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Posted: 10 years ago
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thank you payal :)
keep reading
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Posted: 10 years ago
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nice chapter ron.
next chapter kaha hai
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: bristi84

nice chapter ron.

next chapter kaha hai


waiting for other readers to read it and ill post the next one
if u wanna read the rest from 3-9 find it in shaanse, the link given above
else - wait karna after sandy / mansi comment ill post the next one
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello all,
here comes the 3rd chapter of the story
Sandy - i waited for u hope u do read both chapters :) and do comment
Payal and Brishti - enjoy and drop your comments
Mansi - don't be lazy to drop your comment 😆

thank you all for your good response for the both chapters, here I m posting the 3rd chapter, hope you do read and enjoy

Chapter 3

David stood there seeing his mom entering the car but he did not move, he was Shocked, he was not ready for this, It was not that easy to hear what his mom just announced, it was not a lie, it was not something she said to end this drama, it was the reality of his life, he was not her son.

Questions started to arise in his head... "why did she hide that from him ? why did she switch the babies ? why would a mother do such thing ? why no one ever realized that he was not their blood ? why it had to open this way ?? why why "

The touch on his shoulders brought him out of those thoughts

"Son, What's wrong ?"

He turned back to see it was his dad Eli

David hugged his dad with tears in his eyes, "dad, when I heard it at 1st I did not believe it, I knew that all the world can be a liar but my mom, No never, she is the one I trust the most, Why would she do it... No no it has to be a big lie"

Eli - "Son, its okay my son, please come lets go home , we shall discuss this at home, don't believe all that okay, you are our son, we raised you , we love you"... come let's go...

David - "No, I m not going anywhere, dad, when I heard that lady saying it , I did not believe it, I knew My mom would never do such a thing but she proved me wrong, she said to Miss marta that I was not her son, dad you both are not my parents". After 20 seconds of silence, he quickly moved out of his dad arms and asked his daddy ... "Did you know about it"???

Eli - "Son, I did not know it, there is one more thing you should know but I don't think its a rite place to discuss it, let's go,we will discuss it at home, Ill drive, okay"

David - "one more thing, wha.."

Eli - "yes"

David follows his dad to the car,

The travel was silent, none of them spoke much.

David kept wondering what is more to know, what is hidden from him, what's going on..."

When they got home, David went inside the house, Velga stopped Eli and said to him with tears in her eyes: "I know that one truth come out, I did not want it to come out ever, I m sorry for hiding it from you all those years, I know you would understand but I knew you would not forgive me for it, Please promise me, you will never tell our son the biggest reality of his life, please Eli I beg you, keep it hidden , let him know only the thing that he is not our son, please don't tell him the other secret, this would ruin every one's lives , please Eli I beg you, for the sake of those 20 marriage years, for our love, I beg you, please don't tell him... for the sake of mine, I request you don't tell him anything"

Seeing her tears, Eli said: "I do not get it, why did you do it, I was there for you, I love you and still u did not trust me enough? If you would, you would never switch the babies, more than that I can't believe it, I never doubted it, you switch the babies and never let any of us realize that both are switched, didn't you miss your real son ? tell me ? you always called me your best friend but you never shared such a big secret with me ... Now you want me to hide the other secret...

"Wait wait wait "

"What other secret..."

Keeping a silent for a bit...

he got it...

""Oh... That ... Oh my God Velga, what have you done"

Velga kept begging him... "Please eli , forgive me, please don't tell our son this truth"

Eli removed her hands of him and said - "I don't know how long I can hide this truth from David, but you are wrong here Velga, you wronged with both of us"

He entered the house silently.
Edited by ronshaan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Gripping first chapter,Ron.👍🏼
Please do continue.
Waiting anxiously for the next one.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: rose.lavender

Gripping first chapter,Ron.👍🏼

Please do continue.
Waiting anxiously for the next one.


Hey rose, welcome back
Now im so glad i wrote the story
All nice people coming back :)
3 chapters shared check the other two as well
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Posted: 10 years ago
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The suspense is building Ronit
Keep it up
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thank you so much payal for liking it,
keep reading and reviewing
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Posted: 10 years ago
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well, u made me confused, i was thinking you did not read,
i see the likes by mansi **comments main kanjusi 😭** , comment by rose "i dont know if u read the other two chapters as well.😊
Sandi did not read it yet. hope u do and reply too...

Here is chapter 4
enjoy and don't forget to drop comments


Chapter 4

When they arrived to the city, Sima asked both kids to go home and drop her near their office, She entered Daniel's office,

Sima - "Hello Daniel"

Daniel - "hey sima, U r back, how are you?" , he stood up, Hugged her, let her sit on the chair and he sat in front of her and said I was trying to call you since the morning but your phone was not reachable"

Sima - "yeah, I switched it off, my mood was off and I did not want to discuss such matters on phone. I m sorry for that, I know you must be worried for us... really sorry for that"

Daniel - "such matters... what matters sima ?? why did that woman call you there ?"

Sima - "Daniel , I really do not get it, A dying woman , wanted to tell us something, she told us something and died... I m still confused why would a dying woman say anything like that".

