Shards Of The Past: Vignette Collection

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Hey everyone!

So I come back with this. I am really not sure of how well this would go with you guys. Plus, I literally lost touch with the speed and writing. I have tried something as of now. Will write further only to improve my skills :) Happy reading. I'll try to update it as soon as possible.




Kind regards,

Aarushi ❤️

Ps. For people who are new here, I am Aarushi and I was writing stories in this forum, a year back. Looking forward for all your thoughts :) Thank you so much!
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Vignette 1: Dewy Tears
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A/N: So here goes the first Vignette! I have planned to write three as of now. :)

Happy Reading!

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Vignette 1: Dewy Tears

It was an icy evening and the entire city was lightened with sparkling wall lights and fibre optics covering the walls of the houses. With the New Year coming closer, there was a zing in the city. With so much of celebration going around her, she slowly walked up the stairs, stumbling in each and every step of hers. Her bright, cruor coloured saree was almost torn in all the possible places, making her trip down further. But still, she managed turning to the right side, towards the cloak room. There was an obscure calm all around the mansion. She reminisced how it was filled with happy voices and music all around the house, a month back. As she headed towards the room, her pallu almost fell as it swept the floor, with blood. She slowly sat inside the bathtub with her saree ensuing her. She was able to feel the hard tap behind her as she let the water flow inside the tub. The crystal clear water started flowing unceasingly as it started becoming bright red, because of the blood. Her heart was racing against time, the pressure going higher and higher as she looked at her own face, her eyes bloodshot.

She looked at her damp hair as her fingers trailed over her fore line, her sindoor vanishing slowly, tripping down through her nose. Her eyes were puffed up as they were growing even fiercer, boiling tears flowing through her cheeks along with the cold water. Her dry lips now became wet as her entire body was now cold, with the force coming along from both the sides of the tap. She was now devoid of her saree, for it flowing in the pool and adding colour to it. She looked at her hands and saw the blood getting lapped away.

What had happened? She thought. It was their first anniversary and she thought it'd be the most memorable day of her life. But what had happened? Why did that had to happen? Who would've have done that? A train of unanswered questions ran in her mind and the pain of not having an answer to them choked her heart, just like the smoke from the engines.

The water level now went up to her hips and little did she realize that. At that moment, only two things were constant. One was her tears flowing through her face to her neckline and two, her heart thumping heavier than ever. She couldn't breathe. She wanted to run away, far away from everyone around the world. The scene came in front of her, over and again in flashes as she started panting, her face growing warm. She heaved to suck in some air, something at least and couldn't feel anything. She felt numb, devoid of any sort of a sense in her body. She could hear her blood flowing inside her veins. The water level rose to her breasts as her blouse got soaked. She could see the water turning into blood. She wanted to scream, scream harder. She wanted to be heard. Heard by someone. She wanted him. She wanted him back.

She felt the thin line of water getting into her body through the little openings left in her body. Even though she felt wretched, she still hoped. Maybe, he'd return back. As the water level came up to her face, she felt like drowning in his blood. She looked around with a lot of exertion before closing the blow of the water. The flow finally stopped as she felt herself swaying inside the tub. Her eyes roamed around to see his blood, only with a higher concentration of water. Minutes later, she heard footsteps of someone coming up as she quickly got up, fixing her saree as she felt herself heavy. As she carried herself along, she was trembling in cold when she saw her brother approaching her.

"What have you done to yourself? He asked silently, holding her hand tightly into his.

"Nothing, Bhaiya. What happened? Any good news? she asked him politely, as always. The only difference was the emotion and grief. There was nothing this time. Purely, zilch.

"Huh! Ishani, listen to me... he held his breathe as he felt her hands trailing away from his.

"No, what happened? Is he okay? Tell me! her voice quivered, her lips trembling as the tears trundled hastily from her already enflamed eyes.

He looked at her sopping clothes and her clammy hair, and her plum coloured face. She looked horrifying. He couldn't afford to tell it to her. Yet, he tried.

"Ranveer's home. He said, as her eyes brightened for a fraction. But it soon vanished with his subsequent expression.

"For one last time.

Her heart died. She wished she had breathed her last, too.


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A/N: Done! Constructive Criticism is more than welcome and sorry for typos :)

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Oh ! ...my girl , what to say about your writing style ?...its suffocating ...you are blessed with writing skills ...
Its awesome , ...mindblowing update , but I personally request you , please ...I don't want this... , I mean the ending ...I ..I can't able to go through it ! Please , if you can please do something with last part .

But as a writer you are succeeded in your attempt , as usual ... Also welcome back to the forum ! A warm welcome from my side , happy that you are again back to writing ...
Thanks for pm !
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Whoa! Girl, this is a freaking masterpiece you wrote! After an exile of months (or a year?) you finally return!

So, first of all, WELCOME BACK! It's so good to have you here once again. Now when you return again, do I realize how much you were missed. I'm not exaggerating but it's true.

Anyway, coming to this first Vignette, WOW! For a moment I was left stunned and shocked... Obviously. The way you started it and then moved further with slow, careful steps along with the quiet hint of the imminent tragedy was sheer perfection!

Ranveer's death...our fantasies! But needless to say whenever this happens it ends up breaking my heart. Now more than before. :( BTW, what led to this accident? Are you going to reveal that too?
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Originally posted by: Elvish_Hobbit

Whoa! Girl, this is a freaking masterpiece you wrote! After an exile of months (or a year?) you finally return!

So, first of all, WELCOME BACK! It's so good to have you here once again. Now when you return again, do I realize how much you were missed. I'm not exaggerating but it's true.

Anyway, coming to this first Vignette, WOW! For a moment I was left stunned and shocked... Obviously. The way you started it and then moved further with slow, careful steps along with the quiet hint of the imminent tragedy was sheer perfection!

Ranveer's death...our fantasies! But needless to say whenever this happens it ends up breaking my heart. Now more than before. :( BTW, what led to this accident? Are you going to reveal that too?


Hey elvish dii ,
Welcome back you too !,
Nowadays you are active in the forum , happy to see it !
Eagerly waiting for La Douler ...
Both the ff rockz ... Are back with a bang ! Now its party time for ishveerians 🤗

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Amrita, my exams ended today. I'm working on something right now. Should be up by tomorrow. And thank you. I'll read yours from today as well. :)
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Wow Bloomfield sissy u r back...really great to c u back...i thought u won't ever return after bidding adieu to us...but now u r back...& we need nothing more... Coming to the story, it's fascinating...s well s heart warming... Can't say anything more...i still need time to recover frm it... Be safe & stay healthy didu
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Originally posted by: Elvish_Hobbit

Amrita, my exams ended today. I'm working on something right now. Should be up by tomorrow. And thank you. I'll read yours from today as well. :)

Areey ..no ..no..no problem , you carry on with your work !
Its a pleasant surprise that you know my name ! Yey , even I am busy with by stuffs overloaded , let me try to update the next today , if not tomorrow ...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Amazing Arushi
I love your writing style it's mind blowing

Lots of Love
Zainab

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