JAJ SS Dil Kya karein *part 11,Pg-34* updated!! *new part up*

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Priya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#101

Originally posted by: AASUS
Hi Priyam 🤗
How r u? I was hovering over this thread since yest.evening to see if you've updated. 😆 Yayay u did :D

pg 12 it's fun as always. You handled the friends' scene v nice. Shizo and Jeanie vs Priya and Johnny. Party scene especially is fun. Vicky got good advice. Is he gonna take it? Bad ones watching. Pari is always there to give warning. Glad Shizo and gang escaped at least for the moment.
I love the fun dialogues and emos :P Ty so much. Excited to read next ch. :D

Hey Athi.. thank you for your continued support! I'm so so glad you liked this part as well⭐️ Aww yes that was much like filler chap.. the adventure will begin from nxt part. haapy you all liked it😆😛 N yes I will be updating mostly during weekends, that way I wont miss the show during those days...😆

N ooh such a beautiful gif, thank you sooo much dear.❤️ Thank you..❤️ Its beautiful n I'm happy I could write something that pleases you..😊😳
thnx again n you will get ur next part by this weekend...🤗😳😳

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Priya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#102

guys I'm bored.. may be I will update soon! a short update.. :)

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AASUS

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Posted: 11 years ago

#103

Priyam🤗

its night here and I'm gonna sleep. just came in to reply u.

its fine whenever u feel up to it.

it was sat evening so i was just being too eager.😆

ok if ur updating now ill read tomo when i get free :D ty

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Priya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#104

Originally posted by: AASUS
Priyam🤗
its night here and I'm gonna sleep. just came in to reply u.
its fine whenever u feel up to it.
it was sat evening so i was just being too eager.😆
ok if ur updating now ill read tomo when i get free :D ty

Hiee Athi..🤗❤️ where do u stay btw.. well I'm from Hyderabad, India. I felt worn out this morning, got a bit sick but I;m now ok n Its a lazy afn here. I just dont feel like reading anymore. Exams r coming up.. so I was planning to update by this evening n then turn to studying again..😆 N no probs dear! U can read wheneva u r free. Have a good night's sleep🤗 G'nyt! Tc.. see ya later~

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Priya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#105

Another filler chap before adventure begins...😳 Bear with me..😊

Character Intro- to those who dont follow the show..

Jinn Land- A magical land where Jinns & Jeannies live
Jeannie, Jia- sisters from Jinn Land
Jhonny- Dabanng Jin from Jin Land, Shizo's buddy
Shizo- Jhonny's friend, pilot in AI
Pari- Shizo's GF in Jinn Land
Vicky- Jeannie's juju/love interest
Priya- Vicky's childhood friend cum GF, Jhonny's love
Jinn Jaffru, Jinn Jalal- Bad guys/villains

~~Part Eight~~

contd. from prev part...

"Vicky! Main kab se tumhe dhundh rahi thi. Tum yaha ho! Tumhara international flight ka waqt ho raha hai..."

"Haa baby. Main bas woh dekh raha tha party mei humare dost nahi dikhayi de rahe.. Shizo, Jia, Jeanniee.."

Vicky was still staring at the spot from where Jeannie & Co. vanished when Priya came to talk.

"Aur Jhonny bhi. Woh mujhe ghar drop karnewala tha. Kal office aane do main uss ki khabar lungi.."

Vicky is slightly taken aback. When did Jhonny became such a close friend to her?

"Sure Baby. Aur bataao.."

"Kitna mazaa araha tha hume. Aaj maine sab k saat dance ki, dad k saat bhi. Oh god! Itna maine kabhi nahi kia. Bus tum miss hogaye sweetiepie.."

"Aww baby someother time. Flight k liye der horaha hai na.."

"Yes yes. I know. Its ok. You carry on. Main dad k saat chali jaungi.."

And she walks off that smile still wide on her lips. He stands still wondering what just happened! She missed dancing with him but still had nothing to complain.. And Jeannie! How could she just vanish with out informing him. Grudgingly he leaves to join vela on his second internatinal flight to Paris.

Back at Shizo's place:

The Jaadooi gang is discussing stuff.

"Yar ab bhi waqt hai. Iss musbibat se main akela jhel lunga. Tum sab khaamokha-"

"Shut up! Hum soch rahe hai na? Let us think.." Jhonny chides him.

