akdha TS : zindagi na tere bin

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hey guys here is new two short .i had written it for one short competetion but it was canceled.so i thought to post it.hope you like it.

Jodha was lying on her bed as she has fever.moti came in jodha's room

"jodha ab apki tabiyat kaisi hai?"said moti

"hum thik hai moti"said jodha

"jodha kya zarurat thi mahamanga ji dwara di hui saza ko lene ke liye jab aap doshi nhi thi?"asked moti

"moti mahamanga ji ka humein saza dena jayaz hai akhir humne unpar rang jo dala tha"said jodha

"parantu jodha apne jaan puch ke nhi kiya tha vo sab,uske liye mahamanga ji ne apko puri raat bahar khare rehane ki saza di yeh to galat hai na is ke karan apko bukhar bhi ho gaya "said moti

The gaurds announces about the arrival of jalal.moti went out

"shehanshah aap yahan kyun aaye hai"asked jodha while standing up

"hum yaha badi ammi jaan ke kehane par aaye hai apka haal chaal poochne"said jalal

"pehale zakhm do phir marham lagao yeh apke parivar ki parampara hai"asked jodha

"jodha begum had mein rahiye humare badi ammi ke baare mein kuch bola toh.."said jalal

"toh kya kar lenge maar denge ,humare liye khushi ki baat hogi yadi aap humein maar de":said jodha

"kyun humari badi ammi ke piche padi hui hai aap pehale aapne un par humare bache ki hatya ka aarop lagaya,aur ab unpar rang dala"said jalal raising his voice

"humane jaan puch kar apki badi ammi par ilzam nhi lagaya tha humein rahim ne jo bataya tha humne vahi sunkar un par ilzam lagaya tha aur rhi baat rang dalne ki vo bhi humne jaan bujh ke nhi kiya tha"said jodha

"jodha begum aap kuch zyada hi galti se galtiyaan nhi karti.apki galtiyon par to koyi kitab likh dale"said jalal

"apko yadi kitab likhne ka itna hi shauk hai to jayiye koi aur Vishay dhundhiye apni kitab ke liye"said jodha

Suddenly hamida bano enters

"jalal aap yahan hum apko hi dhoondh rhe the "said hamida

"kyu ami jaan humein kyun ?"said jalal

"vo hum chahte hai aap aaj jodha begum ke kaksh mein hi rhe unka khayal rakhne ke liye"said hamida

"ammi jaan hum ab thik hai "said jodha

"dekhiye ammi jaan apki bahu bilkul swasth hai humein nhi lagta unhe humari zarurat hai"said jalal

"jalal phir bhi aaj aap yahin rukiye hakim ne kaha hai ki unhe bukhar phir aa sakta hai"said hamida

"thik hai ammi jaan"jalal said

Hamida bano went

"shehanshah aap bistar par so jayiye hum yahan zameen "said jodha

"nhi jodha begum aap bistar par soyiye varna ammi jaan humein daanteingi"said jalal

Hamida bano went

"shehanshah aap bistar par so jayiye hum yahan zameen "said jodha

"nhi jodha begum aap bistar par soyiye varna ammi jaan humein daanteingi"said jalal

Jodha slept on bed. But jalal was checking her fever after every hour

Around 4:00 am

"hey bhagvan jodha begum ko to phir se bukhar aa gaya"said jalal "humein hakim ji ko bulana chahiye"

He called hakim with hakim all also entered her room

"shehanshah jodha begum ne raat ko dava li thi"asked hakim

"kaunsi dava?unhone to koi dava nhi li"said jalal

"nhi li hey alla!!"said hakim

"kya hua hakim ji ?"asked hamida

"jodha begum ki tabiyat bahut kharab hai khatra bahut zyada hai"said hakim

"yeh kya keh rahe hai aap hakim ji kuch kariye"acted maham

"hum poori koshish kareinge"said hakim


precap: jalal shouted on mahamanga!!!!


how was it???will wait for your feedback

HAPPY VALENTINES DAY!!!

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purana track but nice update...continue soon.😊
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