Still Star-Crossed- A Ali Rhea FF Scene 3 Update PAGE 3

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Posted: 8 years ago
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So I suddenly was struck with the idea of writing something to help me focus on work. lol and Ali and Rhea seemed to fit in the central plot perfectly. The premise and the characters are the same as Naamkaran but ofcourse some events will change the course of the story drastically but the relationships are the same- AvNeil got married in the same manner but Rhea and Ali's role in the marriage are very different. Rhea's stupidity (and kind of innocence) sparked this idea in my head so i penned it down but I dont have any idea what direction this will take so no promises to keep the cast to character. I guess the story starts at interval and I will figure out the beginning and the end with you all!

Scene 1 Still Star-Crossed:

"These violent delights have violent ends

And in their triump die, like fire and powder

Which, as they kiss, consume"--- R&J

She didn't quite understand why, but all Rhea could think of, sitting in the middle of the street right now, was how she always kept her eyes closed whenever he came close to her. Ali used to tease- if she was so repulsed by him, maybe she should stop seeking him out. She hated him back then. His family hated his entire background- they still do. She had a fianc as well. But she still came back to him and closed her eyes as soon as he neared. Every time. She'd just snap at him, slap him, make a snarky comment and allow him to kiss her into calmness. She'd never told him why she did it; she wanted to keep their moment of intimacy with her as long as possible, captured in her lashes like the sandman's everlasting dream. Who knew if she'd get to touch him again? So, as her love lay dead on her lap, his blood soaking through her white cotton dress, colouring her pregnant belly red, she kept her eyes closed.

She couldn't tell how long it'd been since she closed her eyes. She could hear her sister screaming to her husband about how what happened to her parents can't happen to her sister, Neil asking her to snap out of it and let him go, Ali's Nanno yelling hysterically- perhaps cursing her. Neil kept on asking her to let go of his body for post-mortem. For a second Rhea wanted to retort that she couldn't even leave his body for Neil, what makes him think she'd leave it for any other reason and then laugh like a maniac. But she wouldn't let anyone ruin her focus right now. Rhea was decidedly stubborn and the romantic little fool she was raised to be was not going to let reality rob her of her happiness. She kept her eyes closed and continued to hold onto him. But alas, a death strong kick from her inside forced her to open her eyes and her hands to let go of him to rub soothing circles around her belly as has been instinct as of late. Rhea came back to reality as Neil and a bunch of other- perhaps police yanked away her happiness from her arms. She looked down to see her hands covered in dried blood which she was now smearing over where her child rested fitfully. She rubbed her hands to get the blood off but Avni came and stopped her.

A: Rhea! Hosh mein ao! Kya kar rahen hon? Itna ragroge toh haath mein chaale par jeyenge.

She holds onto my face. Rhea tumhe chot toh nahi ayi na? Aur yeh sab kya hua? Kisne kiya?!? Kya yeh sab dadi ne kiya?

Rhea could see and hear her sister's desperation but honestly, she couldn't be bothered unburdening her curiosity with answers when her own lungs felt like they were about to crush under a brick tonne. She couldn't breathe and all she wanted was to eat something and wash herself clean of the blood that was beginning to crust up. Rhea jerks off Avni's hands and starts walking the home she shared with her now dead husband.

R: Jinhe mujhe chorke jana tha who sab chale gaye. Main ghar ja rahi hoon- bhukh lagi hain. Mera bhuka rehna bacche k liye thik nahi. Main freshen up hoke tumse Neela Chachi k waha milti hoon. Thik hain?

Rhea starts walking away.

A: Par Rhea...

Nanno puts her hands on Avni's shoulder and addresses Rhea.

N: Kaha jaa rahi hain tu maharani? Moi Ali ko toh kha gayi yeh dayawanti ki saya, aab usike ghar jaarahi hain? Teri himmat kaise huyi? Pata nahi kaunsi manhoos ghari thi ki yeh ladki moi bacche k zindagi main aayi. Kitni baar kaha use- nafrat karti hain dayawanti humari zaat se, jaan le li usne moi Ayesha ki aur teri jaan bhi le legi, par usne meri ek na suni! Pyaar ki patti parhayi thi na tune use! Kar liya pyaar? Mar diya mere bacche ko?

Over the past four months that their relationship had been official, Rhea hadn't managed to win over Nanno. And to be honest, she didn't have the patience for it. She was polite but being pregnant meant any and all patience was wearing thin. So eventually she stopped trying. She'd hoped if not Ali, then her baby would be the bridge but she'd never warmed upto her child either. Not that she could blame her- Rhea's family had treated her daughter much worse than she ever could. So she tolerated. Ali may've been no Ashish Chachu but she knew Nanno was very important to him. But now, she's had it.

