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Posted: 10 years ago
#31
Thanks for sharing n pm dear😊😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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very good start . 👏

I liked it👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
#33
Love your works..will be waiting for the superhero to save his damsel😉
Edited by SreeRK - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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awesome update dear...nice story..do continue..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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awesome start ... actually bit diff...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hiii friends.. I am having a major problem... I dont seem to get anything on this story.. Its so frustrating.. This has never happened with me.. but now m feeling all this story was a big mistake.. i shouldnt have posted it without having it written fully.. Its been a week since I posted it and I was so confident but everyday I sit and try to get something more but then I am stuck.. I have somethings written but they are all in bits.. plus its not that much of a superhero.. I am so irritated with myself.. I have never left off any story and I am feeling like I should just finish it...🤓
I know this msg is so disappointing for all those who had liked the last part.. I AM SO SORRY..
anyways... here is the 2nd part that I had written in the start only... Just posting it hoping that it would make me write more.. but i dont know if I would be able to write on this...
and yes if you dont feel comfortable either with this whole idea.. do tell me... i wont feel bad at all..

This is really embarrasing for me..

Edited by k.atrina75 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I dont know if I should send pms for this... 🤢


Part 2

"Its an emergency!!" Madhu knocked at the door hardly.

RK ran in his superjet speed and opened the door in an instant. Worried out of his wits he stood there. "What happened??"

"My box.. Please help me get that down..." Madhu said hurriedly as she walked to her door and Rishabh followed her worriedly now in his normal speed. Of course he couldn't freak her out.

"What happened?" He asked while getting in.

"That box up there.. The shifting men kept it there and I can't get it down alone now.." she pointed at a brown box that was kept on the high cemented rack. Below it was kept a table and a chair kept over that table.

"You want me to get that down?" RK asked still confused if that was what she is so worried about.

"Yes... Its really important!" Madhu said with wide eyes assuring him.

"Okay..." RK said as he started to get on the table. Well he could have easily got it down just with his hands but then could he use his powers in front if this girl. Though he was very much tempted to do so but he quieted his mind and decided to do that like 'normal humans'.

"Wait!!" Madhu screamed. "Are you planning to break my chair?" She asked accusing him.

RK looked at her baffled.

"My chair obviously won't be able to take your weight to stand.." she said. RK looked at her confused. "How am I supposed to do it then?" He asked confused.

"Just elongate your arm and get it down!" Madhu said in a jolly expression.

RK looked at her stunned. 'Did she know? How?! Or did she see me doing something yesterday?' RK was still fighting this sudden onslaught on him when she continued.

"Don't look at me like I am a ghost?! Of course you can't do that and neither can I.. that's why I have kept this chair.. but the problem is, I couldn't stand on it like that, as it was moving and shaking a lot so I needed someone to hold the chair in position while I stand up.." she said with a helpless face while RK breathed a sigh of relief.

"Yes of course.. What else could it be.." he said to himself laughing slightly in relief.

Madhu stood up on the table and RK held the chair as she climbed up the chair. In the process she kept her hand on his shoulder for support and RK seemed to get lost in his la la land.

He was staring at her beautifully curved physique as he imagined her tipping from the chair and he catching her midway. Wow.. Beautiful thought. She, in his arms and smiling shyly. What a perfect image!

He was still staring at her now standing up as she reached for the box with her arms stretched upright and RK could see her navel from below her shirt. He suddenly came out of his thoughts as he averted his gaze. He was of course a gentleman and ogling some girl without her permission was nor his manners neither his style. Well.. Then what girl would give permission to ogle her.. Anyways get back to Madhu on the chair or else she would fall. RK looked at her again and she now stood with the box in her hand with her shirt back to her waist covering up everything. RK hopes she gets misbalanced and he could catch her like what happens in all serial dramas. "What are you thinking Rishabh? Help me get down!" She said confused.

"Oh yes.. Sorry I am still sleepy.." he said trying to cover up. He held her arm with one hand and by other stabilized the chair and she came down.

She sighed in relief as she sat on the floor totally focused on the box now as she opened it. Out came a machine. RK looked at her confused.

"What is that?" He asked surprised. He thought it was an emergency.!

"Its my special crme-enhancing-double-shot-espresso-brewer..." she said dreamily looking at the machine.

"Wasn't it supposed to be an emergency?" RK asked almost angrily.

"Yes it was.. It was an emergency.. I am a coffee addict and after yesterday's hectic shifting schedule I was dying for a coffee when I found that those damned men kept it up there.." she told him animatedly.

"But you could have told me that.. I didn't even get freshened after waking up.." he gestured to himself standing in track pants and an unkemptly worn shirt that he had got into while he ran to the door hearing her. His hair messed up and his eyes still sleepy.

Madhu looked at him intently for the first time in this morning. And she had to admit that her heart skipped a few beats seeing him. "You look cute..." she said. "And no doubt sexy.." she said as she ogled him dreamily. Well... was it him alone who needs to be a gentleman.. he thought to himself.

