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Posted: 10 years ago
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"Will you care to explain what is wrong with you Nakul?" Yudhisthir's voice was quite grave. "how can you show such irresponsibility with your duties?"
Nakul gasped to see so many angry faces surrounding him. The tiny doll shop has turned into the royal assembly of Indraprastha. The poor doll maker was standing far away with folding hands and was sweating profusely in tension.
"Do you have any idea what would have happened today if brother Bheem wouldn't have saved Panchali in time? Not only Panchali even Sutanu was about to get wounded." Sahadev was no less angry. He was ignoring that Nakul is few moments elder to him.
"This horse could jump on Abhimanyu too if i have not caught its rein." added Arjun from horseback. Abhimanyu giggled remembering the incident still sitting on horseback.
"Aarya will you care to get down from the horse if you are done with caressing him who had nearly wounded Panchali didi and her daughter?" Subhadra said with an annoyed tone.
"correction Bhadra not wounded but the horse had nearly killed us. But our Aarya does what he only wants." taunted equally annoyed Panchali and turned to Abhimanyu.
" Abhi get down" she ordered and Abhimanyu obeys his badima. He listens to Panchali more than to anyone even Arjun. Arjun had to get down as well. And he stood holding Abhimanyu's shoulders with a mischievous smile to his wives that wiped away their annoyance. Arjun has this charm anyway.
"Nakul we are waiting." says Yudhisthir with more impatience and annoyance.
"Actually i wanted to get my princess a doll as beautiful as the one Abhimanyu got Sutanu. But even Aryavart's best doll maker doesn't have another doll of such kind. So i brought all the small pretty baby girls of capital who look like dolls here so that doll maker could make a doll seeing them.
Nakul's answer made everyone speechless momentarily.

"Aarya If you would have told me earlier i would have asked Sutanu and she could have happily shared her doll with her little sister." says Pancchali softly. All her worry, tension, anger caused by her beautiful husband's irresponsible behaviour was melted by his explanation.
"but Panchali that's exactly what i don't want. Sutanu may be your elder daughter but she is just a baby herself. I cant see her hurt. That too its a doll that our Abhimanyu gifted our Sutanu. Their sentiments must be valued."
Everyone was overwhelmed by Nakul's word and don't feel like to scold him. Yudhisthir signaled Sahadev to talk to the doll maker and compensate him for whatever mess the royal family caused to his shop.
Subhadra meantime found Arjun whispering something in Abhimanyu's ears indicating the baby girls in shop with as usual mischief in eyes.
She frowned with susceptive eyes but her Aaryaputra gave an innocent smile to her.
"spare Abhi Aarya , he is just 7." murmured Subhadra and she moved close to her husband and son.
"but for our daughter you cant trouble others daughter this way Aarya." Panchali sits beside her beautiful husband and strokes the curly traces of her younger daughter. Its quite a long hours she didn't see her angel. Her eyes become moist to see most beautiful baby girl of universe peacefully laying on father's lap. The princess inherited molten gold like complexion and sharp feature as her father, and large black eyes with long eyelashes, thick dark hair as mother with perfectly curved pink lips, a smile that was stolen from blossoming flowers, soft smooth skin as butter and with that a very joyous nature. Mothers touch stirred her and she gifted her heavenly smile with such gesture that even made not only elders but the kids smiling too.
"do you see these girls in any trouble Panchali? I have promised them if they come with me they can have all the dolls they want. Look at them."
With Nakul's words everyone found every girls present there are busy playing with toys quite happily.
"and how did you manage to convince their parents to send them with you?" asked amused Yudhisthir.
"simple i told them that i will cover them with golden ornaments if they send them with me." Nakul answered simply.
Yudhisthir didn't know what else to say. So he took the king's role.
"whatever the reason is but you ignored your duty prince Nakul. So now you have to spend whole day looking after the royal stable. Only after all the horses are cared well only then you can enter into palace." stated Yudhisthir and turned to other brothers.
"Arjun and Sahadev give the doll maker his due and bring the doll he is making for princess.and also give the girls what Nakul has promised to them and their parents and take them to their home."
Yudhisthir left for the chariot ignoring the changing colour of Nakul's face.
"but how will i be able to stay whole day without seeing my princess?" Nakul's voice chocked. He cant disobey Yudhisthir's words but the very thought was bringing tears in eyes.
"brother Nakul don't worry." Subhadra felt need to console his loveble brother in law.. "your princess will remain in my care till you are done with your duties.
She was about to bent down to pick princess but before that Nakul stood up like electrified and stepped back holding daughter tightly. Little princess winced in sudden jerk but didn't cry. But everyone was shocked with his behaviour.
"please bhabhi don't touch her." says Nakul that increased everyone's shocked status only. "don't take me wrong but you were taking care of Parvan and he is sick. I don't want my daughter catches any infection." continued Nakul.
"Aarya!" Panchali was about to say something but Nakul cut her down.
"No Panchali don't tell me anything. You don't know princess has sneezed twice. I cant take any risk."
The girl was stretching arm at her brother. Abhimanyu is everyone's favourite brother. Abhi stepped to play with her petal like fingers but Nakul pushed his hand.
"No Abhi you have dust in your hand, you cant touch her now." says Nakul.
"Nakul!!!" fumed Arjun. He was till now wondering what has happened to his beautiful and cheerful brother but now his patience has reached to its limit. If Sahadev wouldn't have held his shoulder he would have slapped Nakul surely for being such rude with his moonlike prince.
"i think bhrata Nakul is right." says Subhadra hurriedly to handle the situation. "come Abhi you have to go to Gurukul too." she pulled Abhimanyu to chariot with a tensed look to her husband. She knows Arjun doesn't let matter go if things come to Abhimanyu.
panchali knows that too. So she felt need to end the matter as soon as possible."Aarya give her to me. She is needed to be fed." says Panchali still looking at Arjun's eyes indicating him not to react.
"Okay but carefully Panchali." Nakul unwillingly let piece of his heart go.
"Aarya i am her mother. Hope you didn't forget that i gave birth to her." Panchali again has started feeling annoyed with Nakul's overpossesive behaviour. To see her annoyance Nakul didn't dare to say anything more and proceeded towards the horse as Panchali too left with her girl.
"bhrata Arjun what are you thinking? We are getting late, we have to fulfill jyeshth bhrata's order." calls Sahadev seeing thoughful Arjun.
Something was going on in Arjun's mind. But he proceeded to do his duties without a word.

