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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi frndz!!!!!!!!!!!

Some know me...i love being a member of this forum. I' am very happy that I have got many frndz here...especially thamizh frndz...

Love u all guyz...thanx for deivamagal forum...after all we are here bcoz of this only...

Kkk...enough...I' am a bit apprehensive!...

This is my very first piece...I' am trying it on sakash...well this is b4 satya's abortion...read guyz.. and gimme ur response...

Please bare if there are many mistakes!...

MOMENTS!


Saturday 12:00 AM,2019

He heard a sound of glass breaking down...the switches of light and fan of his room were turned ON!...he wonders who switched ON the lights and fans bcoz as far as he remembers he switched OFF the fan and lights...he also remembers he was goin to his bed sadly...

Prakash: "yaaru inda nerathla light fan ellam pottadu"...he found the broken piece of glass on d floor..."ida yaar odachadu?"

He came down d stairs onlt to see that the hall lights are also switched ON!...

"inikku veetla ellarkum nyabaga maradhiya! Yaarume light OFF pannala...oru vela satya varuvannu ellarom wait panirpangalo!" he wonders sadly!...

"ava enga varapora!...cha!...inikku ennoda porandha naal!...adu kooda avalukku nyabagam illa...ava amma nyabagam varudu nu sollitu kaalaila ponava!...evening phone panni solra ...( imitating her voice..atleast trying to..) ennaga! Enakku amma koodave irukkanum pola irukku, naa innikku oru naal mattum avanga kooda irukkattuma...pleeeaase(stretching the word e for few seconds)'...

"Avalukku inikku daan avanga amma mela paasam ponganuma!"...he heard some sounds of hush!!!!!! and shhh!'.. ignoring all that sounds he started again!...

"inda Ashok !...eppovme pannandu manniku seriya call panni wish pannuvan!...avanum iniku panla...satyaa!..."

Then he remembers the purpose of coming down...he went to switch off the hall light and noticed the main door was opened..."inikku enna namma veetla ellam vithyasama nadakkudu! Oru vela anniyarum anda vinodhiniyum ragasiyama pesrangala!...aduku avanga veliya varanum nu avasiyam illaye!...hmmm...enna nadakkudu!...nadu rathrila idellam enakku thevaya!..."

He went outside to see whats happening...at that instant he heard someone's sound near the door and came inside the house rushing...he looked around only to find no one...he sighed and when went to close the door he saw d shadow of a person standing behind him...in a fraction of seconds without even noticing he just took the pillow that was resting on the soft cushon sofa and shoved on the persons face by pushing that person on the sofa...only to realise later that person was wearing black netted saree ...

Then he heard a sound of an annoying person standing with a video camcoder pointing towards his face...!

Mlm: "ayyayo!...prakash enna panra nee!..kaapathunga!...sathyava vidu!...paavam unaku inba adhirchi kodukka vandavala kola panna paakariye...satya endirichu odu"


Then he saw the pillow was hastily being pulled from his hands by the person whom he was cursing before few minutes...

Prakash: "satya!"

Satya: "Happy birthday prakash!...pirandha naal nallvaazhthukkal!"(with the smiling face)

Prakash face la 1000watts bulb!...

Prakash: "satya!...adu vandu!...thanx...nee.."(cut off by satya)

Satya: "prakash!...idukku mela ungaluku surprise koduthanna en peraye maathi vachikran...ungalukku poi surprise kodukka nenachen la enaku theva daan!"said with an intentional fake anger which can b easily understand by him..

Prakash just grinned and pull her in a tight hug!...

All these cute moments were recorded by Mlm with a smile on his lips...

But he did the thing he shud'nt!...

He coughed and reminded the couple that they are not the only people standing here but his family also...

Prakash and satya are embarassed for their show in front of the family...

His amma and appa wished him!...followed by his brother, ragini, gayu and vino...he was surprised to see anjali and his athai there...they both wished him...he got blessings from the elders...

Ashok: "dai machan!...happy b'day da!...konjam vitrunda nalla thittirpa pola!...nalla vela nee epdi pesuvannu yaarum paakala...illana namma satya sister unna summa vitrukkadu.."

Prakash saw satya morachu fayin him!

Satya's mom:" summa irunga thambi!..."said smiling and looking at satya and prakash with happy tears..

Ashok started to say something only to be stopped by anjali's nudging on his elbow..they both smiled at each other...a special smile..

Satya had a look of content as the problem between his husband and her mom getting reduced gradually...

