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Posted: 12 years ago
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Thank You.. :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: PristineSoul

I lubbed this. You've written it beautifully. Can we have a continuation of it? Pleej?


Aww I'm soo glad you like it.. :)
Yes.. part II coming real soon.. :D
xoxoxo
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome OS, Steph! 👏

If words could speak ... that's the thought that came to my mind on reading your story. Your words were like a TV screen, I could almost view it happening.

You portrayed RK's feelings so well, as well his understanding that what he did with Madhu was so wrong. Read Dil's comment on the 1st page, I second it: do you intend to show us Madhu's POV? Would love it if you continue and turn it into a SS.

You ended it perfectly with the lines from The Ghost of You and Me.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: ennishet

Awesome OS, Steph! 👏

If words could speak ... that's the thought that came to my mind on reading your story. Your words were like a TV screen, I could almost view it happening.

You portrayed RK's feelings so well, as well his understanding that what he did with Madhu was so wrong. Read Dil's comment on the 1st page, I second it: do you intend to show us Madhu's POV? Would love it if you continue and turn it into a SS.

You ended it perfectly with the lines from The Ghost of You and Me.


Aww Thank You soo much di.. :)
First of all...! I was sooo hell bent on knowing what you think about the OS as you give some of the best and unbiased reviews around here.. :) Ye.. Part II is defZo on its way.. :)
About the song.. :) Ahahah.. The story of my life.. :) ahahah.. :D
Thank a bunch di.. :)
xoxoxoxo
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey all.. :) Most of you guys wanted the OS to continue.. So here is Madhu's Point of View after the events which took place.. :)
Yes..! Depressing.. heheh :D I can't help it..! And a little warning.. ! I don't think this is good as the first part though! :) But no worries..! Feel free to let me know what you think.. :) Be frank.. :) I don't mind.. :) I like criticism.. :)
*HuGs*


The Ghost of You and Me II

"We are through RK, this was all just a game.. A game which you started, but I get the final say'"

Madhubala could still picture the the pain in RK's eyes when she finally revealed what her true intentions were.. How he had refused to accept the fact that this was all a part of another plan.. How he let out a weak laugh, appearing not to believe what she was saying.. Not believing that this was yet another Prem Game..

It broke her when she finally realised what she had done.. It broke her to know that she had become the person she was terrified of becoming.. She knew that this wasn't who she truly was.. He had made her the woman she was today.. A new Madhubala..

"Madhu.. I am not the best person in the world, but you make me a better person, you make me want to be a better person.. For you' You brought out the worst in me.. And you brought out the best.. You restored my faith in God.. You restored my faith in Love.. " He said with slightly shivering lips and moist eyes..

"You taught me how to trust.. You taught me what Trust truly meant.. But above all, you taught me how to Love Madhu.. Yes.. I Love You Madhu.. I Love You so much.. "It took everything she had, not to hold on to him and tell him how she felt.. It took everything she had, not to just lose herself in him when he had told her what she had been dying to hear for God knows how long.. He had told her that she meant everything to him, that he too Loved her..

Rishabh stared into his Biwi's big doe eyes, and he felt as if the secrets of the universe lay within the deep pools of her gorgeous browns.. He thanked God for making him the luckiest man on the face of this earth.. For making him the proud owner of the most beautiful pair of eyes..

Madhu knew what was heading her way.. She knew that he had meant every word he said.. She knew that she had him where she wanted.. Yet, the thought of her next move sent shivers through out her entire body.. She knew what had to be done.. She knew what she had to say..

"Rishabh un-weds Madhubala.. " She could still hear RK's words from that fateful night.. The night she thought would be the happiest night of her life.. She remembered how he had declared the un-wedding, how he had relieved her from the four incomplete Pheras, as the five elements stood witness..

She remembered how he had dragged her to the chawl, and how she could think of nothing, how everything was numb.. She remembered how his words made her feel lifeless..

Madhubala could see the uncertainty in his eyes so clearly as she backed away slowly.. How his expressions changed with every step she took.. How he was looking at her with pleading eyes.. She could remember thinking to herself, "Madhu.. Be strong.. If you love him, you have to let him go.. Its what's best for the both of you.. Hai na.." She sent a silent prayer to Bappa asking him for the strength and the courage she needed to do what she was about to..

"Glycerin.. Will you forgive him if he ever comes back to you..? Will you accept him as the man you love..? Will you be able to forget what he put you through..? Madhu could hear Didu's words loud and clear in her mind, and her reply even louder..

She could remember how RK had gone speechless when she finally laid the cards on the table, how he was not willing to accept the fact that things between them are over, and over for good' That there was nothing left.. And yet, not making any effort to make her realize that ending things between them is wrong.. Because he knew deep down, that he himself was to be blamed for the heartache both of them were going through..

My heart was open, exposed and hoping

For you to lay it on the line

In the end it seemed

There was no room for me

Still, I tried to change your mind..

- Wanted You More by Lady Antebellum

He hadn't made any effort to stop her as she slowly backed away, She remembered how she had pleaded, how she told him that he can't play her.. That he is human.. That he was a changed man.. But she had been wrong..

She wanted to make him realize the depth of what he had done, so that he would never toy with another person's feelings ever again..She hoped that turning tables would make him much more than a cold-hearted and selfish person, someone who would respect another's feelings.. and she had succeeded..

"Rishabh, I had to do what I did, I'm sorry.. You will always be the man I love'" Madhu thought to herself as she broke down on her mother's arms.. "Maybe someday we will be together.. I'm hurting, and I and I don't want to let you go' Someday Rishabh, Someday we will be together again, hurting you is hurting me.. "


We are one, we are whole
We are one whole dying soul
Were the crash, the burn,
The dream that turns from ecstasy to aching,
We-e-e-e-e are the sound of two hearts breaking

-Two Hearts Breaking by Jewel

Edited by -Stephanie- - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I must say steph! This is greater than the 1st part.!!! 👏 aww.. feeling bad for both of them... 😔 took revenge from eachother..! anway, I LOOOVE this!! nice piece of work!! btw I'm waiting for the 3rd part!! I know it's a OS & it should be ''short'' but I don't mind, Please make it a ''fanfiction''!!! I may prefer more than 100 parts..!! 😆 cuz I'm already addicted to u r writing style!!! hugs & loads of love!! 🤗
Edited by VinuRox - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Steph I also thinks that this one is better than the 1st hehe.madhu is in so much pain can feel it...can I except a happy ending by the way heheh plz continue it and and my eyes popped out when I saw the lyrics of wanted you more lol lovvve that song.ur a incredible writer dear 😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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An anguish filled part..I felt bad for Madhu as well as RK though I kinda think she could have been a bigger person and forgiven him but she is also human right..??I understand her wish to get even..😳 Hope these have a happy ending..👍🏼

Very well written Steph...👏👏👏 Love the songs too..😳
Edited by dilnasheen - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nice update, Steph!

You've tried to bring about the feelings of both, Rk and Madhu. But still ... I don't understand the point - if Madhu really loved RK then how could she do that? You can never hurt the person you love - that's my thinking.

In the show too, at the time of the un-wedding, I had hoped and wished that Madhu pay RK in kind. But over a period of time, that wish kind of evaporated and now when Madhu is supposedly taking revenge, it pains me to see her actions. I believe in 'live and let live'. She should have left him and gone away to start a new life somewhere far away from him, become successful and returned to flaunt her success and how she could move on in life. That would have been a better revenge. That's my POV.
Edited by ennishet - 12 years ago

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