A: Nanno yeh aap kya bol rahe hain. Is mein Rhea ki kya galti thi? Uski haalath toh..

Rhea turns around looking like a mad woman and shushes Avni immediately.

R: Bas! Aur ek shabd nahi kahengi aap! Aap shayadh bhool rahi hain, k jiske bare mein aap bol rahi hain- woh Ali aap logon ka muh bola beta aur dost- pati tha woh mera! Bap hain woh mere bacche ka. Yeh uska khoon hain! Maine mara hain use? Woh main nahi thi jisne Dayawanti Mehta ko shrap diya tha ki uski ghar ki betin bhi ek din bin baap k bacche ko janam degi. Dekhiye mujhe! Hogayi apki iccha puri Fatimaji. Main barbaad hogayi. Chala gaya mera pyaar. Mar diya use goli. WOH BHI AAP HI K ANSH NE! AMOL NE MAAR DIYA MERE ALI KO! MAR GAYA WOH! MERI ZINDAGI, MERI KHUSHIYAN, MERA GHAR SAB KUCH USS BHAI NE UJAR DIYA JISKE SAATH MAIN BARI HUYI. Mere apne bhai ne.

Rhea breaks down in tears, hearing her screams of anguish Neil asks the police and all to go with Ali's body. Avni falls down beside Rhea and shakingly holds her.

A: Yeh nahi ho sakta. Rhea yeh tera vehem bhi toh ho sakta hain na? Mujhe pata hain ki Aman abhi bhi sahi raaste nahi aaya par woh kisiko mar nahi sakta.

She takes Rhea's face in her hands.

A: Bolna Rhea! Nahi mar sakta na woh? Chalo mujhe apna behen nahi manta par tujhse toh pyaar karta hain na? Tere pati ko woh nahi mar sakta. RHEA BOLNA YEH SAACH NAHI HAIN!

R: YAHI SAACH HAIN! KITNI BEWAKOOF THI MAIN! HUMESHA MERA ISTEMAL KARTE RAHE AUR MUJHE LAGA- nahi Rhea. Yeh teri family hain. Ek na ek din tujhe maaf kar denge. Yeh samajh hi nahi payi k jo bhai chup chap khara hoke dadi ko support kar sakhta hain jab woh mujhe marne ki dhamki de rahi thi, woh mere Ali ki jaan bhi le sakta hain. KITNI BEWAKOOF THI MAIN! USE KYUN MAR DIYA?!? UDHARWALE' SE PYAAR KARNE KI GALTI TOH MAINE KIYA THA! TOH PHIR MAUT BHI MUJHE HI AANI THI! ALI KYUN?!?!?

Rhea wipes her tears and in a frenzy goes to Nanno.

R: Aap toh mujhe suna rahi thi na? Yeh dekhiye. She points at the blood smeared all over her dress. Yeh mere Ali ka khoon hain, jo aapke apne khoon ne bahaya. Humare bhai ne. Aab kya kehengi? BOLIYE! DENGI MERE BACCHE KO INSAAF? BHEJENGI APNE BACCHE KO JAIL? NAHI NA? Main bhi nahi bhejungi.

Rhea breaks down and starts crying. Nanno cannot believe her own ears and she breaks down as well.

R: Mujhe bas shanti chahiye thi. Bas Ali aur humara naya family. Main tumhari tarah strong aur samajdar nahi hoon Avni. Mujhe yeh badla aur violence virasat mein NAHI CHAHIYE THA! Aur mujhe aab in sabse, iss family se aur sab se door jana hain. Rhea looks down at her blood covered stomach and starts crying again. Woh log mere bacche ko bhi mar denge! Kuch nahi rahega. She grabs Avni's arm who was sitting completely still on the road. Avni, behen hain na tu meri? Ali ka best friend? Arre woh toh tujhse pyaar karta tha. Saalon se. Mujhse bhi zyada. Please, main haath jorti hoon, tujhe uska vasta. Meri maadat kar! Mujhe yahan se nikal do! Nahi rehna mujhe iss desh mein. Please!!!

Avni puts her hand on Rhea's and looks at her determinedly.

A: Mar chuka hain humara bhai. Ali ke saath use bhi maan ke dafna diya humne. Iska badla Amol Mehta zaroor chukayega. Jab tak main aur Neil zinda hain Rhea tujhe aur mere nanhe se dost ko kuch nahi hoga.

N: Avni hum Rhea ko jane nahi de sakhte. Woh iss murder ki ek chashmadid gava hain! He turns to Rhea. Rhea main tumhe kuch nahi hone dunga, main tumhe insaaf dilaunga.

R: Insaaf? Mere Ali ko protection tak nahi de payi tumhara system. Insaaf kya dilayegi.

Neil tries to argue with her but is cut-off by Avni.

A: Yeh sab baad mein. Abhi ke liye Rhea ko ghar le jana bohut important hain.

