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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: fairylover


thanks Kiara.. I really do not mind waiting as waiting is worth for ur comments.

That surname was a blunder on my part which I mentioned while replying to Charu.. I edited it by saying though they don't share the surname but has brotherly love and people MU them as cousin brothers. In the flow I forgot that Rach is Yadav n Kapoor. Sorry... but u can understand.😉

I am glad u r liking Rach-Romi n Monu.. N their conversations.. whether it's silent one or monu's teasing. Romi never said that kiss thing but she heard his heart which Romi failed to or denied accepting.

They are looking for Romi.. But they have only one pic of Romi so his secret is safe as of now but that one pic is also imp n u will know how.

I always felt that Prem never hurted RagNa and if given proper story line, his character would have evolved either as a loving guy who realizes his folly or strong villain but unfortunately the guy was not used properly in the show so I took the opportunity n my love for the actor forced me to make him a lovely character.

Glad u liked train journey.. that was just to show how lively Kalpi is..

Thank you Vish! Yes, I do remember Vithal told that they have only a childhood pic of Romi. Rachna will recognise it as she has the pic of him and her ( Rani). The pic which Romi left behind in the diary. Even I agree that Prem was not utilised properly in the show. But what can you expect from these dumb CVs who think Rachu can't act!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Lovely update
unknowingly both rachu n romi falling for each other
Aww monu is cute...
loved d scene whr romi was asking for peck n rachu could feel she heard but again mind ruled over der heart
trainwala scene was awesome
Lik vitthu n kamla here
Looking frwd to see more of kalpi n prem frndship too
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Posted: 10 years ago
Thank u so much guys... M extremely sorry to those whom i dint reply but due to some time issues i have to rush to the update. Thank u so much guys for encouraging me n reading the story. M glad u r liking it.

@Prishna_fan : Sorry I dnt know ur real name yet. M glad u liked it. RagNa are safe as of now coz Kamla just wishes them to marry but i am not PD to fulfill all her wishes.😉

@Sharan : Thank u sweetheart.😊

@DrDee : Thank u so much dear for giving ur precious time to the story. M glad u liked it.

@Rani : Thnk u dear.. M glad u r liking Monu, Rach and Romi here.
Edited by fairylover - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
hello guys.. Next update is ready.. i have written it in 3 days so i think I messed it up. Due to time issue I dint got to read it again so forgive me for this part.. i promise to give a better one in a day or two.. Though i know it's not as good as others but i just hope u like it. i have not proof read it so pardon me for all the mistakes.

Kamla guides Rach to the dinning table to have dinner as it's already late and they can chat later. Rach sits down on the chair and looks around to find Prem.. he enters with few chocolates in his hands and offers it to Rach in a teasing manner.


"No.. thanks but I have already have chocolates in my bag." She retorted back on realizing that he is not going to share it with her.


"This one is urs only..." Prem said while tearing the wrapper and eating it.


"What?? u opened my bag?? That too without my permission... Oh Godd!! This guy seriously lack manners.. Kamla aunty who appointed him as ASP.. he is still a chocolate thief." She said while poining her eyes on the chocolates and moving slowly to snatch it from his hands.


"i am ASP coz I can read the crime in criminal's eyes like I can see what is cooking in ur mind". He replied while going away from her and showing his thumb. She almost fails in her attempt of grabbing chocolates from his hands.


"Ahan Ahan. Go.. I won't talk to u.. " She whined while making a puppy face.


"As u wish but than I will not give u the photo back I found in the same zip." He replied while showing the photo to her.


"Ohh no.. that is the photo of my special childhood frn" She thought and ran after him to snatch it from him. Prem was teasing her and she was running behind him like a little child. In no time whole drawing room was a mess.


"Enough.. U r adults now.. one is a crime reporter and other Asp. Behave like one." Vitthal finally showed his fake anger to control them. Like obedient children, they came and sit on the dinning table beside each other. Prem handover the pic to Rach under the table while she glares at him to share the chocolate as well. Vitthal laughed loudly on seeing him so scared and soon all of them burst into laughter. Kamla was cooking for them.. Normally the maid does all the work but today Kamla wanted to cook something special for Rach. After some general talks Rach thinks to ask Vitthal about her childhood friend and initiates the conversation.


"uncle.. do u remember something about my orphanage." She asked.


"Not much... but why r u asking about it all of a sudden?" Vitthal replied


"Actually, I got an old photo of my friend and I want to find about him. I thought to go to orphanage to inquire but came to know that some correction home is opened at it's place and the orphanage was closed due to lack of facilities." She replied.


"Ohh ya I remember.. that orphanage lacked the general facilities and the order was given to demolish it. Sorry beta I do not know anything about it." He replied.


"Ohh.." Rach said with a sad face..


Kamla who has joined them by now looks at her sad face and says, "So u r enquiring about ur boyfriend."

"Boyfriend??" She replied in amusement.


"Yes boyfriend... when u left the orphanage and came to ur home, u used to talk about ur dost in ur childish tone.. Neetu used to joke that this boy is not her frn but boyfrn and I am sure she will marry him only." Kamla said laughingly.


"Mom is mom.. she was only capable of making a hill out of mole." Rach replied.


Vitthal demands her to show the photo and she complies.. For a second he fell silent on seeing it and realizing it the same boy who is being appointed to kill Rach. Rach notices some uneasiness and asks the reason but he laughs saying, "Ur aunty shouldn't cook much else I will die coz of spice." and keeps the photo on the table worriedly. Soon everyone finish the dinner and Prem takes Rach to show the home and her room while Vitthal goes to the study n looks at the file which he was supposed to give Rach. He takes out the photograph from it but before he can hide it anywhere Rach n Prem arrives. Vitthal crushes the paper and tries to hide it in the wrist.


