Nibir ts - **CINDERELLA** epilogoue on page 15 [completed]

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mishrialways

@mishrialways

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+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#61

Hayee kya update tha yaar

so cute

kriti sweet heart she is yaar

helping kabir and even teasing him

kabir bechara kitna wait kiya

finally nisha found

the story of nisha was nice

both love each other with just one meet

awesome mansi lovely

kabir's monologues were awesome

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urmila

@Bugheaded_NiBir

Explorer

Posted: 9 years ago

#62

waah!!!superb update mansi...😊

prince and his cinderella...😳

i was in nibir wonderland...😳

pls update your story destinied together soon...pretty pls...

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arviabhigya

@arviabhigya

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#63

Bas bahut hua aalas aaj toh main comment likh ke chodungi !🤣

Jaise maine kaha tha, I m writing a comment after ages so keep ur expectations low 🤣

So here it goes 😆

Aaj pata nahin kyun, koi line ya para copy nahin ho raha hai toh will just spell out the parts which I loved 😊

Lovely chapter Mansi 👏👏👏

Loved the different flavour u added to the epic old tale of Cinderella and her charming prince😆

A refreshing twist indeed👏👏👏

Your description of the mysterious girl was beautiful and poetic

And the description of the dance was amazing

Ek toh u have become an expert in narrating dance sequences😉

And the way u give meaning to every dance move, it just makes the entire reading process magical for ur reader

That part when Kabir finds Kirti tied up but all he is bothered about is the mystery girl was funny and cute😳

Waise kidnapper kitni cute thi, ki kirti ka kaam kar diya aur uske liye ek sorry letter aur gift chod ke chali gayi 😳😆

I m sure aaj tak kisi ka itne cute kidnapper se paala nahin pada hoga 😆

Loved that analogy of that dance step and the sun and earth👏👏

The lines about the carved foot, the one about always wanting her to be his arms and the one about the warmth were my favorite

Beautifully penned down indeed👏👏

Love how our Cinderalla was so bold 😉😃 much different than the boring Cinderalla who is too shy to even talk to the prince 😆

Her dialogue that she is the other half was quite cool😃😉

Love how she said Find me soon prince charming😉😃😆

Kabir chodo even I would be in love with such a beautiful, witty, intelligent, talented and cool girl 😆

All in all, a truly delightful read 😃👏👏

Had fun reading it😉

And u never fail to amaze me with ur stories 🤗😃

Edited by arviabhigya - 9 years ago

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Amina...

@Amina...

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#64

Awe !!!
Such A Cute Update It Was 😳😛😳
So Beautiful
So Lovely ❤️❤️
So Dreamy
So Sweet 😳😳
So Beautifully Written 👏

OUTSTANDING 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼

I M Feeling Like , Like In A Beautiful Fairy Tale , Where Everything Is Perfect ... Like A Person's Most Beautiful Dream

Loved It Sooo Much Mansi ... You Are Amazing Dear ⭐️👏⭐️
Thanks For Writing This ... But I Wanna Read More Of It , Plz Plz Plz Write An Epilogue 😛😳😛

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Aimna khan

@star.angel

Dazzler

Posted: 9 years ago

#65

Loved it mansi

It was awesome

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Anmol

@Anmol333

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+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#66

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.vishrutha.

@.vishrutha.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#67

Beautiful update!

Kabir's feelings, eagerness, determination and at the same time dissapointment on not finding his princess yet, was so beautifully written! 👏

Kirti helping Kabir to find his princess was a very nice moment!

Kabir forgetting his keys and coming back to the academy to fetch it was a good idea to make him meet Nisha. 👍🏼

Now my favourite part of the whole update, Him meeting his princess!

You have shown it so wonderfully Mansi!

She being in the light and him watching her from the dark was so symbolic of how the situation and time has changed now. Before she was in the background and he wasn't noticing her.

Coming to the dance, right from the song selection to the dance steps : it was so so beautifully written ❤️.

Each step of hers was in sink with the lyrics, clearly reflecting Nisha's feelings, though it was Kabir's POV!

Him joining her at the end, the hug on her demand, and their conversation that followed were all very well written 👍🏼

Also loved how you showed Kabir's thought process for each and every thing Nisha did, be it her smile, laugh or her warm up.

The Kiss at the end along with Kabir's monologue was so cute! 😳

A very different, dreamy and beautiful TS! ❤️

Thanks for pm 😊

Do write more if you get time 😉

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neha_zamia500

@neha_zamia500

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Posted: 9 years ago

#68

Awww.. I wanted Read more

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Soundharya

@Feltonate

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#69

Wow !!! Awesome

Kabir aur uski Cinderella!!

Update soon

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arviabhigya

@arviabhigya

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#70

So here I am, again at a loss of words/adjectives to aptly describe your story😆

Dimaag ke ghode daurane padenge🤣

A truly amusing, lovely, delightful chapter👏👏😳

Super duper cute, adorable and Nibirilicious😳😳

Aaaj phir se koi para quote nahin ho pa raha hai so just spelling out the parts I loved😉

Loved Kabir's description of Nisha😳

That part where Kirti asks Kabir to decribe Nisha and he goes into this romantic zone while she is trying to find clues that would help them is hilarious 🤣

Agar main Kirti ki jagah hoti aur mera koi friend aise behave karta toh main usse dande se maarti 🤣

Waise Kabir kaafi poetic lagta hai😆

Kabir dhakkan hai ye toh hum samajh gaye 😆 na ladki ka naam pata na poori tarah se uska chehra dekha magar usse sheher ke saari dance academy mein nikal pada dhoondne 🤣 Uss maamle mein he is quite similar to Cinderella's prince jisne apne aadmiyon ko bola tha ki mere liye woh ladki dhoond ke lao jiska pair joote mein fit aa jaaye🤣 But at least Kabir khud nilka apni cinderella ko dhoondne😆

Kabir remembering the watchman's words and feeling scared was hilarious🤣

That entire part from the time Kabir enters the academy till he spots Nisha is described beautifully👏

Waise the way they meet reminds me of this scene between Rey and Kriya and their dance sequence😊

As always loved the dance sequence👏😃

Loved that line about the contours matching👏👏👏 Actually loved that entire part where Kabir removes Nisha's blindfold and their reactions thereon❤️

Love Nisha's cool attitude and intelligent nature😳 She is what I would term as the perfect Cinderella 😉

Kabir pouting like a kid is sooo cute and adorable😳

I just loved Nibir's conversation yaar 😳

Loved that line about Kabir meeting Nisha at midnight😃

Dancer and an athlete😆 Ye Nisha toh multi-talented nikli yaar😆

Waise Kabir sach mein dhakkan hai 😆 Yahan ladki keh rahi hai ki usne sab kuch ladke ke liye kiya tab bhi he wants her to spell it out🤣

Kabir's reaction when Nisha says she likes him is tooo cute😆