Rhea looks around and looks to Avni.

R: Ali?

N: Rhea hum post mortem k baad Ali ko masjid le jayenge, Avni tumhe wahi leke ajayega.

She nods and Avni takes her home.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Your ff shaked me really . Very nicely written Tejaswini.
Really very emotional.
You just have no idea it touch my heart so deeply.
If he would have been angry i would have conquered him with love...
But he is gone
I m still here...
Helpless...
Don't even have the reason to wait...😭
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vu1998

Your ff shaked me really . Very nicely written Tejaswini.

Really very emotional.
You just have no idea it touch my heart so deeply.
If he would have been angry i would have conquered him with love...
But he is gone
I m still here...
Helpless...
Don't even have the reason to wait...😭


Thank you so much! ⭐️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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OMG??? ALi is dead...!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Omg what a drastic twist! You wonderfully penned Riya's emotion i totally love it.
You're gonna to continue this asap girlll!!!!!!!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: lol_rofl

OMG??? ALi is dead...!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Omg what a drastic twist! You wonderfully penned Riya's emotion i totally love it.
You're gonna to continue this asap girlll!!!!!!!


Am on it! seems to be helping me focus. 😆 ty!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Really m having tears when m reading this ff.cant see ali dead n the way you have portrayed rhea.bang on gal.
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Originally posted by: tejaswiniwenham


Am on it! seems to be helping me focus. 😆 ty!


you r welcome gal😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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i'm about to cry...
this is best shot i read so far in this forum ...
u wrote it soo well...even though we didn't get much of ALEA...i could still connect to the story.. i still felt for them...i felt sooo bad for rhea...just because u penned it down soo well...
thankyou for starting this beautiful ff...please continue it...i wud like to read more and more of such master pieces from u...
❤️
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Posted: 8 years ago
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The timeframe of the story will shift back and forth to capture moments that'll make their relationships make more sense. so bare with me. @everyone who posted their heartfelt comments thank you! this is a much lighter chapter to ease the pathos of the previous. 😊


Scene Two A: Still Star-Crossed


"Love recognizes no barriers. It jumps hurdles, leaps fences, penetrates walls to arrive at its destination full of hope"- Maya Angelou



5 years earlier- Rhea is 18 years old and Ali is around 21 years old.

Rhea was undoubtedly the most beautiful girl in her college. Or so she thought and most importantly the boys in college all agreed. So, when her friends all dragged her to some Chamko Caf to try their luck with the hot young chef/owner of the place, Rhea was sure about two things- A) as long as she was there, dusri ladkiyon ki koi chance hi nahi thi, woh jo bhi ho, Rhea ko dekhte hi use bhi baki sab ki tarah pyaar ho jayega and B) Rhea would surely be disappointed by hot dude' as she'd been by every other hot dude'.

As Rhea entered the caf, she noticed how, well for the lack of a better word, hipster-y the place looked. She wouldn't voice it out loud but something about the location made her oddly uncomfortable yet at home at the same time. There was some distant memory at the back of her mind pertaining to this place. She just couldn't quite place it. Her friends dragged her to a seat right next to the little pond, with a clear view of the cash desk- just hoping to get a glimpse of Mr Hot Dude' as Rhea had taken to calling him in her head. But alas, the girls were disappointed as even after two, what Rhea had to admit were delicious, rounds of cold coffee, Mr Hot Dude' was nowhere to be seen. That was when Rhea had decided that she'd rather be home doing her dressing and make-up tutorials on Instagram than scope out bawarchi Mr Hot Dude' whom wouldn't have a chance in a century pataoing THE RHEA MEHTA, one and only granddaughter (well that counts) of Mrs Dayawanti Mehta. Her family would simply never approve...unless his parents were casual crore patis ofcourse. But looking around, Rhea doubted that.

Thinking that Rhea said her goodbyes and got up to leave. She was walking towards the exit when suddenly someone bumped into her from behind making her fall on her face and dropped some scalding hot tea all over her right shoulder blade. Rhea screamed in pain as the heat burned her. She turned around to assassinate the clumsy, lazy, stupid waiter of this STUPID CAFE! Right now, she was in the mood to pretty much burn everything around her! But suddenly she found herself completely unable to speak.

A: Oh my god! Hey tum thik toh ho na? I am so sorry! Woh baccha bhagte bhagte mujhse takra gaya yaar. I'm so sorry! Shit! Yeh chai bhi bilkul boiling tha! Here take my hand.

He extended his hand towards Rhea, she silently took it and got up without a word about how she would make his life hell for the cut on her forehead. Rhea kept on staring at him like she was in a trance and couldn't take her eyes off him- his sun kissed mop of curly hair which hinted a bit too much time spent under the sun working, the loneliness behind beautiful green eyes, the strength in his arms and the easy warmth in his posture- everything called out to her like he was her witch's familiar. Like he was a missed turn or perhaps just the key to her hormonal teen lock. Whatever it was, Rhea just wanted to keep her hand in his.