"Yes.." Jeannie, Jia chorus.

"Are you sure woh Pari ki awaaz thi?" Jhonny asks.

"Of course hai.." Shizo assures.

Idea! Khabri jin... Jia summones the khabri jin, the messenger from Jinn Land.

"Jin Jaffru, Jinn Jalal se humare Shizo ko khatra ho sakta hai. Ab tum hi kuch bataao na. Hum kya karein?" Jia asks him.

"Arey woh tho bohot bure jinn log hai. Unsey door hi raho. Waise bhi woh abhi jail se choote nahi hai. tho khatra zyada nahi hai. Agle hafte woh jail se choot jayenge! Tayyar rehna-" Khabri jinn answers.

"Pari kaisi hai? Jinn Shaurya ki beti.." Shizo asked suddenly.

"Woh bichari tho kab se kaid hai Jinn Jaffru k jaadui mehel mei..."

"Kya??" Everyone is shocked.

"Kisi ne usey chudaaya nahi?"

"Nahi woh tabhi rihaa hogi jab woh bure jinn log khatam hojayenge.."

"Tab tho main unka khatma zarur karunga!" Shizo roars in anger.

"Relax dude! Khabri jinn? Koi aur raasta hai?" Jhonny asked.

"Nahi..."

The friends begin to discuss while Khabri jinn continued to dangle in the air.

"Guys! this is it! I'll have to finish those evil Jinns. And that's the only way to free Pari..."

"Shizo. Woh khatarnaak hai. We can't let you go alone.."

"Guys I need to go alone!"

"OK.. Par tum karoge kaise?" Jia asks

Shizo fumbles. Valid question. They turnto Khabri Jinn again.

"Bataayiye Khabri jinn.. unhey khatm kaise karthe hai?"

"Woh tho aap ko Angel Jin hi bataa sakta hai."

Jia smiles.

"Arey haa. Angel Jin. Achhayi ka prateek. Thank you Khabri.."

Khabri vanishes laughing n wishing them luck.

"Uss sab ka tho thik hai.. lekin iss khatre ka kya? Jo Pari ne bataaya?" Shizo asks.

"Evil detector..." Jia answers him.

"Yeh kya hai?"

"yeh Jin land ki scientists ka bohot bada invention hai. Iss evil detector ki madad se hum bure jin logo ko identify kar sakte hai aur unsey door reh sakte hai."

"Woh kaise?"

"yeh dekho. evil detector. Yeh ek locket hai jo humesha green dikhta hai. par jab yeh laal hojaaye matlub khatra aaspaas hai."

"Wow maanna padega Jinn Land mei bhi science & technology ko achhe se develop kar rahe hai.."

Shizo comments and everyone agree.

"Main abhi humareliye mangwaati hu.." Jeannie does some magic and a chain with evil detector locket appears around everyone's neck.

"Wow! Yeh tho bohot sundar hai.." she likes it.

"Excuse me! Main yeh nahi pehen sakta. Yar this is for girls! Main nahi-" Shizo complains.

"Shut up shizo! yeh teri protection k liye hai..." Jhonny reminds him.

"OK guys jo bhi ho raat bohot hogai. So lets go and sleep! G'night!"

With that Jia and Jeannie return to Vicky's place. The night is called off.

Evil detector Locket:

~

Nxt morning-

Juju ignores Jeannie after returning home. He returns in the early hours of that day but still gets dressed up to leave for work.

Jeannie who's chatting with Shizo informs him about this.

"Juju mujhse naraaz hai Shizo. Baat bhi nahi kar rahe. I dont like this!"

"Oh meri Jeannia. Your Juju is jealous ki kal raat tum mere saat mere ghar aayi. Relax. Ab dekho tere juju ko aur kaise pareshan karta hu. I'm leaving for office..."

"Hey shizo.. locket mat bhulna.."

"yeah thanks for reminding!"

"See ya.."

"bye Shizo.."

~

PA office, a while later-

Jhonny, Shizo pop out near the reception.

"Hey Shizo congrats yar! Tu meri shart jeet gaya. But not fair huh. Rajjo ji k feelings k saat khelna mat. Rajjo ji I mean Jeannie ji ka dil mat todna, dil breaker!"😆

"Shut up yar! I'm not dil breaker. Ladkiyan khud marti hai mere upar.."😛

Shizo grins as he notices Vicky who's a few feet behind them is all ears now..

