his father...
He is so scared of Asthu...but a loving husband...
As soon as he reached he check Asthu and took care to make her sleep comfortably...
The morning scene was just cute...
loved the way u explained Asthu shouting at the maid and
shlok entering the kitchen slowly...
The Final part...Baby kicking Shlok ...telling him that he will kick him when he trouble the mom...
just mindblowing...
Thanks for the wonderful treat dear...
Take your own time to give us another wonderful update...
Amazing word...
waiting to read more...
Edited by sathuraj - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#43
nic update. Wow astha pregent! .continue
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Beautiful update. .I had tears in my eyes while reading. ..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awesome Deepa...absolutely loved it...waiting for the next chapter
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Very sweet update Deepa but Shlok should take care of Astha specially in this time he should be with her. ❤️ Last line little one is already warning his Papa 😉. Thanks for PM n waiting for next part.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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awesome start chechiii👏
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Such an emotional start deepa, i cried, feeling so bad for astha,it can be so much trouble to be a single parent especially when ur partner is there but not there. Still shlok needs his emotional space right now. its difficult to take sides when both have their reasons. waiting for next part :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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loved the update.it was very cute
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Deepa, looks like I'm the last to comment.😕
What a topic you chose. Hats off.
I'm really unfamiliar with the subject but I wuold be very happy if you enlighten me.
I don't want to be ignorant.😲

One in a million - a special one. the one that was sent to her to see the new meaning of life, to discover herself.
I feel the woman knows nothing about herself until she has a child. She has no idea how strong she can be until life makes her so.
Lady Roosevelt said "A woman is like a tea bag; you never know how strong it is until it's in hot water"
For some women the water is hotter than for the others. I feel you are writing your story about a woman like that. I appreciate it.

As for the chapter - warm narration ... looks like calm before the storm.
I liked the descriptions of the nature. It gives the vision of her walking in the night. I can smell the fragrances and feel the night air. Loved that.
Loved also her baby talks. All preggies talk to the babies, that is such fun. I love to watch and to listen it. It was so naturally written. Thank you.
I hope the baby will kick daddy nicely once born😆😆😆

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