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poornima_15

@poornima_15

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Posted: 9 years ago

#161

wow what an update ... i just loved it soo much... this new way of writing made me want to keep reading it ... annie this was amazing ... ur perception added to the story moulded it into a beautiful ending ... i really liked this part ... i m short of words but i want to say more ... idk how to say it ... u just made my day after reading it 😊

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Krishi

@Black_Maniac

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Posted: 9 years ago

#162

Baba 😉
It was super amazing... Dolly's entrance was a bliss... And then the flow of emotions was great too...
"100 ways to bombard love stories" 🤣
The delusion... I thought the real Nisha will be confused when he says "Tu fir mujhe thappad maregi?"
Thanks for this Annie...
Another memory I'll cherish forever 😳

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@Klaustrophillic

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Posted: 9 years ago

#163

Originally posted by: poornima_15
wow what an update ... i just loved it soo much... this new way of writing made me want to keep reading it ... annie this was amazing ... ur perception added to the story moulded it into a beautiful ending ... i really liked this part ... i m short of words but i want to say more ... idk how to say it ... u just made my day after reading it 😊

thankoo poornima!😳

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@Klaustrophillic

Sparkler

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Posted: 9 years ago

#164

Originally posted by: Black_Maniac
Baba 😉
It was super amazing... Dolly's entrance was a bliss... And then the flow of emotions was great too...
"100 ways to bombard love stories" 🤣
The delusion... I thought the real Nisha will be confused when he says "Tu fir mujhe thappad maregi?"
Thanks for this Annie...
Another memory I'll cherish forever 😳

thankoo krishu😳

@bold even i was confused, what i wanted to write!😆😆

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.vishrutha.

@.vishrutha.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#165

Well that was a really confusing update 😆

To begin with, the opening scene was really beautiful!

The whole scene of Nisha making herself comfortable in Kabir's arms and him shielding her from the sunlight was so symbolic of them being each other's salvation, that they would be there for each other always no matter what the circumstances might be.

Nisha speaking to Kabir thinking he is asleep was the best part of the whole update!

You have written it so well! I absolutely loved that part. ❤️

For me that was the true definition of their love, remembering the other part of your soul when u fail to recognise your own!.

The Kabir-Dolly conversation that followed was again very well written and much needed to knock some sense into Kabir.

Coming to the terrace scene, I actually got a little confused when you wrote ' I thought '. I brushed it off thinking it may be a typo 😆.

Kabir's pain on leaving Nisha and the Gangwals, his wish to see her one last time, his last hope to reunite with her when in airport was nice

And then the next paragraph made me realise this was your perception!

Now this is why I told in the start that it was a really confusing update for me, because one moment I'm feeling sad over Kabir's pain and the next moment I'm laughing at your monologue 😆

Kabir's hallucination of Nisha was nice and their final reunion was also really good! (hope that was not his delusion too )

A very different type of ending but it did leave a smile on my face at the end.

Overall a wonderful TS and loved reading it!

Thanks for pm 😊

Edited by vishruthaLN - 9 years ago