#2:Ashlok SS-Bandhan....(Last Part-pg70) - Page 25

shlok was staring at astha...

why she was crying in the precap...

looking forward...

When everything's going good,she haaas to pop in! 😡

Anyway, loved it very much... Naughty Shlok is so ☺️

Thanks for the pm! 🤗

So finally I have finished reading all the updates and can make a comment now

Firstly let me say...I am really sorry meerab for not commenting on ur FF for some time. I know its been long but in between the updates I got busy which didn't allow me to read them on time and naturally they piled up so I had to catch up before I cud comment 😊

Coming to ur story, its wonderful Meerab 👏 Really liking the way u r taking the story forward...all the twist and turns are well incorporated and keep the reader's interested. Also love the way u have sketched not just the story but the characters as well.. 👍🏼 U r a fabulous writer...have always loved ur work and this is no exception 😊

I just love Astha's character in ur fiction. She is so simple and innocent that u just can't help admiring her character. I just feel I can relate to her character on some levels 😳

Now I loved that u didn't drag Swati's truth...just enough to keep the suspense. But it wasn't too surprising to be honest to know that she had been cheating Shlok. I guess his friend's call and his opinion about Swati gave the hint 😃 I am guessing that was ur intention too? 😛

I was also glad to know u made Shlok confess about Swati to Astha well before engagement. I guess it was necessary to build up the foundation of trust between the two and to make us believe that he is sincere with Astha and does not care about marrying for money anymore 😊

The prank that Astha and Shlok's family played on Shlok just before the engagement was really funny but u described really well the pain and disappointment of Shlok 😳

Then the update where they both go away to city and have to spend the night together in the car was so romantic I am happy u included something like this in ur fiction where they get a chance to spend some romantic time and get to know each other well 😉

Btw I also loved the way u r very subtly showing the gradual progress in Astha's feelings for Shlok and their increasing intensity with time 😳 Her being touched by his show of her father's respect, his care and concern for her, like when he gives her his shirt to protect her from rashes and then her concern and restlessness when he falls ill...all was beautifully portrayed 👏

Throughout ur story u have portrayed Shlok as a naughty guy who can't wait to marry her fiance and romance her 😆 reminds me of our show's Shlok Plus it is nice to see that he is still a perfect gentleman, so caring and knows where to draw the line...a perfect match for simple and innocent Astha 😳

Their bed romance at morning the next day they come to visit their mama mami made me ☺️ I can imagine how shy and uncomfortable wud a simple girl like Astha wud feel when her fiance acts so naughty 😆😆

I must admit Swati's return is a nice twist u brought in the story, no matter how frustrating and dislikeable her character might be 😡...much needed amongst the whole romance to spice up the story and our happy couple's life 😉😆😆 I loved Shlok's reaction to Swati...the way he brushed her off was satisfying 😈

Btw I have just realised that Ashlok in ur story has no villain or anyone who might threaten their relationship, besides Swati that is 😃 But I am sure she will bring no major trouble in their lives

Now coming to this update, it was another fabulous one...very emotional and touching 😭 Loved Astha and Shlok's tearful interaction...the way he showed his concern for her, consoled her, reassured her of his love, his brief disappointment at Astha for not trusting him enough, Astha's guilt at how much she has hurt him...everything was beautifully described. The dialogues u use are always perfect according to the situation and this time too ur dialogues perfectly gave away the emotional state of the characters...and what a confession by Shlok. Very emotional and beautiful one! 😳😳 Now I am really excited to know Shlok's plan 😃

Btw I remember u asking our opinion about starting a new season. Well like everyone else here I too want a 2nd season of this fiction...it wud be really interesting to see how u plan to take this story forward 😛 I am already excited for it...can't wait!! 😃

As far as next update is concerned, I will read it tomorrow since it is quite late here 😊 I will definitely make sure I leave a comment this time 😆😆

P.s. Wow it turned out to be a really long essay 😆😆 But I guess I owed u this much since I didn't comment on ur updates for a long time. Hope u don't mind reading LONG comments 😳

P.s.s. I wud also like to thank you Meerab for continuing to pm me ur updates regularly. It made it very easy for me to find different chapters 😃