RK looked around embarrassed as his lips twisted into a smile as he looked to other side. Madhu's jaw dropped open seeing him smile nervously like that. It made him look all the more sexy. Her heart would stop beating anytime. He needs to stop looking that hot and handsome.

"COFFEE TIME!" She shouted at herself as she tried to divert her attention to coffee and not him.

RK broke into a smile seeing her childlike excitement at coffee and he started to move towards the door.

"Where are you going Rishabh?" She asked from behind this was when RK noticed that she had been calling her Rishabh now and he felt so good hearing his name from her. In fact his name had never sounded better.

"Am I not supposed to go home now?" He asked with a raised eyebrow.

"Come on! I am not that cruel that I would let you go just like that after disturbing your BEAUTY SLEEP.. At least you need to have a coffee.. Trust me I make great coffee" she boasted with a smile.

"Well I think you are right.. I need to get this coffee when I ran half the corridor without my sleepers to get this down.." he said jokingly.

"Ohh you didn't put your sleepers on.. bad" Madhu said shaking her head at him as she picked up the coffee maker and proceeded to the kitchen. RK chuckled hearing her.

He went to the kitchen too as he didn't know what else to do. Everything in her apartment was packed and there was not much place to sit except for her bed. But he felt it indecent to sit on her bed.

"You know I thought you have some pet in that box that you were so worried about.." he said.

"Pet? I hate them" she said making a disgusted face.

"Why?" RK asked amused.

"They spread so much dirt.. And then you have to keep them clean. Take care of their food.. teach them how to behave with your guests...argh don't get me started on it.." she said frustrated.

Rishabh laughed hearing her. "You are of course not the typical girl.." Madhu forwarded him the coffee mug while she started smelling in the aroma from her own.

"Now I know why drinking coffee was such an emergency for you.." he said as he took the sip.

"Its good na?" Madhu asked with wide eyes. She loved to make people drink her coffee and then have reviews about it.

"are you joking.. its better than the coffee shop.. Must say this thing does a great job.." he said gesturing at the coffee machine.

"It doesn't work by itself.. it just processes.. its me who decides the proportions.." Madhu said getting offended.

Rishabh chuckled hearing her. "Okay my lady.. This is great coffee made by YOU.." he said in a sweet tone and Madhu felt so special hearing that. Also he had unknowingly addressed her as his lady and that made her blush.

"By the way.. what do you do?" Madhu asked trying to divert her mind.

"I work in an animation company.." he said casually.

"Okay.. what's that about?" She asked confused.

"Well... we get projects from different companies and we design various animated medias for them.." he said taking another sip.

"You mean the games and cartoons?"

"Well thats not just it.. Sometimes its like advertisements... maybe some characters for show.. a movie. Even academic animations.. like for medicine and other stuff.." he explained to her.

"That sounds fun" she said excitedly.

"Yes it sounds fun but sometimes it gets hectic.. Because sometimes you need to get into the subject to create the details.." he said in a complaining tone.

"Ohh" she said nodding thoughtfully.. "but then even then its interesting.. you are not tied up in your knowledge and work.. Getting to study different things.." she said trying to bring out the brighter side. Ohh she had always been an optimist.

"Yeah u are rite. ". RK nodded his head smiling.

"So.. And what do you do? Seems like even you plan to stay alone..?" He asked.

"I am an architect.. And have specialized in interior designing.." she said smiling sweetly.

"Great.." RK nodded at her in appreciation.

"After this I will have to unpack all of this.." Madhu sighed as she looked outside the kitchen door. "All this shifting thing seems unending.." she complained.

RK looked at her and smiled sympathetically. "You can surely tell me if you need some help.." he said.

"Of course I would.. Didn't you see.." she said winking.

RK chuckled hearing her. Yes she had actually asked for help shamelessly as if she had some authority on him. Normally RK wasn't the kind to accept anybody's commands but he couldn't understand why but Madhu's sense of authority made him feel good.

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Edited by k.atrina75 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Ni33

