RaghVi OS: Strumming in Silence - Page 2

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: priya.a

Absolutely beautiful.... the imagery.... sums up their bond and their feelings which even though not voiced seems to be understood by the other.

Yes absolutely...Pallavi is the sun in Raghav's life

Glad that you liked it

Thank you so much❤

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Posted: 4 years ago
#12

What a write up 🤩

The way you described them , that essence of their relationship through so many symbolism


Their turmoils and their nature in such subtle way I loved it ❤️

U have woven this so beautifully I was craving more 🥰

Love it seriously 🤗

Keep writing girl ❤️

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Also these lines -

A world with just Raghav and me?' She thought with a shy smile, playing with the idea of being huddled up with him for a bit longer, but as she ventured more into the idea, a warm touch brought her back to reality


Goshhhh!!!! This is what raghvi is ❤️

A world with just them 🔥

Edited by drnidsur - 4 years ago
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Posted: 4 years ago
#13

This was so, so, SO well written! 👏


I'm a sucker for dialogue-baazi, especially between RaghVi, but this time I truly enjoyed the imagery and the wordless communication between them! I could visualize the entire story - not just their surroundings and the baarish or the umbrella, but their expressions, their hand movements, their glimpses and nods... so, so dreamy!


Pallavi truly is the light of his life and despite all his darkness, she manages to find her light in him as well. I love how you picked on that aspect of RaghVi and elaborated it. I LOVE how Pallavi lets Raghav brood when he needs to and literally glows (yes, I am indeed still swooning at how Raghav said she's glowing) when he gives her attention. Anyone else might take a minute or two to throw attitude back at their broody husband, but not Pallavi. She simply knows how to give light and love.


The way Raghav took the umbrella from her and stood up with it - that scene spoke volumes to me! It was such a Raghav thing to do. It's almost as if he sprung up... as if he got his rain and sunlight and then like a flower, he "bloomed". (No no, Raghav isn't a phool, bas... that scene just tugged at me. ❤️)


Can't wait to read what you write next!

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Posted: 4 years ago
#14

Originally posted by: chat_3

This was a slow read for me, as kept wanting to visualize the imagery that was so peaceful. The introspection that characters undergo in such a short write-up was wonderful.👏

I am glad you found the imagery peaceful...and were able to visualize it.

Thank you so much...❤

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Beautiful Reem. 👏

Its amazing

And the title is perfect👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago
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I enjoyed reading this a lot! Thanks for the PM!

At first, I thought of Raghav as a stranger to Pallavi but then as she moved closer to him without any apprehensions, I was sure she knows him and then when he smiles at her, I was sure these two are infact married because she also imagines a small world just with Raghav, and in the entire write up, his name was not mentioned before.

I’ve loved how you paced this from curiosity to realization of love by two people in the most natural circumstances! I was also curious as to why he was sitting there alone, as if no one cared about him but then I figured it must be him guilt tripping, assuming that no one wants to be with him but there’s one person who looks above and beyond his experience and fills in his void heart.


I love reading such pieces!


As for the title - how about “Strumming in silence” because I feel that without saying anything, they got over the storm of their lives (the rain was an indication of this), and the unspoken love was strummed in silence, eventually easing out into bouts of laughter, and then, something shifted between them, was it love?

Edited: I just saw this already has a title now, my bad 😎

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Posted: 4 years ago
#17

thanks for the pm

hope you are well


Fascinating OS! Beautifully written

Pallavi is indeed the light in his life

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Beautiful ❤. Loved it

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Posted: 4 years ago
#19

Reem this OS is so beautiful

I love the images u have used in this story

They are perfectly blending with Raghav

Such a divine OS

Write more

Much love

Jen

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Posted: 4 years ago
#20

Wow, Reem! you write so damn well...i can picture this happen between SaiShi, if i can say so... just like in the show, Pallavi will always be attracted to him no matter what, and i don't mean the physical one. He is like the trouble/chaos she wants in her life. She wants to be his calm as he is hers.

The whole mention of sunshine reminded me of two songs, both classics, Ain't no sunshine when is gone away by Bill Withers, and My girl by Temptations, specially this opening of My girl:

I've got sunshine on a cloudy day

When it's cold outside

I've got the month of May

I guess you'd say

What can make me feel this way

My girl, my girl, my girl

Talking 'bout my girl

My girl


I wish i could articulate is as good as you have, but totally love this kind of writing. I hope you also write some other stories, if yes please do share.


Thank you for sharing! 🤗

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