"Dad... mom is busy with he daily soap so now we can discuss the details with Rach. I too have to go through the file before joining duty." Prem said while pulling a chair for himself n Rach.


"Ya uncle so tell me from the start". Rach said while taking the file in her hands.


"Okkie... so let me start from the first.." Vitthal said while switching on the laptop and connecting it with projector. He gets up and takes the stick in his hand. A big picture displays on the board. He continues..


"So as u both know.. This is John... who is involved in almost every crime of Mumbai.. But still a white collared guy as he is running a successful fishery business on name of his daughter. Though till now we were only aware of the fact that he is involved in contract killing, extortion n betting but few months back we got information from a trusted source that he is involved in drug racket also and there is no such drug in the world which u can't get from him... N from past 3 years his men are targeting the younger generation.. specially the ones studying in school n colleges. 3 months back we caught few of his men and interrogated them but it's of no use as they were mere pawns who dint knew anything about their bosses. From ur report Rachana we got to know that they are working on hierarchy basis i.e. each person knows only their consecutive boss n no one else n u named few politicians whom u doubt to be involved in it. Now, I do not know how this information got leaked from my department and John came to know about this. Now u have become a throne in his path so he wants to remove u. An informer told me that he has hired his best sharp shooter to kill u but before that he want to access all the data that u have with u. We do not know why he is interested in that but he is."


"And who is the man he has hired to kill me." Rach asked.


"We don't know.. we do not have any information about it but if sources are to believe than he is right hand of John. And as imp to John as his son is. No one has seen him with John but it's being assumed that he is John's best man. If rumors are to believe than he is Sammy's best friend. Let me introduce u to sammy first.. " He said while changing the slide.. Now Sammy's big picture appears with few girls.


"This is Sammy.. He is fully involved in his father's legal and illegal business except the drug one. His weakness is Money and girls."


"And this is Pakhi.." Vitthal siad while changing the slide once again.. A tall beautiful girl's appeared in white evening gown.


" She is John's biggest weakness... his daughter.. She doesn't know anything about his father's business and believes that he is the most noble person in the city. She is dong fashion designing course and lives in hostel but every weekend she spends with her father n dad. She is kind hearted and believes in charity but her anger has no bounds.. She had slapped her professor in anger but realized her mistake after cooling down and gave written apology as well." Vitthal finally concluded and turned off the projector without changing the slide so that Rach can't see the next pic and that is of the assassin.


"Dad.. but where is that sharp shooter's pic who has taken contract to kill Rach" Prem reminded him.


"As I told u we know nothing about him except the fact that he is the best in his work."


"But uncle, u had one childhood photo of him. Where is it??" Rach asked while flipping the pages of file.


"We lost it." vitthal replied.


"But how is it possible.. In morning u told me it's with u.." Prem said.


"Actually.. it was there but .. now it's not.." Vitthal fumbles.


"Uncle.. what's the issue?? I can see that u r lying. " Rach asked on realizing that Vitthal is tensed n not getting a proper explanation for the pic.


"But that's his childhood pic.." Vitthal tried to argue.


"Uncle but why u want to hide it from us.. Jsut give it n don't worry about me. I am not scared of anything." Rach said.


On finding no option Vitthal drops the crush photo on the table and leaves the room. Prem and Rach gets surprised on it and looks at the photo. In no time they realizes that it's none other than Rach's childhood frn. She gets shock on learning it but hides her emotion and behaves calmly. Prem realizes that she needs sometime alone and leaves the room. She picks the photo and leaves to her room.


P.S. : Plz tell me if u find any issue or discontinuity in the update.

Regards
Vish
Edited by fairylover - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
ohh kalpi knows her childhood bf gonna cum to kill her...nice update
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Posted: 10 years ago
The update was short but was awesome. Just superb. Plz update soon.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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amazing update.
Love premna teasing n fighting. Oh romi is alreay her bf, n rach wl marpy him. Oh kash it hapnd
premna is scare of vithal lolz ache bache.

Glad to see vithal's cncrn for rach feeling wen he cme to knw abt dat pic.
N he is hiding it frm her.
Pakhi ki indirect entry ho gayi finaly.

Oh no atlast rach cme to knw her childhood frnd is criminal not only criminal bt he is going to kill her. So much emotional. Prem undstnding rach is touching. Hope rach wl fine.

P.s. Powerpoin presentation is realy profesional, i felt lyk its live going in frnt of me. 👏 👏
vishu lv d update. 🤗
Edited by shonali164 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Oh poor Rach! She was so keen to meet her childhood frnd! Now she knows tht he is out to kill her! What will she do? Will she investigate and find out who her frnd is? Will her investigations lead to Romi.
She was just feeling connected to him! What will happen? I am so eager to read all of this!

Ther was no disconnect Vish! The update was fabulous as ever!

Loved Prem n Rach's camaraderie! hmmm so now Prem also has come to knw that the guy is Rach's childhood frnd! Will he be lenient towards this criminal or will be stricter!

Hoping to see more updates regularly! Thanks for such a nice read! Loving the story!
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: aryagr

The update was short but was awesome. Just superb. Plz update soon.


I took 3 days to write this much as I was writing it only in break i.e of 5-10 minutes b/w studies.Will try to givr longer updates. Thank u.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: lolor

ohh kalpi knows her childhood bf gonna cum to kill her...nice update


Thank u dear.😊

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