"Abhi kya hai yar! Jeannie meri 50th girlfriend hai! Aur main century maarna chahta hu yar.."😉

"My my.. tum kabhi nahi sudhroge yar!"😛

Jhonny walks off towards Priya's cabin. Shizo too returns to his work now that the deed is done.
Vicky's ears turn red. 50th girlfriend??!😲😡 Gosh he needs to warn Jeannie! Wait when did Jeannie become Shizo's GF??!
~
there in Priya's cabin...

Jhonny greets her. But she ignores him.

"Hello Suman ji!"

"Kaun ho tum? Mere cabin mei kaise aaye.."

"Suman ji.."

(Jhonny loves to address Priya as Suman and Jeannie as Rajjo ji)

"Kya suman ji. Ithni choti si galati k liye ithni badi sazaa?"

"Sorry. Main aapko jaanti nahi. Aur main strangers se baat nahi karti. now leave.."

He makes a sad face n begins to leave but stumbles on his way-

"Jhonny sambhal ke!" 😲

"Dekha Sumanji.. Ab kaise pehchaanliya hmm?"😉

She huffs n glares. It was his trick afterall. she should have known..😡

"Itna gussa! Waise aap ka gussa bhi pyaara hai aap ki tarah. Ab smile bhi kijiye na. Yes. Come on. Aap smile kar rahi hai. Lo bhai smile karliya!"😛

She smiles then laughs hitting him playfully.

"Joker ho tum isliye smile kia.."😆

"Koi baat nahi aap k smile dekhne k liye main joker kya naukar bhi ban sakta hu.."😆

"Tum gayab hogaye the kal raat. Aur mujhe bye bhi nahi bola.."😳

"Sorry Suman ji. Woh ek emergency thi Shizo k yaha.."

"Oh. I'm sorry. Shizo kaisa hai?"

"Woh thik hai. Bus choti si problem thi. Mujhe jaana pada so-"

"Its OK. Achha tum jaao mujhe kaam karne do.."

"OK. See u sumanji.."

xxx

Next part__
Evil begins to stir in PA. Jia is kidnapped.
"Didu nahi hai tho kya hua.. Didu ki Jeannie tho hai! Ladaai bas abhi shuru hui hai..."
Its up to Jeannie, Shizo n Jhonny to save her n Pari...

Hey friends... Sumi, Athi, Afss.. I dunno if someone wants to throw tomatoes. Feel free to do so. But throw fresh ones ha? Another filler chap. 😆

Jeannie- Ehem! Aren't you giving more space for Jhonny?
ME- yes Coz I miss him.
Jeannie- What abt others!
ME- have patience. Nxt part will see the gang's adventure..😛

And comment plz..😊

Edited by -Priyam- - 11 years ago

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Dr.Fear

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Posted: 11 years ago

#106

Awesome superlicious update yaara ❤️ 👏 . just LOVING it , cant stop reading the chaps again n again n again n again 😳

and hum tum par tomato nahi , roses fekenge 🤗

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Priya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#107

Originally posted by: .nightqueen
Awesome superlicious update yaara ❤️ 👏 . just LOVING it , cant stop reading the chaps again n again n again n again 😳

and hum tum par tomato nahi , roses fekenge 🤗

thank you Jaani.. Ur comments always touch my heart.😳 😃Sacchi mei. Thanks🤗 I was bored so I write this. Glad u liked. 😳Love ya yaara.❤️🤗

Aww roses... so sweet❤️😃

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Dr.Fear

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Posted: 11 years ago

#108

Aww ntosim and ur replies touch my heart as well 🤗 ❤️ and yes i dangerously loved it ❤️ and love u 2 yaara <3333 , eagerly waiting for the next part and loved the jeannie-me convo v much , u r so innovative 👏 and aww...

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Priya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#109

Originally posted by: .nightqueen
Aww ntosim and ur replies touch my heart as well 🤗 ❤️ and yes i dangerously loved it ❤️ and love u 2 yaara <3333 , eagerly waiting for the next part and loved the jeannie-me convo v much , u r so innovative 👏 and aww...

that convo ahh. that was random yar.. 😳n oh so sweet. thank you so much n ntnsim again🤗❤️ I'm glad u r loving it.. :D

If u r free.. we can chat a bit. Its been such a long time.. tell me how r u doing n wassup?😃