Nibir ts - **CINDERELLA** epilogoue on page 15 [completed]

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sujay kumar

@Sujayricky

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Posted: 9 years ago

#11

Awesome mansi 👏
Really it is amazing 👏
Kabir monologue was awesome
Kirti 🤣
Princess 😳
Update soon but after destined together please 😃

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urmila

@Bugheaded_NiBir

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Posted: 9 years ago

#12

Mind blowing update Mansi!!!

Kabir's POV was just awesome..

Pls update soon...,

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.vishrutha.

@.vishrutha.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#13

Another wonderful story from you!

How do you think of such brilliant concepts mansi?

Coming to the update, a lovely start!

A frustrated and tensed Kabir yelling at the dancers for perfection, and his monologue that followed was too good!

His will power to win the investors funds was portrayed really well.

Also liked how you showed Kirti to be sly but not an arrogant girl with attitude and how she was hardworking.

A suspense element in the form of watchman's words? 😉

Your description of the dance was amazing!!

Loved the way you introduced the mystery girl and Kabir's description of her beauty and dance steps was absolutely wonderful!

What I loved the most was their convo in between the dance, the way she said 'she's his better half', kept calling him prince and exited asking him to find her! so beautifully written! ❤️

Kirti tied to a chair in a storeroom and Kabir chuckling at her state was funny 😆

A perfect closure with a determined Kabir wanting to make the unknown princess as his' forever. Overall an amazing update it was! 👍🏼

Please Continue soon and thanks for pm 😊

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Anmol

@Anmol333

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Posted: 9 years ago

#14

Wow, fantastic, fabulous, mind blowing...

👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

Eagerly waiting for next part plzz update soon!!!!

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Sameeha

@Sameeha151

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Posted: 9 years ago

#15

Mansi u r just...u left me speechless..i cant say anything about ds story,concept and the way u described it was just nothing but PERFECT and BRILLIANT.. I always praise ur work from the bottom of my heart.. I cant stop myself from being into ur stories it looks like everything is going around me..lastly i wud love to say ds was really really AWESOME 👏 👏

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Shats

@Shats

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Posted: 9 years ago

#16

Different and catchy concept.
Mysterious Cinderella 😉 😉
Dr dance 😳 😳 d way u described it 👏 👏 beautiful 😳 😳
But m still wandering nisha ne kirti ko abduct kyun kiya 😲 😲 and he cm she knows d full routine 😲 😲
Loved it
Update soon