Edited by RoseFairy - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#22
About P.S. You did the right thing.
It is such a nice update, brought all the baby girls so that an equally beautiful doll could be made.

😳

Please continue I am waiting for the next part
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: RoseFairy

"Will you care to explain what is wrong with you Nakul?" Yudhisthir's voice was quite grave. "how can you show such irresponsibility with your duties?"
Nakul gasped to see so many angry faces surrounding him. The tiny doll shop has turned into the royal assembly of Indraprastha. The poor doll maker was standing far away with folding hands and was sweating profusely in tension.
"Do you have any idea what would have happened today if brother Bheem wouldn't have saved Panchali in time? Not only Panchali even Sutanu was about to get wounded." Sahadev was no less angry. He was ignoring that Nakul is few moments elder to him.
"This horse could jump on Abhimanyu too if i have not caught its rein." added Arjun from horseback. Abhimanyu giggled remembering the incident still sitting on horseback.
"Aarya will you care to come down from the horse if you are done with caressing him who had nearly wounded Panchali didi and her daughter?" Subhadra said with an annoyed tone.
"correction Bhadra not wounded but the horse had nearly killed us. But our Aarya does what he only wants." taunted equally annoyed Panchali and turned to Abhimanyu.
" Abhi come down" she ordered and Abhimanyu obeys his badima. He listens to Panchali more than anyone even Arjun. Arjun had to come down as well. And he stood holding Abhimanyu's shoulders with a mischievous smile to his wives that wiped away their annoyance. Arjun has this charm anyway.
"Nakul we are waiting." says Yudhisthir with equal grave tone.
"Actually i wanted to get my princess a doll as beautiful as the one Abhimanyu got Sutanu. But even Aryavart's best doll maker doesn't have another doll of such kind. So i brought all the small pretty baby girls of capital who look like dolls here so that doll maker could make a doll seeing them.
Nakul's answer made everyone speechless momentarily.

