IshVeer FF: La Douleur Exquise | Chapter 5 (Page 13)

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Author's Note: Hello, all! Ever since the show ended, we (mistofshadows and Elvish_Hobbit) decided to re-write the story of our show from the beginning, and this FF is product of that thought only. We're posting a teaser first and the Prologue will be posted soon afterwards.

The title 'La Douleur Exquise' is a French word which means the heart-wrenching pain of loving someone you cannot have.

Essential Warning: As the title suggests, this FF is going to be quite dark, so if someone is not very much into dark stuff and is uncomfortable with it, please be careful.

Apart from this, the first part i.e. The Teaser is written by mistofshadows aka Niki, so the entire credit goes to her for the update. Also, welcome back, Niki! It's been so long (more than a year) that we had something from you, and it's such a pleasure to read from you once again!

Teaser

Silence adorned the huge chambers, periodically broken by the unfurling snowy drapes as the cool breeze simpered its way through the open windows.

The quiet atmosphere was suddenly torn apart by a loud snap!

The huge double doors opened and in stepped a man dressed in a white dapper suit. The tightly stretched suit on his shoulders gave an inkling of his lean but muscular frame also giving an impression of a lethal predator which moved with a Panther-like grace.

A step at his own rhythm, he stalked to the middle of the room where stood the only object excluding him in the otherwise empty room. Without any speck of hesitation he pulled down the cloth covering the structure.

White met his glinting eyes. He smiled.

"You don't understand," she burst out pulling herself free from the hands trying to steer her out of the office. She took a step forward, staggering on her feet, eyes red and swollen, hairs in disarray.

"Madam, plea-"

"Enough is enough! Don't bother spitting those slimy laws and annexure. I don't care." She took a gulp of air, trying and failing to keep her tears at bay. She looked around at the people in front of her. The very people who had promised to stand by her father from the very start to the end.

Promises they had made, more fake never existed.

"Today, when he is unable to act to protect himself, to defend his rights, you all are trying to shift all the blame to my father and are trying to get out scot free. Liars, that's what you all are. COWARDS! CHEATS!"

A man in the very back sighed. "It is only with due respect to your father, that we are tolerating your silly tantrums. But I do believe the patience limit has been breached. Whatever you want to prove, go do it in the court. But till then...SECURITY! Take her away!"

Immediately hard hands clasped her upper arms and dragged her out to the exit of the office. She stumbled out and fell to the ground as she was pushed out none too gently.

The gravel met her mouth as she stayed there lying limply.

His fingers danced across the keys. The sounds increased in tempo rising higher and higher till his fingers were a literal blur.

The tone it wove was dark and heavy, a piece definitely not meant for entertainment.

It spoke of betrayal, of hatred and painted a tale of unmatched woe. Amidst all a lighter tone followed the darker one, speaking of a need, a longing so fierce that even heavens would burn in tandem.

He slammed his left hand on the chords and his right hand started alternately pressing two patterns. And all of a sudden he stopped.

Footsteps stopped behind him.

"It has begun."

His fingers ghosted over the keys.

"What about her?" he spoke softly.

Another man in dressed in black, in direct contrast to the former, placed himself right in front of him.

"She is on the way. Very soon she will be right where you wanted her to be."

The pianist slowly looked up at him and smirked.

"Good work, Puneet."

For some reason Puneet suddenly felt that this was all too calm, the calm right before a storm.

--Niki

Well, here comes the beginning!

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chapter Index:

Prologue
Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4
Chapter 5
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ah! I cannot even begin to tell the two of you how long I've waited for this. ⭐️⭐️ I must have driven Elvish partially mad pestering her. 🤪🤪.
Ahem, getting back to the point. 😆😆
First of all, the title of this FF. ❤️❤️ La Douleur Exquise. ❤️❤️ These three words are enough incentive for me to open this story and see what's in store to unfold chapter after chapter, diving into the darkest of realms and the most dangerous of emotions. ☺️☺️ Since it's no secret that I have a particular fetish (yes, it's a fetish) for dark stories, this definitely has enough potential to catch my eye and my interest.
Second, I'm familiar with both yours and well as Elvish's works, so I know that two of the most talented writers have undertaken this journey together to re-write this show as to what we actually would have loved to see in it rather than what course it ended up taking. This again - enough to get me attracted to the story. 👍🏼👍🏼 I have a particular attraction to all stories dealing with AUs, so this one again is no different. 😳😳
And now third - the teaser itself. 😃😃 Ah, I've never come across such a short piece of work that ha managed to capture my fullest of attention and leave me stupefied in such a short time. 😲😲 The teaser begins with a man in a white suit (I'm assuming that's definitely Ranveer), and goes into a quick second narrative about a woman (Ishaani, I'm assuming?) being ruthlessly thrown out from her father's empire amidst fake promises of bystanders pretending to be well-wishers in this world of money. 😈😈
There's a flit back into the present where the man in the white suit is playing his pain upon the piano in the darkest of tunes, and yet there's a little light even in the chords of constricting darkness. 😃😃 The tune comes to an end with the entry of the man in the black suit (I love the contrast you've written here), telling the former that the woman in question will be where he needs her soon enough. 😉😉
The way you've spreak across the mysteriously dark aura through (500 words, approximately?) is something you've kept me in awe of. 👍🏼👍🏼 There's a dark silkiness to the narration that just keeps me mesmerized, my thirst for it getting darker only intensifying as every word went by. 😳😳 And a big shout-out to the way you've described him playing the piano with the blend of emotions. That's one of the best things I've read so far. 👏👏
This teaser is everything that I've been expecting from this FF (Note: I have some terribly high expectations from this FF, so sorry for frightening the two of you 😕😕), so this just left me with a big, big, smile upon my face. 😎😎
Congratulations to the two of you once again on such a spectacular start! 🥳🥳 Niki, this was one hell of a teaser! (sorry for my language, I tend to get carried away when I'm excited). After this, I can't just wait to read the prelude to this! ❤️❤️
Keep rocking, girls! 🤗🤗
Love,
LM
Edited by LadyMeringue - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey hi there!!
I'm not familiar with you Niki, but I am with EH.
You writes beautifully. I would love to read more from both of you. 😃