A: Oh my god. Tumhare saar se toh khoon nikal raha hain! Aye, koi mere office mein first aid box lao! PLEASE come to my office and let me help you. I'll immediately send for a doctor as well. Please come.

Rhea just nodded like a little fool and went along with him. She had a feeling, she'd have gone to hell at that moment if he'd taken her. At his office, Mr Hot Dude sat her down on his chair.

A: You are bleeding. Look, I know a bit of first aid, can I please dress the wound? I promise it won't hurt.

Rhea once again nodded and he began to dress her wounds.

A: Jal toh nahi raha hain na?

Rhea shook her head

A: Good. Brave girl.

He smiled and Rhea felt like her entire being was about to explode from the assault of a million butterflies inside.

A: Waise Brave girl ki koi naam bhi hain kya?

R: Naam...

A: Woh kya hain na, I usually make it a habit to know a beautiful girl's name before I ask permission to see her bare back.

R: Back main...

A: Haan tumhare back mein woh maine chai gira di thi, toh jaal gaya tha na toh wohi...look agar tum uncomfortable hon toh I can call one of my female staff...

Rhea looks down and nervously bites her lower lips but gradually nods her permission, thanking god that her top was off-shoulder and would leave her wound mostly exposed. Mr Hot Dude undressing her back right now may give her a heart attack. He hugged her suddenly and Rhea stopped breathing for a bit and her heart started racing. She just hoped that he couldn't feel the tell-tale signs of her attraction. As his hand touched her wound, Rhea felt his breathe on the back of her neck and immediately closed her eyes shut to capture the moment in her inner eye. As he rubbed some soothing salve on her burn, she hissed slightly, in pain. He instantly started blowing on it and comforting her in a low octave soothing voice.

A: Don't worry, its not too bad. Wont even leave a mark. Bas thoda khayal rakhna.

Rhea nodded and he went back to dressing her ghav when suddenly his employee yelled from the outside.

E: Ali sir! Woh doctor saab bas das minute mein pohuch jayenge!

That snapped Rhea out of her reverie. Ali! Iska matlab Mr Hot Dude ek...oh shit! Agar dadi ko paata chala k Rhea ek Udharwale' ke saath...oh no! She jerked him off. Ali was shocked at her sudden agitation.

R: Mujhe abhi jaana hoga.

She immediately fixed her top and ran away from Ali towards her car. Ali who was confused called after her.

A: Arre! Brave girl! Suno toh! Apna dressing to complete karti jao!

He follows her but in vain. Her friends who had gathered at the gate all look at Ali with a worried expression.

Friend 1: Oh shit! Dude I feel so terrible for you! Bohut bura hua.

A: Kyun kya hua? Aap kya unko janti hain? Woh thik hain na?

F1: Woh toh thik hain par aap pata nahi kab tak rahenge. Woh ladki Dayawanti Mehta ki ek lauti poti thi- Rhea.

Ali felt a rush of anger and hostility immediately take him over. That'd explain the connection he felt with that girl. He did know her. And he hated her.

F2: Aur nakchari ladki ki gussa bhi aisa, k zaroor apne dadi se shikayat karegi. Be careful Mr Chef!

A: Aww! Don't worry girls! Dayawanti Mehta jaiso se ladna toh iss Ali ka purana shokh hain. Main bhi dekhti hoon yeh ladki kya kar leti hain.

At night- Mehta House

Rhea couldn't sleep. Infact she couldn't even apply make up for most of the day and hadn't posted anything for her followers. All she could think of was Ali and how rude he must think she is. Damnit!

R: Haan woh udharwala' tha par...she remembers the time spent with him...kitna sweet aur handsome tha...Oh god Rhea snap out of it! Waise bhi it was his fault in the first place! Par usi ne khyaal bhi toh rakha aur kitna hot tha...what? Where did that come from? Nahi mujhe ek baar jake iss behaviour k liye maafi mangna chahiye...Haan yahi thik rahega. Kaal closing time se pehle I'll talk. Waise bhi kaunsa shaadi kara rahi hoon usse. yeh toh dosti bhi nahi hain. bas to thank him for today.

Edited by tejaswiniwenham - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Ohhhyiiioo. That's so adorable of you for showing how they fall in love, n i m gonna love ur ff for sure.
Ali as Mr. Hot Dude where as our Riya as The Rhea Mehta i totally love their own popularity.
And yea Rhea noticed his loneliness, i like that part as i love to read other's eyes too.
I am waiting how Ali will realise Rhea is not so bad as he thinks.
I love youuu!!!

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