AvNeil FF: A MILLIONAIRE'S FIRST LOVE #Thread 2(Upto Chap 46)

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docritu99

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Posted: 7 years ago

#361

Originally posted by: paayaal
Neil spent a month searching for Avni...wow!! Oh yeah.!
D Sinha...Neil being judgemental just based on someonez appearance is so unlike him...but I can understand, hez caught in such an unusual situation...frantically looking for a girl he fell for on first sight & then finding her & losing her again & unable to go search for her because of Bebe! The sight unfurled in front of him was too unexpected for him to react. Firstly his age, secondly his appearance which was not near to someone who is so popular and best in his work. So yeah that led him to judge Abhi. But still he beleived his caliber and gave him His Case.

Even though I know D Sinha completed his mi ssion successfully, m now looking fwd to the process & his & Neilz interactions! How.? I mean how u always know whats coming next.? I am in awe.! Yes. That is what which is coming in next chap. So stay tuned

Thank u so much payal.!

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docritu99

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Posted: 7 years ago

#362

Originally posted by: Prnmani
Awesome Riya. Nice

Thank u so much dear.!

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docritu99

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Posted: 7 years ago

#363

Originally posted by: Avneill
Superb

Thank u so much

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srinithi

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Posted: 7 years ago

#364

I entirely forgot about Abishek . He was apponted by Neil to fetch information about Avni . 😆 Kuch jyada hi soch liya meine .

He was following her for one whole month forgetting everything 😲 Total love struck at the very first sight . Now I am impatient for Avni's reaction on this. Firstly it feels strange to hear that someone had been following you for so long without your knowledge and had appointed a detective to get information about you . Gussa bhi jayas hai . Hope she doesn't misunderstand .

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Ekta

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Posted: 7 years ago

#365

You like ending on cliff hangers now a days...

Neil to bahut pehle hi avni ke pyaar me gir gaya tha..

Ladka bas shayar bnte bante reh gaya🤣

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prathe

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Posted: 7 years ago

#366

wow what a cliffhanger yaar😆 but bantha hai readers ko satana chahiye todi bahuth writers ko bhii😛

accha build up dia hai apne maza agaya padne mein😳

will wait for your next part😳

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1127246

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Posted: 7 years ago

#367

Aww this Khanna shahab is too cute and iresistable

yaar he is a totally gone case. I can understand the

poor fellow Abhi's state and not to forget that he is

also adorable. I think I kindaa like him.

Yaar this is the thing I love about your writing

that you make all the characters relatable and

lovable.

Waiting for next Chap.😉

With Love

Kathy ❤️

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darsh333

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Posted: 7 years ago

#368

I reread the whole 30 chapters from the beginning at a go today to notice where all i had missed the hints you had dropped way back then!😆Stalked both threads till this page😎

Now i get it how you had managed to keep the suspense alive😉you had actually dropped the proper hints only in the 1st few chapters..then the story kinda went to a phase where you successfully managed to keep us in the avneil land for long until you broke the suspense😆i appreciate your writing skills for that👏am i not right??😉

After rereading i understood bebe knew it from the very beginning..sapno ki rani😆..neelama from the 1st meeting at pareikh house..and i guess boys gang knew it too??though their chances are less😆shweta and avni were the people who had no idea about this😆

Photos were taken by abhishek as according to your latest update?😆but neil started hanging those photos only recently..after their engagment as avni had been to his room then and there were no photos then or the photos was hung after his fever chapter??😆especially after his kiss miss scene😃

You had already left a teaser way looong back about neil entering his room to find avni seeing all these pics..how did i miss them then and paid no heed that was a hint too!🥱

I know avneil are now in mumbai..but if incase she is going back to jaipur in upcoming chapters can you include avni dd ali aakash anjali conversations in that emergency exit areas..i realised after reading today that they never clubbed up after the initial chapters..

And where is rhea??she is missing since long..or will she come to close some other loophole??😆

And it suddenly struck to me..why did you choose avni's profession as doctor!Afterall coz our writer riya is a doctor!😊or any other reasons behind it??😊

And lemme say..after rereading all the chps at one go it brought such a good soothing feeling..i was all smiles while reading it..thanks for the smiles🤗

And you are indeed such a good writer riya!..you use very simple words to write your story and your words connect so well with us readers..i loved the whole ff..😊till now on reading it occasionally after every update i never realised its beauty..reading at one go i understood this indeed deserves to be a book!and it is becoming one😊

Now onto the latest update..abhishek had captured her photos..and neil followed her 1 long month..hope it doesn't make avni angry..

Neil was a gone case way back then..he staying at jaipur for such long..no wonder he was so madly in love with her..😆

I have got a suggestion..if you could use the black colouring for the flashbacks instead of the blue..i personally feel it is a bit difficult to read the blue one..instead could you change to a different font in black to show it is flashback..only if you are comfortable and okay in considering this bechari reader's request😆

Update the next part very soon..!

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WhtinAname

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Posted: 7 years ago

#369

Hey Riya!

Another great update.

First things first.I love the the characterization of Abhisheik.Since he is completely ur creation so all credits go to u.He is funny, hardworking and talented.The guy took up such a daunting job and didn't give up on it.I can only imagine how difficult it is to take pics of girls without getting manhandled.Bechara pit bhi gya is chakar mein🤣

Neil's love struck looks and helplessness helped in convincing Mr D.Sinha.

Btw what does D stand for?

I wonder what Neil would hv said to Avni had he been able to find her himself.

I still remember the old conversation between Neil and Bebe but honestly I hadn't guessed Bebe's involvement.Though the 'sapno ki rani' dialogue had left me confused dt tym.

Riya u hv so effortlessly sewn the lines from the old chapters with the new revelations.Dts some really smart writing on ur part👏.

So did u write the whole scene during that chpter only or did u write it nw??

Neil not wanting become a sadak chap aashique... loved dt... matured with a sense of humor.

Waiting for Bebe's jasoosi...dt is ur next update.

Edited by drbeth - 7 years ago