NIBIR OS : Na Hokar Bhi Tu Hai Yahin

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NIBIR OS

Na Hokar Bhi Tu Hai Yahin

India, 9:30 AM

Rathore Mansion

(Samar Singh Rathore n his son Arjun Singh Rathore came to have break fast n they were also discussing something...Viraj Singh Rathore greeted them)

Viraj - good morning dad n daadu

SSR n ASR - good morning beta

(Vasu n kaira came with breakfast n starts serving the dishes)

Viraj - daadu this tender is huge agar humein mil gya na toh saara Jaipur chodo sara Rajasthan dekhta reh jayega

Arjun - yes the company is well known n they r world famous...The Karma Enterprises

Samar Singh Rathore - don't worry m sure the result will be in our favour...Let's wait for tomorrow

London, Same time i.e. 5:30 AM

(A girl in her late 20s was sitting on a chair in her balcony n looking at the sky...she saw the stars n closed her eyes n some long lost but painful memories starts reflashing in front of her eyes)

6 years Ago

Jaipur , Rathore Mansion

(Rathore n Gangwals all are in hall)

Samar Singh Rathore - Kabir how dare u...How can u do this

Kabir - daadu I love nisha so what's wrong in this

Nemi Chand Gangwal - wts wrong in this...r u both out of ur mind u r a rajput n she is a jain tum dono ne pyar karne ke baare mein socha bhi kaisey tumhe yeh galat nhi laga

Nisha - dadaji ismein kya galat hai we both love each other n how can u say that ki socha bhi kaisey pyar thode hi na jaat paat ya dharm dekhkar hota hai woh toh bas ho jaata hai...we both were classmates we used to hang out together eat together play together so we fell in love

Ramesh - chodiye na bauji ab thik hai na

Viraj - ramesh uncle is right if they love each other toh let them get married

Vasu - viraj is right papa

Samar Singh Rathore(SSR) - kabir do u want to marry her

Kabir - yes daadu

SSR -get out...agar yahaan rehna hai toh is ladki ko bhoolna hoga otherwise is ghar mein tumhari koi jagah nhi hai

Viraj - daadu aap keh kya rahe hain dekhiye

SSR - hum hamara decision le chuke hain

Nemi Chand Gangwal - aur nisha agar tumne kabir ka haath thaama toh hum tumhara chehra kabhi nhi dekhenge

(Nibir held each other's hand n left from there...everybody tried to stop them but they refused to accept the condition of leaving each other)

2 weeks Later , Delhi

[Nibir got married with their friend (Saurav n dolly's) help]

Dolly - congratulations ji

Saurav - bilkul ji...kabir finally u have got a job in london so u can move there with ur wife

Kabir - thanks guys...it means a lot

Dolly - oye shut up ok...no formalities in friendship...n yeah next week london jana hai na toh abhi thoda relax ho jao

Next Week

(Nisha n Dosa reached airport n nisha was trying kabir's phone no...kabir picked up the call)

Kabir - haan nishu m coming...tumhare liye ek gift lene gya tha bas a rha hoon...damn I hate delhi's traffic accha tum rakho m coming

(nisha was about to disconnect the call when she heard a loud noise n kabir's scream)

Nisha (with a horrified tone)-kabir r u okk...kabir tum thik ho right...kabir kuch toh bolo

(someone answered from kabir's phone)

Stranger - hllo ji inka CP ke pass accident ho gyya hai hum inko city hospital lekar ja rahe hain aap bhi a jaiyye

(that one dialogue was enough to shock nisha)

After 1.5 hour

City Hospital

Doctor - mam he is in very critical condition...we need to operate him can u plzz deposit 4 lakh RS

Nisha - how much

Doctor - 4 lakh

Dolly -I have some 50K in my account

Saurav - mere pass 2.5 lakh hai

Nisha - mere pass kuch bhi nhi hai...mujhe ghar par baat karni hogi

(she dialled Daadu's no)

