ps: before i comment on #7 i know u have written #8 but i will comment on that tommrrow as its 1:30 am in the uk so commented only for #7
loved # 7 sanju just loved ali and rhea scene... for once i loved it here there is no planning in rhea mind she will work at chamko cafe with all her heart... loved how ali cupped her face and told her not to cry...loved how ali told rhea she can stay at the cafe as he has a small house behind the cafe... the way u described the rooom was perfect...hayee avneil didnt realize they were holding hands and how awkward they got when they reached near their room and let go of each others hand...liked how rhea started helping ali clear up the room...just loved avni and neil pov... loved it how they turned to look at each other the same time and had an eye lock ...liked how avni was searching for neil the next morning but he had already left... loved ali and rhea scene liked how ali told the waiter that rhea will work at the cafe from now on and also liked how he teaches her certain things...loved neil and neela scene especially how he got to know about everything that happened in that past and how his eyes got moist and they way he told neela he is with them...aww loved how avni was checking her phone to see if there is any message or call from neil but nothing and this angered her more...loved how bebe avni and shweta were sitting in the lawn and what i loved that despite shweta didn like avni she actually wanted to know about her...liked how when neil came to the garden he first looked at avni then bebe... also loved how he sat next to her...but wonder what bebe was telling them about?...ohh so these type of question liked how bebe asked what their first impression was about each other and loved how avneil looked at each other...loved avenil pov during that time...haha was laughing when avni said ek dum karab bauht irritating laga mujeh and the way shweta and bebe reacted could imagine their expression.. loved it when neil said o madam...ye feelings mutual hai... Mujeh bhi aisa hi laga..' ki kyu bagwaan ..kyu iss ladki ko mere saath yaha akela chod Diya..'... shweta was shocked as she doesnt know avenil knew each other from before... omg i just loved avenil lines when they said to each other
Avni: aahan?..aise toh nahi laga tha...tum mere upar the... Agar mai tumhe push nahi karti toh tum...
Neil cuts in without letting her complete: hahaha...toh tumhare iss chote se dimaaag mein ye sab chal raha tha...
Avni: neilll...
Neil: mujeh pata tha...ke you really liked me...tabhi toh meri shirt abhi tak nahi laut aayi...
Avni: aisa nahi hai ok?...aur shirts ka kami hai kya?..humesha shirt pe aake atak jaate ho...
Neil: ha hai problem ...shirts ka kami hai...return kardo meri shirt... Oh wait a min .. u don't have it right...itne saal woh apne paas rakh ke kya karogi tum.. just loved these scene sanjuu especially where neil is still asking for his shirt ... the way shweta is trying to register what they r trying to say...the way avni said she has the shirt and will return it and neil was surprised and asked "itne saal apne paas rakha?" and how both again looked at each other... loved it when bebe asked for how long and both together said 5 years... but both came back to reality and saw a smirking bebe...loved what bebe said to avneil...loved ali and rhea scene.. liked how ali joked and said help lena se tumhara salary kam nahi hoga rhea...liked how avni came to neil and said she wants to talk to him and how both sat on the sofa loved it when hen grabbed a cushion holding onto it tightly and how her actions tensed him..but then neil relaxed as he knew everything about her..liked how when avni said meri majboori ke wajeh se mai tumhari zindagi spoil nahi karsakti neil.tumhe koi zaroorat nahi hai ke tum iss rishte mein raho..ye thopa gaya hai tumhare upar...isiliye and how u mentioned the way neil said isiliye kya?..bolo..rukh kyu gayi? with so much intensity could actually imagine him speaking like that... liked how when neil asked avni if she wants to say anything else and when she said no loved it when neil said to avni ab mere baat dhyaan se suno...tumhe Jo samaj na hai samjho..ye rishita tumne joda hai...par mai tumhe ye todne nahi dunga...maine pehle bhi kaha tumse...agar rishita jodne ka himmat hai...toh usse nibhane ka bhi himmat karo...so ye rishita todne ka ..yaha se chale jaane ka..ye sab thoughts apne dimaaag se hatao...kyu karti ho tum aisa?..kyu har baar bhaag jaati ho?...loved how neil was questioing avni and the way she said she loved someone else and neil knew she was lying but when looked at her eyes it scared him. only if he knew she loved him,,, when neil asked avni who that person is i was thinking what will she say but there was a long silence but bebe broke that as she called neil ...
loved how ali and rhea scene especially where ali was cooking dinner for both of them...loved how neil covered avni while she was sleeping...avni was actually awake but she pretended to sleep to avoid neils questions... loved it a lot when she turned around after 30-40 mins and was surprised to see neil looking at her even i was surprised sanju but i actually loved it...loved how he said good night avni called out to him i thought she would say something but she said "kuch nahi good night"... liked how he looked at her little more then closed his eyes
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