RiShbala SS: RevenGe That WiLL NeVeR END!! (Update on Pg 5) - Page 3

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Posted: 10 years ago
#21
Interesting .
Is it rk n madhu?
nice prologue .
cont soon dear👏👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
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you mentioned that it was a DVD ss so is it about rishbala or. ...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Disclaimer: Not intended to Offend or Hurt Feelings

It seems this may be your first attempt at writing a fan fiction, so kudos on getting started. However, I am quite disturbed by the subject matter. Now I know you and everyone else will advise that I not read and buzz off. Perhaps that is exactly what I should do. But I can't ignore the fact that you have entered a dangerous territory, romanticizing rape. What is so fascinating about a man in his clear mind brutalizing a woman he is supposed to love? I understand that it is all I the name or revenge but to paint him all in black, to make him so beastly and then the girl still loving him for what they once had, just makes me gag. I love grey shades characters and I applaud those who can pull it off. But this beast raping his wife without remorse in the name of revenge is just plain unacceptable especially if you plan to "redeem" him. He is irredeemable. Yes I know this is fiction, so I shoup stop being such a feminist. But young, impressionable girls visit this forum and I would hate for them to think it is acceptable to put up with any sort of violence in the name of love.
So again, it's wonderful that you are exploring your creative side but please be mindful of your audience.

Thanks.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So visited the forum after ages and stumbled upon this, and was like.. what theee !
Awesome teaser bit ! looking forward to read the rest, please do PM me..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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awesome story 😊well written congrats on first story 👏 i hope his revenge turns into love nd he stop doing bad to her but this is not acceptable the way he is torturing his own wife in the name of revenge If u dont mind can u change the title from DVDian ss to RishBala SS as fans may not like DVD used in the title than RishBala it's upto u dear anyways do accept my buddy request and send me the pm of next updates annie i m looking forward to it 👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
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congo on your first story..
would love to read it...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Congo on your first story. Pm me please
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Congrats on your story!😳 please include me in your pm list.. looking forward to read further updates
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Nice start.
Congrats on ur first story.
Continue soon n pm me.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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First of all thanks to all of you for liking my story ...



thanks alot friends for liking my update/...


...MY REPLIES...

-ChitraRocking- : thank u so much chitra... would definitely consider your request & would change the
title of my story from DVDian SS to RiShbala SS.. 😊


..Steph.. : well thanks a ton my dear... 😃


Tainar : dear i just want to say that there are many this kind of stories on IF like you are telling..
about husband being caring ... & coochie coo & so on. But i just want to say that i have my different
perspective like every one else out there in the world...so just please have patience & let me write more on it.. i just wanted to write something different from everyone else.. please let me .. come'on you just cant judge my perspective on the basis of just one prologue... i would be pleased if you'll read the further updates...



REVENGE THAT WILL NEVER END


Chapter 1:


Rish !! Rish!! get up!! see naa my :Lessu" Aka

The Beast - BROCK LESNER again won WWE World Heavyweight

championship ...


he broke your "Cheenu's" aka "The Man Who Never Gives Up" Or

"The So Called CHAMP" - John Cena



Nose !!... i told u naa , that my lessu is gonna win this match again


but you just kept teasing me.. saying all that rubbish that my lessu is

budha (old man)


and he cant even fight now & he can't beat your 37 year old

Cheenu...

now u only see yourself... Madhu as usually was non stop speaking

without even

seeing that her Bestie is crying...

Madhu suddenly got worried getting no response from RK . usually

he starts pulling her hair or he would just carry her and then would

throw her in the bucket full of water.


BUT he is not doing that any sort of thing. It amazed her for a

moment that he did'nt even


defended the LOVE OF HIS LIFE (JOhn Cena) but here this f*cker aka

Rish continues to sleep ..

on removing his blanket ..what she saw she just couldnt beleive .


DAMMIT ..her F*cker is crying.

rish.. rish , what happened ?? who the hell on earth dared to brought

tears in your eyes??


tell me that ba*t*rds name NOW!! she asked with fire in her eyes.

(she just couldnt take it when someone tries to make her rish cry.

After all there is only Rish whom she knows is her wold .as she

hates her parents & on the other side even Rishab

hates his parents as they were always cruel to the little souls. they

were DAMN RICH but


still what they can see is only MONEY & POWER .. they are

emotionless parents .)

Rishab's eyes were now red due to the excessive of crying. He was Crying because he doesnt


wants to go away from his sexy aka madhu. no matter how much they fight every single moment but it


was also true that he LOVES HER THE WAY NO ONE HAS EVER LOVED ANYONE IN ANY WORLD!!!


He was just 7 years old when went to his DAD's bestfriend's Birthday bash & there


he met his Sexy . she was 4 years old but she used to cry alot . And it just irritated him


all the more. And when he got the shock of his entire life when his & her's parents


announced that they are going to get their Son & Daughter (RISHAB KUNDRA AND MADHUBALA MALIK)


married tonight itself . he was shocked to core . his poor little sexy was actually too little


to understand what does the marriage mean. but he knew , even at the age of 7 he used


to watch po*n videos & movies. His parents was so busy in their high profile status &


parties that they were least interested in giving time to their only child. & They got marriedin that party itslf. from that time


madhu is living with Rishab and his parents as the DIL
of MOHAN KUNDRA AND RADHA KUNDRA & also as the

WIFE OF RISHAB KUNDRA AKA THE MADHUBALA
RISHAB KUNDRA.


He used to get irritated at first with her continuously following her wherever he goes.


but then soon he got habbitual of it. she was 13 when she got her periods for the first time.


after that he guided her all about the sexuality , motherhood and etc etc..


he was just fulfilling the need of a mother for madhu. he made love to her when she was 16.


he slowly but fell in love with her MADLY.)

Because from now onwards i,m going to be away from you madhu for BLOody 10 years or even ...


maybe more than that!. he roughly pushed the blanket aside and got up and suddenly shouted at madhu at the top of his lungs, tears of pain , sorrow & anger ferociously flowing out



his eyes!..he only called her madhu when it was something HELL serious..

Madhu just stood there with the blank face... the shock was like a heart attack to her.


her heart ached when he said that he is going away...


Back to present..

!!BANG!!

the door of the dark room opened with the thud. it was already raining heavily outside & the


sound of the door made the poor soul all the more frightened. she was shivering with cold.

"Chief has called u in his service.."The manager of THE - RK said to her smirking like a devil with 6 other guards besides him..


she clearly knew that what does the word "SERVICE" exactly meant...


yet she stood up with the hope again that maybe by punishing her .. Her Rishab would forgive her...


And there she went with them again to please him and calm his nerves by serving him her body tonight..

with a ray of hope
that...

he would FORGIVE HER ONE DAy...





P.S: Please Ignore My Grammar Mistakes.. 😳

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