Abeer OS| Growing Up - Page 2

Originally posted by: naina927

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Unres

So that was just great to read...!!! 😊

Written beautifully...!!!! 👏 👏

A different perspective all together... A mature side of abeer...!!! 😳

Heshoiws people he is childish and immature, but he is far more mature than others... You proved it...!!! ⭐️

Thank you for writing this...!!! 😃

Originally posted by: IttiSiKriti

RES

Mission first comment unsuccessful. Not fair.

Not my fault your a loser.😆

Will read/res later but I'm sure you slayed girl.

🤗

(You have no idea how hard it is to type in a coherent manner on a touchscreen.)

🤣🤣

I'm glad you did this <3

It never would have happened if it wasn't for you.

*UnRes*

Ok so finished reading...

*Bites fingers*

And wow.

😳

Honestly women, you tell me you weren't sure of this?

I know I know but I was okay. Don't be a kuthi😆

Like come on, really Zoobie?

Confusing? Please..

😆

Anyways, now for some serious talk.

^ Serious face.

Hands down this was my favorite part of the comment. Honestly I didn't even need the rest, this would have done the job equally well, if not more.😆

Ah woman!! I love how you explored his understated internal thoughts and personality as an individual. You know in all his masti and badmaashi, we forget that he's also a strangely complexed (Kokes not a word by the way😆) person, and you brought up that point so well, the fact that though he seemingly has "no struggles" and is born with a golden spoon, the fact that that "golden spoon falls short" and it's a fact people are never able to see.

Aww thank you Ko Ko.🤗

It means so much coming from you. Really. <3

I know that's why I was telling you I felt like there's this fragility/complexity, whatever you might say that goes deeper into Abeer's character. It's quite intriguing and honestly, one of my favorite things to personally read and now writing about! Because whether you're reading or writing, you discover the depth that a character has and just the different aspects.

And I love how you stayed constant with his character, Abeer isn't one to judge someone for their preconceived notions of him--

"So, who am I to ruin the misconceptions of others? I am not to blame for the disillusionment of others. It is their choice if they choose to live in a world of fantasy."

Among all the other things, I loved that part the most. He felt real.

*Takes a sigh of relief* *Shoves more ice cream in her mouth* *Confused as what should be given more importance, finishing replying back to Ko Ko's comment or eating ice cream*

And guess what I picked!?

Obviously eating my ice cream. What do you think this is fool?🤣

No, but seriously. I'm glad. I wanted him to have the realness to him.

And of course the end ❤️ we're all struggling Zoobie, I'm glad he's content.

Thanks love. 🤗

Genuinely, as a reader, thanks so much for this! I loved it, and *AHEM LOUD THROAT CLEARING* do write more. And I'm not the only one saying it this time ❤️.

Really it wouldn't haven been possible without you. And since you just broke Dosti Rule #3489548765 like 43256798th time, I'm going to break just this once. :D

Thank YOU for pushing for this. I really did enjoy writing this and I'm glad with the outcome.❤️

Koko <3

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What?

Idiot.

P.S. You broke your rule which means now I don't have to follow it either. (Not like I was going to anyways but for your sake once I would have)😆

Originally posted by: .SSS.

Res!
Will take some time to unres, little busy right now . Am exited, I know its going to be great!

***Unres***

Zainab! you pleasantly surprised me, with this .

This OS might be short but it leaves a great impact, strikes the right chord of the readers.
I loved the flow of the words, brilliantly chosen and perfectly put.

This is brilliant, and you've no idea how much I liked these lines:

To the world, I might be Kuber Malhotra's son, but I know. I could not have fit farther from that classification. By name and blood, I may be bound to him, but as a person, I am no one's but my own. And that neither him nor anyone else can take away from me.


Thanks for the PM,do write more. Much love ❤️

Originally posted by: --fero--

It's phenomenal
Awesome 🤗

Originally posted by: ..Enamour..

One word...Perfect!!

The way you've described Abeer's true feelings is spot on!!

rarely do u see such deep analysis of a character

And the moment I read your title my interest was piqued

And Boy...Am I glad I read

Superb Job

love

Rads😃

Originally posted by: VaticanCameos

Oh my such a big comment!😆 Thank you so much for taking the time to write such a wonderful comment!

I read this ages ago and I couldnt comment then, so sorry for the later reply😳

Aww..It's ok I understand your #GroupbieStruggle😆

This is a true piece of art.

Thank you dear.😳

I feel we're all so carried away by romance in fiction, this kind of just sweeps you up and takes you inside Abeer's mind. Such a breath of fresh air.

I know. I really wanted to write something like this, but I couldn't get the execution right, and then all of a sudden, this idea just hit me and I started writing.😃

And it's so good to see Abeer's thoughts about him as a human, about the society around him, about how his reality is as perfect as other's fantasies only because he chooses them to be so. It's a lesson we could all learn.

Really. We all can take a tip or two from him.

The fact that he's opted to live a life free of burden, even though he could completely be living one, what with a father like Kuber, is so beautiful. We all want to live a life without worry, but how many of us really do?

You preach girl, preach. #FACTS😆

I especially loved the line about people's misconceptions, and he doesn't bother to correct them. I feel like the Abeer you've conceptualized is so much like the Abeer we see on TV, which gives a whole new meaning to everything he says and does.

Oh thank you so much! Really, I'm so glad that you saw that! It means so much to me! ❤️

It's quite hard writing stuff like this, because you have to really get inside a character's head. Putting aside your own preferences/opinions, you really have to show the character.

I feel privileged to have come across this; honest to god, it really helped me to get into Abeer's head while writing my fic.

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Aww thank you so much.🤗

I'm glad that it helped! And you write!? Oh do share. You did sound like you wrote, if that makes sense. Lol because you really were able to get the essence of the OS.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us, and I must thank Kriti for this too!

Please thank YOU for reading my work and giving me such a sweet review. :D

Hehe..Yes you should. Credit is solely on her for this.👍🏼❤️

Originally posted by: beauty14