I like the way you started chapter 2. Madhu's conversation with the kids about their dad was nicely and sweetly done. It was a good and kind way to tell them about their dad.
Yes I got the hint that the "only other person" that made RK feel special before was Madhu.
The kids' confrontation was a good start for the father & kids relationship. It perfectly showed how things might end up being for the near future. And RK really can be a kid.
The above scene made their relationship (father & children) stronger, gives RK a chance to step up as a dad, and shows that Madhu is the odd one out right now. Also, as right as Madhu is, there are times when you have to do what you have to do. I cannot blame Ayush for wanting to clear his name'
I did like how RK told the other kid's dad not to talk rudely to Madhu. A small thing but it shows it is not just the kids that RK cares for.
I also liked what you did during the confrontation between the children. Instead of having RK act all high and mighty, you gave him a clear picture of the life his children have had to live.
By RK having this thought, RK the character is moving from a one dimensional jerk to a guy with many new emotions and thoughts. His character is getting built up again but with some hope that he can reform.
"Your place is by my side" seriously RK is thinking like this! And he thinks Madhu will let him? OK that was my first reaction cause I do not want Madhu to move too quickly.
But ...
But then I started thinking (I was thinking about your story before bedtime, during breakfast, on the way home, in mosque (I know shame on me!), etc)
Ok where was I? Ok, I started thinking this is a story. If Madhu does not make the move quickly then we are left with RK coming back every day. Why delay the story? And with that realization, I am good with Madhu saying yes.
I loved RK's dialogue and Madhu's thoughts. It was good and made sense.
Madhu's thoughts also reveal more about the past. And she owns up to her mistakes too.
The marriage idea took me by surprise but I did cheer Madhu for saying no. That would be too fast!
RK's epiphany: Brilliant writing! How it happens, makes sense. What RK is feeling and realizing, makes sense. Too bad he could not realize it a few years back, but that is the reality.
RK's continuous moments of realization are perfect. He is seeing the big picture and not just what pertains to him. It is because of these moments, that I can stop hating RK. How can you hate a person who is realizing how his mistakes caused so much pain while he was enjoying his life? That was huge for me. RK admits how well he has been living compared to what Madhu and his kids went through.
RK starts shedding the selfish and spoiled trait and takes up some positive ones.
Added:
I went back to reread chapter 2 and the part where RK is recollecting everything at night and it is still a fantastic part for me.
I am not sure why others are not seeing RK's remorse. I thought that part was fantastic actually.
I love how RK is thinking of his past mistakes and how his life has been in these years compared to Madhu's. And him getting physically sick - of his actions, of his mistakes - I thought that was brilliant.
I would have been more upset if RK would have been passive and ignored all this.
Looking forward to more pls!
(my 3700 post!)
Edited by 4ever4love - 11 years ago
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