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Posted: 15 years ago
#21
I like ur writing it will nicely edited with simple writing which keeps curious to read next part..
waiting for ur next part..
where is Kaka??
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Posted: 15 years ago
#22
i just love this story! can't wait for the next part!
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Posted: 15 years ago
#23
Niki, ur ff is sooo awesome, good n realistic with a good story, so far it's going very good!!! u have wrote it very understandable n realy it is not like i am reading it, so plz update the next part very quickly coz i can't wait for it
anywayz good luck!!!
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Posted: 15 years ago
#24
Gr8 one nikki....

Acha who are twins??? I dint get whose kids are those... ANd atya??? Sorry I read both parts again but couldnt make out...

SO I guess next time lot of rains n Archu w/o umbrella n Manav always lending her one.. Ohh I miss those days.. Thx to u I will get to relive them....
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Posted: 15 years ago
#25

@mitts: the twins are savita's children- Vedant and Vandita. Savita is Manav's stepmother.. cos I hate it when I see Manav's OWN mother meting out such bad treatment to him... so I made Savita his step mother in this story.

And Atya is Damodar's muhboli sister. Actually I wanted one mother-like figure for a nice boy like Manav who has a mom like Savita.There is no kaka in this story as of now... ( sorry for Vishy the dishy fans)... maybe will introduce him later.
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Posted: 15 years ago
#26
Nikita you write so well 👏 so Manav has decided to have an exclusive date with you.
Introduce kaka very soon. Else the Vishy fans will loose their hearts.
Edited by -SD- - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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@SD : WowSD, thanks!! Kab hai date.. kahan hai date??? :D
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Posted: 15 years ago
#28
Niks sorry for commenting so late.Read both the parts properly at one go today.

Wow...you think so much about Manav that you introduced a motherly figure for him.👏 And Tarun as always is so supportive of Manav!! And it was funny how the girl turned out to be kabaddi champ and Manav agreed to marry her.😆 And I loved your FF, will be waiting for the update.😉
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Posted: 15 years ago
#29
another beautiful part Nikki..loved it all n can't wait 4 d nest part so post it soon👏👍🏼
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Okay here is part 3. Its a very short one. The next part is the one which will be the defining moment of ArMan relationship.
PART 3
AN ATTEMPT... AND A SHOCK
Manav sat silently on the sofa of the plush office of the Multinational Company. There were people all about, some of them staring in amazement at why a rugged person wearing a loose check shirt with a spot of grease and jeans with chappals was waiting to meet the person at such a big post. Why?
Why indeed, thought Manav. The last 72 hours had gone by so fast. He had gone to the temple, his faith in Bappa strengthened. To top it, he had seen Archana at the temple too and had congratulated her in his heart. He was still wearing the red and yellow holy thread that the pundit had tied on to his wrist, saying it would fulfill every desire of his heart.
And then doom had struck. He had entered a brothel to pull out an astonished and visibly shocked Archana, after he had heard of someone plotting of tarnishing her image in her to-be-fiance's eyes. A few hours after he had dropped her to safety, he had seen a car stop outside the Karanjkar's house, a young man, his family, and the same loose character pimp step out, they went in, came out soon later, and a few minutes later, he saw the family doctor come in the house. That was when standing shellshocked in the garage, he understood that the plan had been successful. The dreams of a young girl had turned into the worst nightmare!
"Your turn now.." the receptionist said.
Manav got up and went in. He didn't know what exactly he was going to say.
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"You... and here..." Satish said, standing up in shock and amazement as Manav entered in.
"You probably don't know me.. my name is Manav Deshmukh and I'm a mechanic by profession.. I work in a garage near Archana's house.."
Satish signalled to stop. "I don't want to know all this. I know what I needed to know about you and Archana and that is sufficient... I saw you with Archana that day... coming out of... out of..."
"A brothel?" Manav suggested.
Satish looked shocked.
Manav cleared his throat. "It is a big misunderstanding.." he began and tried to explain how he had come to know about Archana being there, and had stepped in to save her.
Satish looked doubtful... "So you expect me to believe you- a complete stranger- that Archana has been trapped under what seems to be a perfectly executed plan?"
Manav nodded.
"And what proof do you have? Who knows Archana or her family might have asked you to say all this... her mother came in a little while ago, begging me to accept her daughter back.."
"I do not have any proof of her innocence sir, but you know for yourself of her goodness and kindness. These virtues define the true character of a person... she is a good, innocent, thoughtful girl and very much worthy of you..."
Satish's eyes narrowed... "What relation do you have with that girl.. why are you favouring her? I even find it difficult to imagine a well to do family like hers even having a remote relationship with a person of your class or status? Or are you one of her favoured clients..."
Manav was agitated now... "You are insulting a woman sir.."
"Alright then, I will try to believe what you have said, but what does it accomplish? How will I convince my parents, the society, everyone? It is impossible for me to marry a ... a ... a..."
"Prostitute", Manav said coolly.
Satish was shocked again.
"You looked disgusted saying this word, that girl had to hear it from your mouth. Anyhow, this relationship is your loss, not hers." he said and left.
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Nothing had been accomplished, thought Manav. He had thought that maybe a meeting would clear some misunderstandings, but all was lost. If he could find out the culprit or if he got some solid proof, things would change, he thought.
As he rocked on along the slow rhythm of the train, he saw her in the train. She was holding a big pooja thali which was evidently quite heavy to be held with a single hand. She held the thali with both hands and consequently had a hard time keeping up her balance and kept tripping and swaying along with the train, which was embarassing and uncomfortable to everyone. She looked lost in faraway thoughts.
Manav edged closer. "Uh-oh.."
Archna looked at him.
"your plate, give it to me.." he said and without waiting for a response, held the plate in one hand and held the steel rings suspended from the roof with another.
Archna looked uncomfortable, "There is no need for all this pity.."
"And there is no need to be so formal. You know me, don't you, you must have seen me before."
Archana looked down, she didn't know what to say. It was true. He wasn't doing it out of pity. He was naturally helpful. Although she did not know a lot about him, she did know that he was a decent person who had helped her in various little ways before: chasing away street dogs, helping her with a heavy load from the grocers, etc.
"Anyhow , I wanted to say something else. About that Satish."
"What about him..."
Manav shrugged... "If we have to prove you innocent, we will need to present things to him as solid proofs, he won't be convinced by words. Today your Aai went to convince him but nothing happened... so.."
Archana stopped him midway. "I think you have done enough for me. No need to do anything more on this matter now. Just drop it."
Manav was astonished. "But don't you want to settle things and..."
"You want me to settle down with a person who called me a wh**e in front of my family... sorry, but not exactly my idea of settling down."
Manav looked at her. Angry tears were brimming up in her beautiful eyes. Anything more and she would probably start shouting. He awkwardly looked away and did not say anything more.
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As the train stopped at the station, Manav got down slowly. Wearily he started making his way back to the garage, when he remembered the pooja plate in his hands. He had forgotten to give it back to her. He scanned her face in the station crowd but she wasn't there.
This surprised him. She hadn't gone ahead of him, he was sure. And she wasn't on the platform. Had she changed course and taken another train. Not possible... her home was here and she had left her plate behind with him as well.
He waited till the crowd faded away. But she still wasn't seen. Beads of perspiration formed slowly on Manav's forehead as he realised she was missing. The worst of thoughts were now caving in to his mind. He remembered her angry tears. Where had she gone? WHAT HAD SHE DONE???
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Edited by nikitagmc - 14 years ago

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