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P.S the discussion was going elsewhere so i felt need of posting half update


@Bold sorry for again deviating, but this suddenly made me realize another blunder from BRC. In BRC Mahabharat, Nakul called Sahdev as Bhaiyya and Sahdev called Nakul by name.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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ok here is my thank you note
@jyotsna thanks for double comment you always smile on my face
@brishti ah lately my loyal reader lots of love to you and i wanted a bheedi scene here and to include ruchiparvan as well
@arti thanks dear and you know why m leaving
@godly-affection bapre what's you name but thanks dear
@maverick omg you commented? Thank you and yes fb author's that line made me delighted i love panchali with twins
@mou dear i said na i will continue on blog
@urmila or dear semanti (that's your name i assume) Ami khub bhalo chini ofcourse i know you that's called bong connection and you first time read my story my gratitude for such nice comment
@prateti thanks
@vrish its always my dream that you comment on my story. Thanks for fulfilling the dream and i got what you wanted to say ah that is just like a dream as well Nakul, Panchali and their beautiful daughter but Panchali does have other duties and she had gone to temple so what can she do also she cant be with Nakul because its her year with sahadev. But you can see her concerns still
@sreepita you always like to analyze my writing with question that what encourage authors
@sappy omg you commented? And i thought you are gone
@dafla omg u too again here thank you so much
here the hyperlink of those article that jhum shared
in this story i maintained Arjun has no daughter as the article says otherwise i cant show in my story what i wanted to show also i have no name for nakul's daughter as this article didn't mention her name and if you all want you can suggest
P.S i was leaving forum coz my old readers are no more and many don't comment anymore but just when i decided to leave i am getting such feedbacks? This is called destiny and need i say more why i relate to tragic hero?
Edited by RoseFairy - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Ok dear Arunita you know me correctly 😆 yes I'm Semanti and a Bengali 😊 your writing skill is dragging me so I'm thinking to read all your previous works now. I always love to read anything on my dear Pandavas & Krishna ❤️
About the next part, amazing job again 👏 the tiny doll shop turned into royal assembly of Indraprashtha 😆 and OMG our Samrat is so serious 😲 I can imagine the condition of poor doll maker
And how sweet Arjun is 😳 both wives are taunting him but he is pacifying them smartly 👍🏼 loved Abhi baby's special bond with Badima Panchali 😃 he is such a cute boy!
And oh what an answer given by Nakul, made me so emotional can't wait to know what the others will say after this! Update soon!

Edit: as for the princess's name, how does 'Namrata' or 'Nalini' sounds? Or a large name like 'Nalinipriyaa' remembering that she is a Dwapar yug princess 😆 this means 'one who loves lotuses' & you know, lotus represents beauty as well as her mother 😊 & there is a 'N' which represents her father as well, just my crazy suggestion 😳 could not resist naming this lovely baby!
Edited by Urmila11 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey aru extremely sorry for late comment sweety...but u noe these exams come all d time 😃
An outstanding initiative dear ...
Just luved them! The pNdavas are my fav n showing their happy days, a wonderful job aru... superlike!
Talking about the first part so that was no less than an action scene of a movie with sprinkles of comedy! Each character very well portrayed.. eager to read more. A small suggestion only if u like - not only nakul's daughter but the pandavas daughters will b a more beauting title n concept. Though they were of yudi n nakul only bt were no less than daughters to other pandavas...n this was the beauty of pandava family!!!
Regarding the name urmi didi suggested a beautiful one - Nalinipriyaa! I have a nic name fr her... Nishti (similar to mishti, u know what it is 😉 )
N yes i read about ur leaving the forum, dont ever think tjat sweety v r always here!
Keep the work on... 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Beautifully written! The OS was very cute!😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Awesome update Di
loved it
Nakul melted everyone's anger with his sweet n innocent reply!😳
the scene was beautifully written!👍🏼
Arjun.. kabhi nahi sudhrega.. !! Abhi too!!😆
Nakul is too posessive about his little daughter!😃
the description of the daughter was superb!👏 really beautiful!
"Nalinipriyaa" is a nice name!😊
do continu soon
thanks for pm
p.s. - my name is Neha😊

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Patrarekha


well if you say written source then all source generally says Arjun has no daughter in Indian versons only indonesian versons says he has daughters but there Draupadi is only Yudhisthir's wife

but yes folktale can be in india and in this forum Arjun and Draupadi's daughter is very famous. her name is Pragiti

btw how many knows Arjun and Subhadra had another son Ruchiparvan or Rochanagarbha as Subhadra's another name was Rochana


Jhum di I found out just today Pragati or Pregwati according to the Javanese version is not a person 😆 its the name of a dance drama (just like our arjun chitrangada has a drama based on archi story in tagores words) pregwati is a story its the name of a legend involving arjuna and shikhandini along with two daughters. There is no daughter of arjun in any version.. I will provide link of the story. That is pregwati! Nothing to do with Draupadi or Ardi
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Yes I commented 😊 why did it surprise you? I have been busy plus my laptop woes don't seem to end ... 😭 so, many a times there's no reply.. some day I'll reply on your blog post also 😉
The update is again, v.good ! and hope to read more ; what name have you thought for the baby?

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