My dream track (OS) part 3

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part 1 twisted deal page 1
Part 2 Winner page 2
part 3 Saviour page 2


TWISTED DEAL

I got this stupid dream after seeing todays accident episode of Amma.

Here the scene starts with Raman being in hospital and in life and death situation.Ishita was broken and trying her best to control herself and give support to others.All bhalla's and Iyer's are scared for his life while little Ruhi don't know about situation and was told lie that Raman went out of station.

Doctor informs that Raman life can be saved if they do operation and they need some blood relation to donate bone marrow.While both Romi and MR Bhalla's marrow was not suitable only person left was Adi.Ishita to save her husband's life goes to Shagun.

Shagun "Mera beta koi madad naheen karegaa."

Ishita "Udhar Raman ka jaan khatare mey hain aur tum yeh kehraheen hon."

Shagun "Raman ka jaan khatarey mey hain lekin ussey mera aur mera beta kaa kyaa lena dena hain."

Ishita "Tum puraney baatey abh math dhauraon.Udhar Raman mauth sey ladh rahan hain."

Ishita "Jo huan ussey tum Raman par iss tarah badalaa nahee ley saktee."

Shagun "Tum mujhey kyaa karnaa hain yeh math sikhaon.Main achey tara janthey hon main kyaa kar rahen hon."

Ishita "Mujhey tumsey behas naheen karna hain Adi ko hummarey saath bhejo .Sirf who hain jo Raman ka jaan bacha sakta hain."

Shagun "Adi mera beta hain aur ussey kya karnaa hain main decide karongi."

Ishita "Tum aisey kaisey kar saktey hon .Tum Raman key jaan par naheen khel sakthey."

Shagun "Theek hain main Adi ko bhejoongi Raman key jaan bachaney .Lekin tumhey ek vaada karnaa hoga mujhey."

Shagun "Tumhey Raman ko hamesha key liyen chodnaa hoga."

Ishita was thunderstruck and shocked.

Ishita "Tum kyaa bolraheen hon.."

Shagun "Tum ney jo sunaa.Ek tharaf Raman ka jaan hain doosrey taraf Raman ka saath."

Shagun "Tum undonon mey kissey ek ko chunna hooga."

Ishita was shocked at this while Shagun leaves that place giving her choice.

Ishita goes to hospital still thinking about Shagun's deal.Every one asks what happened and Ishita tell's about Shagun's deal.All are shocked listening this .They leave Ishita alone as decision is with her.

Ishita remembers the moments she spent with Raman and remembers him lying on hospital bed.She makes a decision and leaves from that place.

Ishita "Main Raman ko chod doongilekin kuch waqt key baadh."

Shagun "Kissliyen?"

Ishita "Main waada karthey hun kee jab thak yek tareek waapas dharayenga main Raman key zindagee sey nikalchukee hongi aur Raman key mooh sey meera naam bhee nahee ayeega."

Shagun feels happy with this promise.

Shagun comes along with Adi to hospital Adi goes to operation while all family are shocked by knowing Ishita decided to leave Raman.All becomes sad knowing the deal Ishita made.

Operation is completed and Raman is safe now Ishita sees Raman from outside and feels happy.

Shagun comes to Ishita and reminds her of promise she made.

While everyone are sad and Shagun was waiting for Adi.Ishita controls herself and stops Shagun ,

Shagun "Tumhey apnaa waada yaad hoga"

Ishita "Mujhey mera waada yaad hain Main waada karthey hun kee jab thak yek tareek waapas dharayenga main Raman key zindagee sey nikalchukee hongi aur Raman key mooh sey meera naam bhee nahee ayeega' "

Ishita "Yeh jaroor hokar rahega."

Shagun "Tumharey pass sirf ek saal bacha hain Raman key zindagee sey apnaa nam porey taraha mithaney key liyen"

Ishita coming out of situation "Mainey kahan kee jab thak yeh tareeq waapas daurayengi."

Ishita with little smile on her face.

Ishita "Abh mujhey samaj aa rahan hain kee tum kabhee Raman ke sachee patnee kyo naheen bansakee."

All are shocked to see smile in Ishita's face and Shagun was puzzled.

Ishita "Jahan thak main jantha hun ,jho waqt bheet gaya who kabhee nahen daurayengi .Mainey yeh waada x/y/20ab mey kiyan tha jaha thak main jaanthee hun who kabhee wapas nehen ayega."

Shagun was shocked to listen what Ishita said "Dhoka ,Tum itnaa badaa dhoka kaisey kar saktee hon."

Ishita "Mainey koi dhoka naheen kiya.Jo tumney kiyya uskey saamney yeh kuch naheen hain."