Daniel - "Sima, What did she say, tell me"

Sima - "Dani, that woman said that our son Mike is not our son,

Daniel - "What... ", in shocked voice...he stood up, looking at her in shock... "Sima, What are you talking about, Mike is not our son,

Sima - "even I m shocked Dani, I was there and the happenings there made me more confused, really very confused"

Daniel - "what happenings... tell me what happened?"

Sima- "We got there, we saw a very sick lady lying on the bed, she greeted us all, there was another family there, she spoke to that family's mother and said to her that she was punished for her sins, she too should atone her sins. Then she told everyone that she switched our sons, she apologized and she died just after saying it, all of us were shocked and I saw that other woman who claims to be Mike's mother, she came near him tried to hug him, not once but twice, I m so shocked, I don't know what to say Dani, I wish you would have been there with me.

Daniel - "Oh My God, No No... its impossible, You gave birth to him, what ever they say, its not the truth, that woman must be lying, I don't believe such things, you too should not believe it sima!!"

Sima - "I don't know why but I believe her words, why would a woman who is dying lie and say such thing , she would gain nothing by doing that"

Daniel - "you are mike's mother, how can you buy those words, No I do not believe it... impossible, Mike is our son , nothing can change that fact okay"

Sima cut his words and said - "But Daniel..."

she was about to say more and he said ... " please ignore, may be its well-planned, don't believe such things said by any one"

Sima - "but Dani, why would she lie , tell me, she was going to die and she would lie... Why Dani ... "

Daniel - With louder voice -

"Sima, we are rich family, You never know who wants our money and property, you cannot believe any XYZ words, you should know it by now, don't you, Listen, Let me handle it on my own, I m sure it has to be some plan, we should be careful and not let those small things bother us. Listen - I have the phone number of Marta who invited us , I will talk to her next week. So please don't worry and let me handle it okay"

Sima - "hmm, yeah you might be rite Dani, okay you handle it"

Dani - "Hmm, Now let's go home, Kids must be waiting for us"

Sima - "Dani, Kids our kids almost crossed their 20s And you still call them kids hmm"

Dani with a smile - "well for us they will always remain the kids they were"

Sima - "yup "

Both left the office !!!






At Goenka's home,

Both kids came back from the baby sitter's home, Sigal and Moti were 10 years old, Twins kids, happy kids, with them around, the house felt like heaven, they are the life of that house, they are the kids of Velga and Eli.

They knocked the door but got no answer so they used the key they had...they came in seeing the house so dark, the house is never this dark, when ever they return home , the house is always filled with light, they use to find their mom in the kitchen preparing the dinner and their dad sitting on his computer but today, today it was different.

Sigal - "Moti, I think they are not back yet, Dad told me this morning that they had to go out of the city"

Sigal switched on the light and saw her mother lying on the sofa

Sigal - "Oh, moti they are back , see mommy is sleeping here"

Moti - "shh, Siggy she must be tired, it happens na... Come let's see if Bro is at home, don't disturb mom, she will wake up any time"

Sigal - "Oh yes... let's see"

Both went to David's room, they found him sitting alone in the dark, staring at the wall,

Moti - "Hey bro, how are you, we missed you today"

Sigal Hugged him and sat near him "bro, it never happened that we came home and the house was dark, Mom is sleeping eh... why ? is all okay bro "

David tried to hide his sadness from both kids, after a few seconds of silence he said...

David- "Oh yes, everything okay, did you kids eat hmm"

Moti - "Oh I was not hungry, she ate, she loves to eat, fat girl hahaha"

Sigal - "Oh please Oh please don't dare aah"

Moti - "What would u do... , I don't lie, u r fat ha ha ha "

Sigal - "Oh you won't stop won't you, "

Moti - "No , No, I won't stop, U eat all the cookies u get, u eat mine too "

Sigal - "really, really u dumb, I might be fat but I m smarter then u... u idiot"

They started teasing each other, shouting, fighting and then David shouted ..." Shut up both of you, can't you see I m disturbed... get out of my room "

Seeing him angry , both quietly left the room closing the door after them, They went to their room

Sigal - "what happened to him, he never scold us like this, what's wrong with him, Moti, did we do something wrong?"

Moti - "I really don't know, maybe he is very tired, come let's play on the PlayStation "

Sigal - "yeah sure"

After few minutes, David came to their room,

"hey kids" he said..

"I m so sorry , I was bit upset, I m so sorry, won't u forgive me??"

Both kids saw him and went to hug him,

Moti - "its okay bro, we are sorry too, "

Sigal - "yeah, "

David- "actually its my mistake, I m sorry, I shouted at you two"

Moti - "oh bro, leave it,, come let's play this game, this fat fat girl wins all the games, please help me to win at least once"



Sigal - "oh this is not fair.. you are taking help from bro"

David - "Relax you two, Ill help both of you, don't start your fights now..."

They kept on playing that game till the Night,

Sigal - "Bro, in this game we totally forgot to ask , where is daddy and why mom is sleeping at this time??"

David - "I don't know, I was in my room myself"

Come let's check ...


Edited by ronshaan - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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😊 Wow Ronit, interesting Chapter2. Beautifully written. Looking forward to reading the next
Chapter. Thank you.
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