Suddenly the content look on her face begins to change into a blush when she saw prakash's intense look on her due to the demand of a kutty satya or kutty prakash' by her mama and athati...

xx3 backward

On the TV screen again he haw him waking up from the bed..coming down the stairs..he heard his own voice.

Prakash: "yaaru inda nerathla light fan ellam pottadu"...he found the broken piece of glass on d floor..."ida yaar odachadu?"

He saw him coming down d stairs

"inikku veetla ellarkum nyabaga maradhiya! Yaarume light OFF pannala...oru vela satya varuvannu ellarom wait panirpangalo!" he wonders sadly!...

"ava enga varapora!...cha!...inikku ennoda porandha naal!...adu kooda avalukku nyabagam illa...ava amma nyabagam varudu nu sollitu kaalaila ponava!...evening phone panni solra ...( imitating her voice..atleast trying to..) ennaga! Enakku amma koodave irukkanum pola irukku,naa innikku oru naal mattum avanga kooda irukkattuma...pleeeaase(stretching the word e for few seconds)'...

"Avalukku inikku daan avanga amma mela paasam ponganuma!"...he heard some sounds of hush!!!!!! and shhh!' ignoring all that sounds he started again!...

"inda Ashok !...eppovme panandu manniku seriya call panni wish pannuvan!...avanum iniku panla...satyaa!..."

..."inikku enna namma veetla ellam vithyasama nadakkudu! Oru vela anniyarum anda vinodhiniyum ragasiyama pesrangala!...aduku avanga veliya varanum nu avasiyam illaye!...hmmm...enna nadakkudu!...nadu rathrila idellam enakku thevaya!..."

He heard Mlm screaming voice on the screen.

Prakash: "satya!"

Satya: "Happy birthday prakash!...pirandha naal nallvaazhthukkal!"(with the smiling face)

He saw himself smiling on the screen!

Prakash: "satya!...adu vandu!...thanx...nee.."(cut off by satya)

Satya: "prakash!...idukku mela ungaluku surprise koduthanna en peraye maathi vachikran...ungalukku poi surprise kodukka nenachen la enaku theva daan!"

He saw her getting angry!...really?..a sad smile escaped his lips..

His eyes moistened seeing him hugging her on the screen!

xx2 forward

he saw her looking happy and blushing because of his look...

he paused the screen at where they both are on the screen looking at each other..

today that was the third time on he is watching that video...

gently he leaned on his bed..

he remembers his parents demand for a kutty satya or prakash on his b'day...

a lone tear escaped his eyes as he could'nt control it any more...

it has been 5 years!...

he looked beside his side of bed and just holds her hand...a palm was not even his palm's size...he saw how small her palm's were..how cute her little fingers curled around in sleep...he wonders how she would be when she is all grown up!...

would she be like his satya!...yes definetly..after all this child has all the mannerisms of her mother except temper...credits must be given to him...

he remembers how satya always kept promises and never went back on her words..

but she said she will never leave him!...

of course!..

that's true...even though she is not alive with him as satya...she lives with him as Maha'.. their 5 year old daughter who possessed her father's temper and her mother's mannerisms...

he closed his eyes as he remembered he has to wake up early in the morning to get his maha ready to go to her new school...with his one hand resting on both of his eyes a tear just touched the pillow that he was resting on!..

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CandyCrushh thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
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What a pleasant surprise from Priya
Tight huggy pd 🤗 🤗
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Navetha-

What a pleasant surprise from Priya
Tight huggy pd 🤗 🤗


thanx a lot nave!!!!!!!!!😳😳
🤗

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Woww such a beautiful narration dear with lots of emotions..
Anger,love,surprise,excitement,...many more..
Loved it priya :):)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Why don't u write short ss/ff ma 😎
Plz try na ⭐️
Edited by -Navetha- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Navetha-

Woww such a beautiful narration dear with lots of emotions..
Anger,love,surprise,excitement,...many more..
Loved it priya :):)


thanx for ur words da!😊...this s my first work on india forums...was a bit tensed😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Director never give these type of scenes.. b'day celebration.. surprise party..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I will read later and comment dear
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: coolpd93


thanx for ur words da!😊...this s my first work on india forums...was a bit tensed😃


Can't believe it's ur first try 😳
First try in dm forum.. abt sakash 😳 Whooah 😳 ⭐️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Navetha-

Why don't u write short ss/ff ma 😎
Plz try na ⭐️



ss/ff ah😲...one shot ke i took 40 minutes of editing...
ss/ff na u will have to take responsibilities by updating regularly😃😛...i'm comfortable with this da...perhaps in future i may try to write ss..😊

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