SSR - who is this

Nisha - daadu its me nisha woh actually na

SSR - listen mujhe tumse koi baat nhi karni

Nisha - daadu wo kabir

SSR - kuch nhi sunna mujhe tum dono jiyo ya maro I don't care ( n he disconnected the call)

Dolly - kya hua

Nisha - disconnect kar diya...lemme call dadaji

(she dialled her dadaji's no)

Nemi Chand Gangwal - who is this

Nisha - dadaji main nisha

(he immediately disconnected the call)

Nisha - dadaji suniye na

(a nurse came there)

Nurse - mam ur husband is conscious now n he wants to meet u

(Nisha ran to meet him...she opened the door n saw her life who was lying there with so many wires attached to his body)

Nisha - tum kaisey ho...pta hai

Kabir -nishu lemme speak plz pta nhi phir mauka milega ya nhi

Nisha - tumhe kuch nhi hoga kabir tum

Kabir - nishu aankhein band kar lene se andhera nhi hota aur isse pehele bohot der ho jaaye mujhe tumse baat karni hai

Nisha - bolo

Kabir -I really really love u nishu

(nisha held kabir's hand)

Nisha - kabir I love u too

Kabir - apni graduation degree ke saath mera death certificate lga dena meri job tumhe mil jayegi

Nisha - shut up kabir...just listen to me

Kabir - for once just listen to me nishu...tumse waada kiya tha ki zindagi bhar tumhara saath doonga tumhe pyar karoonga tumhari zindagi mein saare rang bharoonga par shayad ab wo nhi ho sakega

(nisha was about to say something when kabir interrupted her)

Kabir - don't interrupt me...nishu kabir tumhara tha tumhara hai aur tumhara hi rahega..chahe zindagi khatam ho jaaye par yeh pyar kabhi khatam nhi hoga after all m a one woman man(n he tried to smile) but tum zindagi mein aage badhna...saari zindagi mere liye aanso mat bahana

Nisha - kabir stop it (n she starts crying)

Kabir- don't cry n lemme speak plzzz

Nisha - hmm

Kabir - zindagi bohot lambi hai...isey kaatna mat...isey jeena par ek vaada karo mujhse

Nisha - kyaa

Kabir - main rahoon ya na rahoon par tum un logo ki duniya mein kabhi nhi lautaugi...tumhara rishta sirf mujhse tha aur mujhse hi rahega...aur kisi se nhi...promise me

(nisha forwarded her hand)

Nisha - I promise u kabir main kabhi un logo ki taraf mudkar nhi dekhungi (she placed her head on his hand) jinhone is waqt mein humein akela kar dia wo hamesha hamare liye ajnabee rahenge aur I promise ki main tumhe (suddenly she realized that kabir's hand stopped moving) Kabir Kabir

(his eyes were closed)

Kabirrr!!!!

Present

(Nisha opened her eyes n saw the stars n looked at the shinier one)

Nisha - tomorrow m gonna meet them all but I promise wo mere liye ajnabee the ajnabee hain aur ajnabee rahenge kyunki meri life mein tumhare baad sirf 4 log hain Dolly , Saurav , unka beta Adi n tumhara aur mera ansh

(Suddenly she heard some noise n a 5 year old boy came to her...he was rubbing his eyes)

Ansh - mumma its already 6 hum india kab jayenge adi ke pass

Nisha - lets get ready flight is at 10

Ansh - yayyy

Next Day , 11 AM

Jaipur

(in a huge hall...gangwals n rathore all were there with their families, saurav came to the stage n starts speaking)

Saurav - guys today our company 'The Karma Enterprises' is completing its 5 glorious years...5 years ago our company's MD Mrs Nisha Kabir Singh Rathore had started it,in 2011

(Rathores n Gangwala were shocked after hearing nisha's name)

Saurav - so plzz give her a huge round of applause

(Nisha came on the stage...she was wearing a indo western chudidaar)

