Emotions - ZaYa Drabble

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Fatima

@.infinite.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#21

Res :P

-Edited- (hehe finally :P)

As usual, you went beyond my expectations! you managed to write so beautifully in a small number of words! Loved how you ended each scene with their feelings <33 You wrote their emotions so beautifully! it was such a good read <3 and you kept it realistic too, so that was awesome :D actually what am i on about, your OS/TS/drabbles are always realistic, that's why i love your work so much!

you're succchhh a wonderful writer jyo!

PS. short comment hai, i know but drabble hai na is liye there is not much to write about but pakka i'll give you a bigger comment on your OS!😳😆

PPS. My dabba is beautiful, both gifs☺️

Edited by -Fatz- - 12 years ago

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pinki123

@pinki123

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#22

beautiful!

really emoitional!

keep writing and thank you for the pm!

Edited by pinki123 - 12 years ago

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monalisa1234

@monalisa1234

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Posted: 12 years ago

#23

Fantastically written...But is there any way u can turn it into a full fledged OS? plzz think about it..

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preity_d

@preity_d

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Posted: 12 years ago

#24

u have beautifully expresses the emotions they were going through, specially the mentioned emotions, u wrote in the last few lines, so true and clear... amazingly written

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hilly

@hilly

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Posted: 12 years ago

#25

Jyo.. how do you do THIS ?!

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This drabble is just AHMAZZING! like WOW. I loved both the pov's. Awwh. & how you used what they felt in contrast, yet so simliar brilliantly.
I wanted to see flashbacks frm Zain's pov and then cry over what had happened. omygosh.. can't wait for mondaay.

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Hermain

@clockworknerd

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Posted: 12 years ago

#26

This so well written! Your vocab is amazing dude! 😉 I loved the words your used to describe their emotions and feelings... they made me imagine all this! This is seriously WONDERFUL! 👏 Umm.. I asked you to give me some writing classes, right? 😛 After reading this, I'm sure you're going to be my next teacher 😆

Sorry for this late comment 😳 Actually I was too busy and didn't check IF this weekend! 😃 Thanks for the PM ❤️