All understood Ishita's logic and how she turned Shagun's table and become happy.

Ishita "Tumney Raman key jaan key saath saudha kiya.Mujhey jawaab tho denaa hen thaa."

Shagun understood she became fool once again.She leaves from that place "Main tumhey jaroor jawaab doongi." Taking Adi along with her.

All come near Ishita and praise the way she handled the situation.

Mihir "Bhabhi aapko yeh idea kaisey ayya,"

Ishita "Raman kee patnee hun kuch tho ussey ssekha hoga naa.Raman merey jagah hothey tho who bhee aisey hee karthey."

Mihir "Bhabhi aapney tho abith kardiya kee aap sach mey Ishita Raman Kumar Bhalla hain"

While Ishita was happy all are praisng her.

Sorry If you din't like this scenario or you feel anything wrong.I just can't give negative thought to my mint for long time.

I just wanted to share this with you.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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waah kya logic lagaya
super awesome
cont soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow nice one I thought she will leave n thank she did not bug I dong want to see raman or ishita in hospital to fight for life n we cana havd tbis tyoe of situation .👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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First thing ur dream was not stupid
Fabulous OS
Loved it
Haha Ishu turned the tables on Shagun
Loved the logic she applied
waiting to see raman-Ishu bonding
Hope ur continuing this
Well written
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Angel13

First thing ur dream was not stupid
Fabulous OS
Loved it
Haha Ishu turned the tables on Shagun
Loved the logic she applied
waiting to see raman-Ishu bonding
Hope ur continuing this
Well written

Thanks buddy for saying this dream is not stupid.
Always Raman does that so felt why not Ishita this time.
(only chance Ishra seperate is from Ishita's side like this situation)
I actually planned to use year names which reapeaat every sixty years but while writting I notice time never repeats why cant I use it.

Sorry buddy thias is just an OS and it will finish here.
I am keeping this page for OS and new idea I will write here of single scenes.
another page is already there for a fan fiction with same name.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awsum yr
love the game ishita played
plz write some more
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: suhaaana

Awsum yr
love the game ishita played
plz write some more

I am writting a fanfiction with same name 'my dream track' you can checkit also .
I will be writting instant os whwn I get some Idea.
thankyou
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Posted: 11 years ago
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When I read Ishita's promise ...I really got angry on u VIKAS ...😆
I thought u were doing the same as evry other writer ...SRY FOR THAT ..
But after reading Ishita's Logic ...😆😉😃 ..I was rly Happy ...And was thanking God 😆
Any way ...She proved that she is Mrs.RKB ...
And shagun ...we can never expect her to change ...😡
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sweety_98

When I read Ishita's promise ...I really got angry on u VIKAS ...😆
I thought u were doing the same as evry other writer ...SRY FOR THAT ..
But after reading Ishita's Logic ...😆😉😃 ..I was rly Happy ...And was thanking God 😆
Any way ...She proved that she is Mrs.RKB ...
And shagun ...we can never expect her to change ...😡

thank you buddy.
I just thought to use some logics for Ishita however she is modern bahoon.

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Posted: 11 years ago
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WINNER

This dream starts with Raman and Ishita in room and Raman busy in phone.

He is getting ready to go to office for some meeting and Ishita was getting ready for some function.

Ishita "Raman aap apna meeting jaldee khatam karkey school pahunch jaana Ruhi kaa dance competition hain aaj."

Raman "Aajaonga ,ab thak tumney tees baar bola hoga."little annoyed.

Ishita "Main bass aapko yaad dilarahee thee.Nahen tho aap bhool jayengey meeting mey rahkar."

Raman "Mujhey yaad hain main naheen bhoolney walaa hun.Itnee baar tumney jo kaan mey gungunakey rakha hain."

Raman leaves to meeting and Ishita making Ruhi ready and last minute preparation.

Then both Ishita and Ruhi go to school in Ishita's car along with Shravan and Mihika.

The school was decorated for their annual day and Ruhi is gonna perform in it.

Shagun also comes there along with Adi.Ishita tries to speak politely with Shagun but Shagun tries to taunt Ishita while Adi was busy along with her friends chatting with them .

Then progrmme starts and both Ruhi ,Adi and Shravan goes inside the building to prepare for the programme.

Ishita receivs a call from Raman .

Raman "Main paanch minute mey aa rahan hun program shuru huyee kyaa."

Ishita "Abh honey waaley hain aap jaldee ajayeyega.Hum stage key saamney bhaithey hain."

Raman "Han theek hain main aa rahan hun.Adi bhee ayaa hain kyaa?"

Ishita was silent for few moments and then replies .

Ishita "Han Shagun key saath ."