Nisha - hllo everybody...well actually namastey after all we r Indians...yeh jo company hai na yeh mere kisi someone special ko dedicated hai wo hamesha kehte the Nishu Zindagi bohot lambi hai isey kaatna mat isey jeena...n see here I m living my life...main aaj world ki top most business woman hoon but franklly speaking main bohot aam si ladki hoon jo aaj tak logo ke dakiyanoosi soch ka anjaam bhugat rahi hoon

(SSR n Nemichand gangwal felt bad)

So aaj ka yeh tender us company ko jaayega jo dil se kuch karna chahtey hai just like my LATE husband Mr Kabir Singh Rathore

(everybody was stunned when they hear the word late)

Nisha - so the tender goes to Khan's

(Then they all left from there n came to the dining hall n vasu starts crying badly, nisha was passing from there when SSR called her)

SSR - nisha beta

Nisha - sorry main kisi ki beti nhi hoon n aap pooche ussey pehle main aapko bta doon jab 6 saal pehle mainey aapko aur dadaji ko call kiya tha tab yehi batane ke liye call kiya tha ki kabir ka accident hua hain but aapne nhi suna n now u all r nothing to me

(ansh came n asked)

Ansh - mamma chalein adi ke saath khelna hai

Nisha - lets go

Viraj - (he put his hand on ansh's head) beta

Nisha - viraj bhai I know u r a nice guy n kabir was so close to u par aap plzz hamari duniya se door rahiye kyunki yehi aapke bhai ki aakhri iccha thi

(nisha n ansh went from there)

In the car

Nisha (monologue) - I know kabir Viraj bhai is a great human being but jo vaada tumse kiya tha wohi sabse badkar tha mere liye

(he hugged ansh n they both went to Dosa's house)

THE END

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Snow12345654321 thumbnail
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Aww...
Awesome OS
Very beautifully written
Loved it😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Good one
I liked the strong and independent nisha a lot
the best was how she faced the families and gave them the required answers


Ps plz update saman re and damsel in distress
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Posted: 9 years ago
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sonal it was awesome 😭
I felt bad for NiBir but I loved how nisha became independent and faced all the problem
do write more miss reading your works 😊
plz pm me next time plz pretty plz 😳
Edited by crazyvaishu - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sonal 😭 i am angry on you ek toh tu update nahi karti hai aur jab karti hai toh rula deti hai 😭
But loved it ❤️
Beautifully written
Nisha the strong girl 😳




SANAM RE KO UPDATE KARO 😲
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Posted: 9 years ago
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😭 🥺
Sonu what happened to you yaar??? jab bhi forum me aati hain emotions ka toofan saath me laati hain...kitnaa rulaati hain tu yaar😭

anyway, coming to the story , you explained it right, love is not something which is done after seeing the caste and religion, it just happens! that's why they say that love is blind!😊

the things which kabir said when before he breathed his last were emotional!😭 and when kabir died, my heart just broke apart🥺🥺🥺

but the way you showed nisha's strong independent character after he died was too good!😊

and both the families being guilty for what they did some years ago 🤔

viraj being a nice guy, but nisha sticking to the promise she had made to kabir was heart touching!❤️

and not to forget the little ansh!so cute he is!
Edited by sam_premc - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Snow12345654321

Aww...

Awesome OS
Very beautifully written
Loved it😊

thanks for liking it dear😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: mishrialways

Good one

I liked the strong and independent nisha a lot
the best was how she faced the families and gave them the required answers


Ps plz update saman re and damsel in distress

thanks for liking it ritz
N I have a exam on 7 toh will update after that😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: crazyvaishu

sonal it was awesome 😭
I felt bad for NiBir but I loved how nisha became independent and faced all the problem
do write more miss reading your works 😊
plz pm me next time plz pretty plz 😳

thanks vaishu for liking it😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: sujoyricky

Sonal 😭 i am angry on you ek toh tu update nahi karti hai aur jab karti hai toh rula deti hai 😭
But loved it ❤️
Beautifully written
Nisha the strong girl 😳




SANAM RE KO UPDATE KARO 😲

thanks for liking it sujoy
Moi wanted to write something emotional so here is the result😛

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