This was one great and one surprising update.👏😆
When I got the PM, I was over ecstatic cause you have begun a new story.😳😆 And to be honest the title caught me off guard and it was also the first shock for me.😆 Soon enough you will know why.😆
The second shock which was the biggest one in the entire first part for me, was reading the first paragraph. Yes reading that pararaph was something. You will soon enough know what that something was.😆
I kept going no, no, no, no, no, no, no, no, no, no. Please, please, please do not make RK the Superman. Please.😆 Of course after composing myself after remembering Lubu's OS Only For You. I had a little laughing fit to be honest, remembering that. 😆 Yes Lubu if you are reading this, I will never forget that OS and my comments. 😆 Then, after taking a deep, deep breath I read the second paragraph. And it was a relief to know that it was a movie RK watched.
Now the reason for my reaction is, well Lubu already knows this.😆 I am putting it simple. I am like RK in this update. The difference is, I am a bit worse than him. There is almost no pleasing me in the supernatural or superhero department. And actually I can't believe I am writing this or that I know this. I promise you all the unnecessary facts or anything else are still stuck in my brain. 😆 Like this one. Superman comes from the planet Krypton that is located in a different solarsystem. He is a man of steel, even bullets bounces off of him. Only thing that could actually hurt him is kryptonite. The only reason I know any of the superhero facts is quite simpe, they stood in the way for my cartoons that I used to watch when I was little. 😆 Well they always put one of those superhero cartoons in between my favorites. I always had to wait for Batman or Justice League to finish so I could watch Looney Tunes.😆 And even when I was older, I had to wait for Lois & Clark or Smallville to finish so I could watch Married with Children. It was always those superhero shows that were in my way.😆 And unfortunately it's the same deal with those movies.🤢 Except for Green Lantern, Superman and The Avengers, those I watched on my own. I promise you there wasn't a fast enough fastforward button for them.🤣 I did enjoy Christopher Nolan's Batman triology. But mostly the last one The Dark Knight Rises. Okay of the topic. My point is, me and superheroes are a big no.😆 I can't emphazise enough on that.😆 So when I read the second paragraph I felt a huge, huge relief.😆 Thank you. I honestly couldn't know how I would be able to read this if it was a superhero. Wait. Please tell me this isn't like the movie with Uma Thurman and Luke Wilson, My Super ex-Girlfriend. Please. I will read anything you write, but I honestly I won't be able to give any comments. Not just because it is timeconsuming and I have a lot of studies, which is like 95 % of my reason. These comments ends on practically every story from now on, because of that. Okay but the other 5 % are because I wouldn't know what to comment on this things. I can't imagine RK flying around savings babies from a burning building. I just can't. 😆 I couldn't do that with Clark Kent aka Superman. And I probably can't do that with RK. But it's your call. I will read whatever you write.😳 I just need to read something of yours.😳
Okay, after the major shock laid down and I read the rest.😆 Well it was quite funny. RK lying to Madhu that he likes those superhero movies. Madhu inquires wheather or not is he single. Well in an indirect way. 😆 She said that his place wouldn't be messy if he had a girlfriend or wife. And if that wasn't true he could have corrected her. So she is as interested in him as he is in her. The difference is, since we had RK's POV, we know he is very interested in her. 😆
But then at the end another shock came. How can I put this?
Okay, don't take me wrong but RK behaved like a girl.😆 He swayed around cleaning his place because Madhu told him it was a mess. We can put it in a different way, it was love at first sight.😆 Sorry, but all of this, I mean the last two paragraphs, were pretty girly for me. 😆 Now I know some can predict the next thing I would write. Even I would never do that. But what to expect from a girl that do not blush nor cry.😆 Okay, never mind me or my comments. They aren't that important.😆 What is important is what the majority thinks. And even more than that, what you think. That is the key for unlocking the secret door.😆
All in all it was a great update. Even though I didn't expect any of this. Though I would continue to read it, don't ever question that.
Now thanks for this surprisingly new story and for the PM.😆
By the way, I won't be able to write these long comments anymore due to me being buzy. Like stated above. But I will read and comment. Don't worry about that.😆
And I hope you aced your exams Maryam.😉



hey thanks for the honest review... even I am not much of a superhero person.. I dont know whyI got this crazy stupid idea and now m stuck.. 😆
you must have known my knowledge about superheroes by seeing the planet of Superman even written wrong... 🤣 I mean who on earth can not know that... so here I am! Maryam.. and even then I decided to touch this... Stupid Me 😆
waise my story wasnt going to be that saviour superhero with a journalist GF running behind..
but whatever it was.. I dont know how to continue...🥱
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1st to comment in your story after villainous love!! feeling great!!
i won't consider ur reply to Ni as 1st comment & according to me this is the 1st comment after ur update!! okay?

haha...hilarious update!! i loved it!!
i like this crazy shameless madhu LOL!!
uffo.. for a coffee maker she made such a scene but i guessed that something funny she is asking for & nothing serious!!
hmm...hero is a superhero!! why can't he show some special powers & attract the beauty?? LOL
i thought he will deliberately shook the chair & make her fall in his arms but no he behave like a gentleman apart from ogling her LOL!!
hmm...why i feel madhu also as some super natural powers & she is also one like Rk & not a normal human?? even she asked him to stretch his hands to talk the box so is it just for fun or she seriously blurted out??
hmm...y she is behind him like seriously knocking his door every know & then?? did she know abt him?? is she making him fall in her trap?? is she in evil gang?? then later she will realize what she is doing will end up affecting the world & only Rk is right & support him & both super powers will together defeat the evil may be sullu LOL?? or she is just a normal girl & get her life time surprise that she have fallen in love with a super hero??

umm... dear, its a nice story & nice concept & sure u'll make it interesting & better!! we don't expect hollywood range so don't worry!! we are here to support u & we enjoy reading ur stories so please take ur time & give us update but never stop it in middle...infact u r doing Good!!

Edited by madhurish - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#40
wonderful update
please dont stop this story

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