Then Ishita cuts the call and Raman stops near a gift shop to buy a gift for Ruhi .He is sure about his daughter that she will win the competition for sure.Even if Ruhi dosen't win she recievs a gift from Raman because she is always winner for Raman.

Here in School in building suddenly it catches fire because of some short circuit and whole building decorations.All kids were struck in building .All gets tensed.

Ishita was shocked but immediately comes out of it and goes inside building to save kids.

She goes inside the building and was able to act quickly and save few kids with help of other people .

She gets tensed for not finding Ruhi near.She searches for Ruhi and finds her scared and she immediately sends her out but Ishita gets struck unable to go outside .

Here Raman was buying gift for Ruhi .He then finds a trophy with My Winner written over it .

Raman then receives the call over the accident in school and he rushes to school .

Inside Ishita was struck along with few more kids all are tensed and Ishita trying to encourage them nothing will happen the will be safe.

Adi was also struck there he was more tensed than others and gets panicked quickly.

Ishita tries to calm him down but he is not listening.

Ishita "Tumhey kuch naheen hooga tumhaarey papa aajayengey who tumhey kuch naheen honey deega."

Adi "Who admee naheen ayengey koi naheen ayengey ."and was trying to runaway by himself.

Raman comes to school and he finds Ruhi safe.Then he notices Ishita missing and gets tensed.

Raman "Main abhee andhar jaatha hun help aaney key liye time lageega.".

Shagun was also tensed there and she informs Raman that Adi was also inside .She is trying to call Ashok.

Raman tries to go inside but all ways are closed Raman then breaks the main door using his car and then makes his way inside .Here Ishita is tensed about Adi and other kids as all are getting suffocated because of thick air .

Raman was searching for them and finds them atlast.Ishita sees Raman and goes and hugs him immediately tensed .

Raman "Kuch naheen hoga main aagayaan hun naa."

Ishita "Raman Adi yahan naheen hain who Akeley bhaag gayan hain.Main ney rokhney kee koshish kee lekin.I am sorry."

Raman "Main ussey dhoondunga tum inn bachey ko lekar bahaar jaon .Mainey Rastha banaaliyan hain."

Ishita was tensed but follows Raman instruction still worried over Raman .

Ishita reaches outside and Ruhi hugs Ishita immediately and other kids go to their parents immediately.

Ruhi "Ishima papa kahan hain?."

Mihika "Akka jeeju kahan hain?"

Ishita "Papa aaa jayengey abhee aajayengey .Mihika tum Ruhi ko bahaar lekey chalo."

Mihika tries to take Ruhi but Ruhi stays there stubbornly.

Shagun "Ishita Adi kahan hain?"

Ishita "Raman usko dhoond rahan hain.Who Akeley chal gayan thaa."

Shagun gets tensed and panicks.

Raman find Adi struck in between fire and goes to him immediately and Adi was scared completely over scenario and was shocked to see Raman there.

Adi was about to fall on something but Raman saves him injuring himself.Raman takes Adi in his arms and walks toward exit but could'nt see anything of dense smoke.

Raman slowly reaches outside still bleeding .Both Ruhi andIshita gets tensed seeing Raman bleeding and run to him.

Raman handovers Adi to Shagun and Ruhi comes ad hugs him crying.Ishita has tears in her eyes.

Raman "Kuch naheen huan hain .Main theek hun .Chota saa ghav hain."trying to calm them down.

Raman "Rooney sey mera ghaav naheen bharney walaa hain.".

Ishita takes Raman near her car and starts doing first aid to him still with tears in her eyes.

Raman "Kyaa jabsey rothee jaa rahen hun.Kuch lecture naheen deney waleen hun.Mainey bola naa kuch naheen huan."

Ishita "Kyaa jaroori thee aapko andhar aaney key liyen.Main kuch karlethee naa."

Raman "Han jaroor karthee lekin main apneee bewi ko jaisey museebath mey naheen chod sakta."clearing her eyes .

Shagun was looking at them from distance getting jealous while Adi was calm now and remembers how Raman saved him looking at Raman.Shagun leaves taking Adi along with her.

Raman sees the gift he brought for Ruhi and smiles looking at it.While Ishita was tending to Raman's wounds.Raman takes it and gives it to Ishita.

Raman "Aaj ek baar phir tumney apney jaan ke fikar chodkar bacho ko bachaaney chalee.Itney log they yahan lekin tum tho hummesha doosro key liyen sochtey hon.You are always a winner."

Ishita was shocked but composes herself as Raman was praising her and takes it.

They give the statement to police and looks at his half burnt car and Ishita smiles looking at him.

She offers his keys to him and all leave to home in Ishita's car.

Edited by SAKIV-RAM - 11 years ago

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