AbhiGya OS - Falling To Pieces...

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Show - Kumkum Bhagya
Characters - Abhishek Mehra, Pragya Arora-Mehra (Abhigya)
Genre- Tragedy
AbhiGya OS- Falling To Pieces


It was way past a year of Abhi and Pragya's wedding. Pragya had cleared all misunderstandings among them and Bulbul and Purab had finally gotten married. Unable to deal with the heartbreak, Aaliya left to the U.S. She had asked for forgiveness from Pragya and Bulbul and also her brother, she did a lot to spoil their lives, but most of all she was unable to look Purab in the face. It was unbearable for her to see hate in the eyes of someone she had once loved so dearly, so she simply left. Taanu was no where to be seen after bagging a role in Akshay Kumar's new production.Bulbul and Purab had moved into their new house recently and Daadi was gone on her long overdue Teerth Yatra. Sarla had finally breathed a sigh of relief after her both her daughter's weddings and gave up her hall to Puneet. She wanted nothing more than her daughters' happiness and they both were extremely happy...or atleat one of them.

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"And what am I supposed to say when I'm all choked up and you're OK?"



"Pragya I told you - DON'T TOUCH MY CLOTHES!" Abhi yelled for the millionth time.


"Abhi, I was just-"


"Go to hell man! You've been spoiling my life since you came here."


This was nothing new for Pragya, she was subjected to this insult everyday and every night. She tried so hard to form a simple friendship with Abhi, afterall they had to spend their lives together...might as well get to know each other. But oh boy! She was wrong! Abhi had something rude and disgusting to say to her all the time. He was such a horror. A nightmare to be precise. He had gotten so worse after the last couple months of the wedding. At first she thought it was due to Tanu's departure, but when he constantly did it for months she knew something was wrong. Why had he developed this sudden hate for her? Something felt so wrong and Pragya just couldn't figure out what it was.

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"What am I supposed to do when the best part of me was always you?"


Abhi, still dressed in his suit, grabbed Pragya by her shoulders as he slammed her against the cupboard. Tears fell free from her eyes as she choked on her breath while clenching her eyes to escape the terror infront of her. Her long,dangling earring trembled against her ears with the force of his arms shaking her. Her golden pallu now had kundan pieces falling out left and right as he grabbed her with such force. Pragya had suspected something wrong when she had seen Abhi give her eerie looks during ther wedding reception as she was talking to her colleague Karan, the intern working under her at the university. Little did she know he had already made an entire story about the two in his head.


"Now I'm gonna ask you for the last time...Where.Did.He.Touch.You?" Abhi whispered in a detrimental voice.


His murderous lips so close to her quivering, innocent ones as he growled in an enraged tone throwing her against the cupboard one final time before leaving her at her God's mercy.


"HOW DARE YOU! HOW DARE YOU ABHISHEK! Did you just accuse me of being with another man? For God's sake he was my COLLEAGUE! He's interning at the university! You're so cheap and sick! I can't believe I'm married to a man as disgusting as you!"

Pragya yelled out in a voice that would later be giving her a sore throat, unable to contain her thoughts to herself anymore, she lashed out at Abhi throwing all her rage like a weapon of mass destruction towards him.



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"'Cause when a heart breaks no it don't break even"


"Baby, I told you - my wife's home , you can't come over now. I'll..." Abhi spoke in whispers as her help the phone to his ear.


Pragya was bringing the laundry into her room when she overheard Abhi's conversation.


She stood still, frozen in fear, her eyes with a blank expression and the laudry basker falling from her hands creating a loud noise causing Abhi to turn around. Abhi took a step advancing towards Pragya when she suddenly took a step back holding out her hand, indicating him to stop.


"Who was she?"


"Uh...just a event planner."


"Stop lying. Was she your mistress?"


"Why would you ask if you know?" Abhi replied heartlessly.

Pragya didn't have enough respect for him at this point to cry right now infront of this lying, two-timing, a** of a husband. She wanted to literally stab the fruit knife through his heart right now, maybe then he would learn, Maybe then he could understand how hard she was trying to make this marriage work. Maybe then he could understand how hurt she was. She had tried everything possible, but to no avail. She took his tantrums, his insults, his accusations.But , THIS.WAS.IT. What she couldn't take was her "husband" womanizing arond like a freelancer with a wife who had signed over her love,her life, and her care to him.


"Then so be it, I'm leaving." She finally uttered.


"Phew! Thank God!" Abhi mumbled loud enough for Pragya to comprehend.


