OS: Forgotten in Epic- I, Wife of The Mortal-Immortal COMPLETED

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582445

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: Yajnaseni
Truly loved the OS. You portrayed Karna as he should look like to his family. Making Karna Dr.Ambedkar are we? A very nice idea. Also want to read Bhanumati and Draupadi's point of view. Update soon and thanks for the PM. You picked up a beautiful Tagore song! Are you Bengali?

YES I am a Bengali .. Proud BENGALI😳

and thanks for your comment dear🤗

Edited by SayaneeH.Lecter - 11 years ago

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582445

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: MS-meghasharma
wow this is simply awsum.
i always felt cv's shouldn't have either introduced vrushaali or when they did they should have shown some bonding and scenes b/w karna and her but ala

Don't talk about the show .. it spoiled a true Friendship .. I don't expect anything from them .. Thanks for the comment😳

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panchaali

@panchaali

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+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Sayanee my Sautan that's awesomeee

OMG Hugs first comments later...🤗

I love the Rabindrasangeet you have chosen.."Ami tomar preme hobo sobar kolonkobhagi"...

now I can't refrian from shaing one thing...

that we are truly sautans from soul

people say soul sisters we arw soul sautans

I too was planning an OS on Karna's wife Vrushali

I think that I have expressed once in Cotswolds thread, but never I have said it anyone what would be inside it and you know what

I remain unsaid unnamed in the epic still I am the one with whom the most magnificent man of the era shared his life. Historians couldn't find any verification of my identity; Vyasa didn't think of mentioning me in his epic. Give me any name Vrushali, Supriya, Padmavati, Ponnurvi I can be anyone. Charioteer's daughter or a princess this is irrelevant for wife of a man who lived striving with his societal identity forever. Let my identity remain in oblivion that will be poetic justice to me.

"Why did you marry me girl" he said. "They say I am cursed."

His eyes were fixed on darkness of sky. His voice seemed more distant than Sky-beetles.

"Then I will share curses rather seeking blessings." I whispered.

He looked at me. His deep eyes had little glint in them. "Being my companion you won't get any social respect."

When I saw these paras I was stunned!!!!! OMG telepathy not a myth its real- Doctor Panchaali discoverd it!! Yeh!!!!

coz the same thoughts were in my minds which I never shared to anyone, not even to you...

what kind of telepathy is this!!!

The title for my OS which I thought was:- "I -The Wife Of Karna"

Due to some reasons I thought of not writing that OS

and I find your title is way more better 👍🏼

and yes you are a better writer than me, I am glad that it came from your hands😃 (dil se)

I think the readers are glad it came from one of the best writer's hand 😃 ⭐️

now coming to quote my best part..

Though our thoughts were telepathy can't refrain from saying this is one of my fav part of this OS

"Why did you marry me girl" he said. "They say I am cursed."

His eyes were fixed on darkness of sky. His voice seemed more distant than Sky-beetles.

"Then I will share curses rather seeking blessings." I whispered.

He looked at me. His deep eyes had little glint in them. "Being my companion you won't get any social respect."

and the other fav parts

Does he think I am scared or ages earned hatred scares him to his core? I broke the wall of a coy bride looking at him, looking into his eyes, holding his beautiful face I whispered, "The society loathes you, its contempt is an honor to me."

"Only aghast hell in my life .."

Before he could end I replied, "I will refuse hundreds of heavens to be in the hell you live in every birth of mine Angaraj, with you I will turn the hell in home."

Slowly a tears form in his eyes, slowly a smile illuminated his face, slowly the distance between us is eliminated and our lips touched each other's.

From the 2nd part

"Now stretch your hands in sun," kids did the same and sunlight kissed their little palms. "See God is touching you, showering his blessing. He enlighten the whole world, touches everyone you, me, every living being here. God reaches and blesses all and who can't, he is not God." Two little boys stairs at the blazing sun following their fathers eyes and my eyes only admired the man as bright as Sun ray, the human with undying spirit, untainted in numerous curse. I silently closed my eyes to thank the almighty, he bestows everyone with someone to love but he let me take pride in my love.

well these are my fav parts but I love every word every expression of the story...

You did a great job my sautan saheli..proud of you BFF and Happy Friendship Day 🤗

Edited by panchaali - 11 years ago

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Khyati

@cherryberry293

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

You know u r awesome... Nd this story is awesome, simply awesome.
The start reminded me few scenes of Mritynjaya (i don't how much fictional content this novel has but I m attached to it emotionally).
I read this story taking Vrishali as his wife. So true, no one felt necssary to mention about her in real epic ... Maybe because she wasn't any queen or princess. But she was one of those people who gave him happiness in his life.

That short poem is beautiful. I re-read it. It's a story of selfless love and devotion. A common girl who stands uncommon among the crowd of royalty... She's special for those who love Karna.
I am attracted to two Ladies in our History one is Sai Bai (wife of Shiva) and the other one is Vrishali. There's less written about these 2 and that makes me more curious about them.

That scene with their kids is so beautifully written that I actually pictured it in my mind. I knew in Mahabharat makers never focused much on Karna's personal life... But if they have introduced his wife, then they should have shown little about their bonding.
I wish some day, some one will make a show on Mrityunjaya (one was there in Marathi but it was very badly done) .. nd Aham plays Mrityunjaya in it.

I am going read this OS one more time before going to sleep 😊

Please update the next part soon and send PM to this New reader ...

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luv_sakshi

@luv_sakshi

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

@Sayanee:

Very well written OS!👏...Liked the flow of ideas and the entirety of looking at Karna in a different perspective here!😊..The writing was Flowy and Caught my attention!👍🏼

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582445

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: luv_sakshi
@Sayanee:
Very well written OS!👏...Liked the flow of ideas and the entirety of looking at Karna in a different perspective here!😊..The writing was Flowy and Caught my attention!👍🏼

thanks a lot for your comment .. these Two updates took ages to write .. your comments make me really happy😊

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Brahmaputra

@Brahmaputra

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Exceptionally good one...!!!!👏

You've a fantastic way to communicate with the minds of your readers!!!!😃

Lucid, accurate and remarkable...⭐️

I loved every word of it.❤️

Write more!!!!!😛

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Raghuji

@Raghuji

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

I am dumbfounded... Let me gather my senses before I write any review... Let me tell you something your style of writing is unique - just brings those scenes right within me (not just in front of my eyes), touches my heart , brilliant stuff.

Thank you, keep going...

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KHUSHI-99

@KHUSHI-99

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#19

👏 Sayanee its wonderful,I wish you had posted this earlier .

I loved the concept...I loved that part -when karna asks his kids to open their arms and Suryadev 's rays touched them.keep writing.

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.Vaikartana.

@.Vaikartana.

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#20

Sayanee I AM SPEECHLESS.I had goosebumps while reading this I cried for them I smiled for them and I felt proud of their love Loved it loved it and loved it

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