As I love the dark stuff, I am quite excited to read it.😃. Title is quite different and appropriate for the FF.

Teaser was good. It arised so questions in my mind, but I will wait for the next update.
Good work, keep it up.

VC
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hey hi dear congratulations for this new work
So coming to your update well I am pretty sure that elvish is writing this so definitely it is going to be the best but was clearly mistaken because Niki the way you wrote this teaser has been breathtaking I mean seriously with such a flawlessness you changed views from man (I guess ranveer) to a woman thrown unceremoniously out by her father's loyalist (ishani) is absolutely amazing
And given this a dark and also something which we all wanted am to dancing right now that how lucky I am to read such marvellous things
Yup the best line was the way you described ranveer and puneet's contrasting get ups that was really good
Dark writing I always fantasise and I think this wish going to b fulfilled
All the very best dear for this
Update soon now
Title was pretty much interesting I must say
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Posted: 9 years ago
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OH. GOD.



The Teaser is so awesome, that I can only have high, high hopes on the future of this gorgeous piece of writing! I may not be familiar to you, Niki, but Elvish knows me. But I know you, I've read your 'Love Gone Bad' and it was some wonderful thing.



Coming to the teaser, believe me, I haven't read a more beautiful one in my entire life! So strong is the appeal of this teaser and... the title, of course, that I'm drooling on this. I love it, totally. And well, dark stuff. We all love it, don't we? I'm sure going to be with you two girls to see this FF till the end.



The thing starts with the man in the white suit (Ranveer?) and then proceeds to the woman (Ishaani?). Ishaani is betrayed by her supposedly well wishers and ruthlessly thrown out of the office. And here, the man-in-the-white-suit is playing the piano. And I swear, I've never read a more awesome description of the emotions running through a person who's playing the piano. Then Puneet in a black suit (I love the contrast) comes and informs Ranveer (now I guess it's confirmed) that the woman will be there where Ranveer wants her to be. The calm before the storm makes me hungry for the Prelude and chapters.



Actually Niki, I have stalked the forum for almost a year and then decided to join IF in Jan of this year. But that account screwed up and I re-joined IF in Feb again. So, I hadn't seen your posts for almost a year and thought that you've quit MATSH, maybe. So reading that it's from you and Elvish, I am so happy that you decided to come back. :D



And well, coming back again. The update was, as I blabbered in a dazed frenzy, marvellous. Waiting for the next parts.



Love,
Effulgent.
Edited by -FlameOfHope- - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Very beautiful and mysterious!! Kudos to you! Just such a short piece has captured all the attention and I am biting nails already!! Please do pm when you post next ones!

Thanks and love? [=D>]
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi Niki'
You can't imagine how happy I'm to get this,
Though dark stuff is difficult to bear...but I want such type
The title says itself what You are up to, but I just Hope that--the love would be of Ranveer for Ishani, not vise versa ...
The term teaser is actually new for me..,
Is it one of the parts of drama, like prologue, odd, pro side, scene, epistle, interludes and like??

I'll defifinitly b waiting for this now onward
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Hey nicki...!!!
I m new here...
So I don't know all old members...
I m zuvi... 😛

Looking at teaser...
This is really Intresting...

As per ur warning...
I m not liking dark stuff...
Bt this is really Intresting...

Pm me whenever u update...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello to all the forumwasis!

This in Niki a.k.a mistofshadows, the second author in this venture (I m sure you all already know the first one).

First of all, thank you Jigyasa for posting the Teaser. You are the best and I owe you a bunch for the inspiration and encouragement to begin this. And the most important thing...its a pleasure to work with you Elvish.

Hey LM, long time eh? Fetish for the dark, well... we have that in common. I am glad you liked the piano part. First of all I m no pianist and to write that took a lot of research. Its my first time writing something like that,,, so thanks again for you encouragement. I hope we can keep up with your expectations.

Hmmm apparently many like the contrasting get ups huh? Well to tell the truth it was no intricate planning, but a sudden whim in which I put them like that. I am glad it struck the chord with many.

Hey 1Ishveerian! Teaser is exactly what it is called. Its actually a device or a tool used to tease the senses of a person to attract them to a particular motto or work.

A huge thank you to all the old members. I am really grateful that you all gave us a chance.
To the new members, a special thanks. Let's hope our journey remains interesting.

Thank you all once again.

PS : The prologue will probably be updated tomorrow.


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