Pragya finally left the Mehra mansion and immediately felt a weight lifted off her chest. She didn't know where she was going or where her life would take her, but she atleast knew she wouldn't be living in a pit of despair from now on.


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"One still in love while the other one's leaving"


"I'm sorry Pragya. I wanted you to hate me so bad, simply because I love you too much to put you through this."


Abhi clenched his teeth as the tears dripped at the corners of his bloodshot red eyes. He finally opened his eyes and looked at the file for the umpteenth time.


Patient Name : Abhishek Mehra

Diagnosis : Blood Cancer

Stage : 4 (Terminal - No Treatment Available)


"I'm falling to pieces..."

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Major sorry if you were confused. Basically Abhi tortures Pragya so that she hates him and leaves, but really he has blood cancer and is expecting to die soon.


Edited by -Ishana- - 10 years ago

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Posted: 10 years ago
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ughhh

ISHANA.


WHY.

why.

why.

whyyy?!!!!


well. to be fair, you did provide the genre warning. and WOW, did you deliver! just a few shortly sketched scenes, but so much emotional power in all of them! i felt pragya's confusion and trepidation, then how she finally reached her limit, the aching heart she left with - and then to top it all off, the reveal of abhi's motivations! oh abhi abhi abhi what a stupid way to deal with such a huge problem, and yet it takes a lot of heart to do that so i can't even condemn him really...

ahh i don't really have anything coherent to say ishana. it was a wrenching read. you used just the right details and language to create this tense emotional atmosphere in the story, and then the "payoff" at the end, negative though it was, just had excellent impact.

i really liked all the details at the beginning too. perfect journey for aaliya and LOL at tanu. and daadi and her yaatra, of course! 👏

i want to thank you for the story but i also don't want to thank you because it's such a painful read!! but in the end i must thank you, because i'm glad i got to read the story. thanks for writing and posting. keep writing for us please 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -mina-

ughhh

ISHANA.


WHY.

why.

why.

whyyy?!!!!


well. to be fair, you did provide the genre warning. and WOW, did you deliver! just a few shortly sketched scenes, but so much emotional power in all of them! i felt pragya's confusion and trepidation, then how she finally reached her limit, the aching heart she left with - and then to top it all off, the reveal of abhi's motivations! oh abhi abhi abhi what a stupid way to deal with such a huge problem, and yet it takes a lot of heart to do that so i can't even condemn him really...

ahh i don't really have anything coherent to say ishana. it was a wrenching read. you used just the right details and language to create this tense emotional atmosphere in the story, and then the "payoff" at the end, negative though it was, just had excellent impact.

i really liked all the details at the beginning too. perfect journey for aaliya and LOL at tanu. and daadi and her yaatra, of course! 👏

i want to thank you for the story but i also don't want to thank you because it's such a painful read!! but in the end i must thank you, because i'm glad i got to read the story. thanks for writing and posting. keep writing for us please 😊

Ohhh Mina, your comments just make my day😳 Thank you so much! And I escaped from my English literature homework to write this LOL it was in 30 mins done! And please update you r]stories too! Your 'Finally' story looks hilarious/amazing !😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awww... Mannn u broke my heart!!! In d middle n den in last...;( aww abhiii... So all was for her to hate him!!! Awsum buddy.. U are one hell f a writer...:)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Ishana!!!!!

wow! you wore it powerfully and damn the script "break-even" reference!!!! ufff gets you right in the heart!


good job!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So sad os.bt nice i Xpectd dis
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Posted: 10 years ago
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😭
Abhi!!!😭

He didn't deserve this! Oh No!

Nice writing!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Sad, but loved it very much.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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This is what I call a PERFECT ONE SHOT👏
ULTIMATE ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I'm sorry but I don't get this OS trust me it was lovely and the way way it was executed was awesome bravo! bravo! 👏👏 I mean why would you make the person you love hate you when you're about to die why won't you want him/her there with you? Ik its just fiction but its such a weird idea and I'vee seen it countless times I mean it's deep the emotion of this deep I felt really bad for him that's why I'm venting now and I'm sorry If I have offended you but I just think if he really did love her he should've told her abt his cancer thing instead of making her hate him and when she finds out later that he died how much ever months or days or weeks after she left him he died and she was not there for him she is gonna feel guilty if he really loved he wouldn't have allowed to go through all that pain after his death infact he would let her know when she was alive and no matter how painful it would be for the both of them the importnant thing is that they would be together making happy memories that she can live with in life after he's gone and maybe even give her the strength to move on in life

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