Karna TS: ||~ Melancholy~||

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Hello all! In vain I wrote an OS! Its been ages since I reserved this post but nothing good was coming each time I try writing something on Karna! Today also what I wrote is lame, its just I had this strange feeling that if I write then only I can write better! And the lines that inspired me to write are of Riti's! It's from her OS 'An encounter with Karna' that i got these lines! Using those lines in the beginning! Credit for Riti! Thank you dear! You write so beautifully! 👏

||~ Melancholy ~||

"She never asked me anything..If she would have just once... I would have given up anything..."

His life was like a sad melancholy! Deep wounds surfaced but when he dig he could see the beautiful fragments of his life, something no one would ever have, one such beautiful fragment which weaved his life was his Radha ma and he Radheya!

A faint smile crept on his face, his moist eyes were dreamy, and he kept his head on her lap and hugged her close as if never want to leave her.

Strange fear stirred in as he looked up the sky and saw a shooting star! Since childhood shooting stars used to scare him up, he feels as if the star is flying away, far and far away from its mother!

A bad omen it may be called, he never believes in such superstitions but today an unknown fear, the same childlike fear embraced him, making him embrace his mother even tighter!

"Radha ma! Don't leave me" he whispered!

There was pain in his voice, a deeply wounded pain, a kind of fear, fear of being separated from his mother!

"Why would I leave you" she said ruffling his hair affectionately

Yes! Why should she leave him, no one and nothing could separate him from his mother! Havocs happened, his world went upside down, ceaseless emotional turbulence continued to irk him yet his mother was always Radha ma who were by his side!!!

She sang a lullaby! The same lullaby which used to make baby Vasusena fall asleep!

Her soothing voiced was like a balm to all his pains! All those insults he bear throughout his life could only be soothed by her... all those emotional conflicts he faced...nothing could soothe his restless mind to peace except for his Radha ma!

He closed his eyes and let himself get lost in the melody of her song!

This night was most peaceful, most serene!

As he drooped off a tinge of unhappiness lurked in him! He wanted his Radha ma to ask something from him, a wish, a request, an order, something, she never wanted anything from him and today he longed her to want something!

He felt as if he would not be there again!!!

A long sigh and a deep pause!

Today, comfortable he slept like a baby wrapped in his mother's hands!


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FeistyQueen thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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RES for Part 2!
Edited by ..dreamygatz.. - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautiful piece of writing dear.You brought tears in my eyes.Would love to read further.
Right now thru mobile...will update this comment with my likes...
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Loved how you brought his fear regarding shooting star.. 😊..a beautiful piece of writing..so deep that I could see him looking up and having this inside him...
Loved how that big mighty warrior was finding solace in his mother's lap..I wished to read further on his fears... and his asking her to ask something from him...
I am glad that my lines got you inspired..coz this is surely very beautifully written my dear...Come on update soon..😛😳
Edited by riti4u - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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1st part is beautiful written di!😛

Waiting for the next!😛

Keep writing!😃

Love u❤️ and Miss u!🤗
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Posted: 11 years ago
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It was very nice.
keep writing.😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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really sweet and touchy! ... showing perhaps the most clouded moment of his life!


deep sentiments of his inner fears ... some may think with time and age feelings like this fade ... but abandonment is too painful it hurts and haunts you life long!


beautifully written ...waiting for the next part!! 👏

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: riti4u

Beautiful piece of writing dear.You brought tears in my eyes.Would love to read further.

Right now thru mobile...will update this comment with my likes...

Thanks Riti! 🤗
am happy u liked it.. will wait for ua detailed comment!😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Angelic_Friend

1st part is beautiful written di!😛


Waiting for the next!😛

Keep writing!😃

Love u❤️ and Miss u!🤗

Thank u dear...
and again thank u for reading even before I send u the link! ❤️
miss u tooo ,,,, 😛

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Originally posted by: viji2111

It was very nice.

keep writing.😊

Thank u! 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: -TomNJerry-

really sweet and touchy! ... showing perhaps the most clouded moment of his life!



deep sentiments of his inner fears ... some may think with time and age feelings like this fade ... but abandonment is too painful it hurts and haunts you life long!


beautifully written ...waiting for the next part!! 👏

totally agreee dear...
thanks a lot... 🤗

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