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Posted: 12 years ago
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😭 It was painful reading this FF.
Thanks Dona.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: vaani21

😭 It was painful reading this FF.

Thanks Dona.

you are welcome😆 for the pain😕
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Posted: 12 years ago
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well i liked the idea of two different version a lot.
will surely help to understand both of them.

part 1-

first para was really good, "its always a women who suffers" yes its true most of the time.
description was really good.

really evoked each feeling, and that para how madhu was saying she is no different was really emotional.

she had done a lot for him, sacrificed her career her ambitions for him, and now realizing that she got nothing.

the feelings how she felt on seeing him with another girl on "their" bed and saying those special words to her, is really tough to describe.u described it so nice.

yes he had ruined her, their marriage, their love [if it existed] and everything.

i liked the last para a lot.

i decided that i will not make my decision about Rishab so soon, but this part is really trying me to hate him, but i will surely read some more chapters, then will decide about it.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: iiDona


I am glad, thank you
ur welcome!😳

losing the sand clasped tightly between your fists. Her affection was giving, she never received her fair share.
that is the reason i like ur FF. the description of the condition with some examples surely helps to understand the situation more, which is not that much possible by just describing it.

the bed is a symbol of marital unity. his act is made all the more disgusting by breaking the sanctity.
yes, i agree with it.

she is doubting her love much in the same way.
that is the worst thing, yes it occurs whenever a man cheats his wife, the women firstly blames herself and consider that they had not given so much love and care, that's why their relationship is facing this thing, but it surely not occur if a wife will cheat her husband, there is least possibility that he will blame himself before her.

The two different versions try to convince to either hate or not hate RK. the decision is yours. I, as the writer, am in a tug of war.

u r the writer, u can't be partial with one character. i will make my decision soon.

reading RK's version part 2 currently, will read every chapter soon.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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part 2-

yes i am getting addicted to ur writing. ur writing style stole my heart.
i had read only 1 writer other than u who writes in this style, a little bit similar.
its really impressive!!

madhu started living in other house, yes it is really hard to remove a person essence, i liked how once she was saying "bleach his essence" and other moment thinking to bleach the bathroom.

"Not one woman, more than one, cause he had taught me: one was never enough."
all these words of madhu are just reflectiong how much she is crying from inside but still trying to be strong.

liked that "strong" one a lot. can't describe its correct meaning right now.

yes rishab is trying but sorry is not enough, a sorry can't bring her trust back or her happiness. try to prove ur love if u really care.

"I know, I say out loud. But, that is all you are: sorry. Ashamed, regretful, pathetic, sore and sorry. Bitter, that is all I am. Devastated, insane, miserable, yours and bitter."
described too well.

acid rishab, rishab acid but both r corrosive, i liked the metaphor a lot.
'acid marks'' yes always left, she can't forget all these things, how much she try.

yes madhu is strong, still trying to save some left over dignity of their relationship, how can she say to anyone that her husband cheated her.

trying to move ahead, buying her studio again, nice decision!

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: adeeba21

part 2-yes i am getting addicted to ur writing. ur writing style stole my heart.i had read only 1 writer other than u who writes in this style, a little bit similar.

its really impressive!!
Thank you. Now I want to know who my competition is😆 JK.
madhu started living in other house, yes it is really hard to remove a person essence, i liked how once she was saying "bleach his essence" and other moment thinking to bleach the bathroom.
For a reserved and private person like her, it is difficult to even confess to herself what she is feeling.
"Not one woman, more than one, cause he had taught me: one was never enough."
all these words of madhu are just reflectiong how much she is crying from inside but still trying to be strong.
liked that "strong" one a lot. can't describe its correct meaning right now.
good, you are contemplating. just what i wanted. I want to rid you (readers in general) of dichotomous thinking. nothing is as simple as "right or wrong, us or them, hate or love". there is an entire spectrum in between, countless shades of all imaginable colours.
yes rishab is trying but sorry is not enough, a sorry can't bring her trust back or her happiness. try to prove ur love if u really care.
proof is relative too. only Madhu knows the criteria for revival of this marriage.
"I know, I say out loud. But, that is all you are: sorry. Ashamed, regretful, pathetic, sore and sorry. Bitter, that is all I am. Devastated, insane, miserable, yours and bitter."
described too well.
acid rishab, rishab acid but both r corrosive, i liked the metaphor a lot
thank you. thank you. *takes a bow*
yes madhu is strong, still trying to save some left over dignity of their relationship, how can she say to anyone that her husband cheated her.
trying to move ahead, buying her studio again, nice decision!
I think she is protecting him as much as she protecting herself. The love is only partially overshadowed by hurt. It will surface on many occasions. She should not have given up her dream. I am glad she is going back to all that was once familiar.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: iiDona


Thank you. Now I want to know who my competition is😆 JK.
i can tell u, i had started reading a blog, the writer is really impressive, i read only 5 chapters till now and i liked it a lot, it's an Arhi FF, just say that only character's name matches and story is all different just as u write, only character name matches.
if u want i can give u the link.

For a reserved and private person like her, it is difficult to even confess to herself what she is feeling.
understand her situation.

good, you are contemplating. just what i wanted. I want to rid you (readers in general) of dichotomous thinking. nothing is as simple as "right or wrong, us or them, hate or love". there is an entire spectrum in between, countless shades of all imaginable colours.
yes i agree, i am struck to ur words "nothing is white or black" just perspective of everyone are different. every coin has two faces, we can't ignore one of them.
i had made a decision i can't hate rishab. its my decision.

thank you. thank you. *takes a bow*
😳😳

I think she is protecting him as much as she protecting herself. The love is only partially overshadowed by hurt. It will surface on many occasions. She should not have given up her dream. I am glad she is going back to all that was once familiar.

yes its nice that she is going back to her dreams. atleast their love is still alive, i was just afraid if rishab really love her or not, but now think yes he do, i am thinking it, and don't u dare to a bring a twist and prove me wrong.

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: adeeba21

i can tell u, i had started reading a blog, the writer is really impressive, i read only 5 chapters till now and i liked it a lot, it's an Arhi FF, just say that only character's name matches and story is all different just as u write, only character name matches.

if u want i can give u the link.
go for it
understand her situation.
yes i agree, i am struck to ur words "nothing is white or black" just perspective of everyone are different. every coin has two faces, we can't ignore one of them.
i had made a decision i can't hate rishab. its my decision.
glad I made an impact😳

yes its nice that she is going back to her dreams. atleast their love is still alive, i was just afraid if rishab really love her or not, but now think yes he do, i am thinking it, and don't u dare to a bring a twist and prove me wrong.
I am not uber dramatic or ekta kapoor. I enjoy pulling a leg or two but that is the boundary I set for myself. DW too much😉

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Posted: 12 years ago
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"Scot, what up?"

I remember dad bumping his shoulder against mine, in an unspoken tradition we shared. Somehow our relationship always reverted back to the stage where I was still a teenager, still daddy's little girl. In a building full of patients, staff and people from all walks of life, we only saw each other.

"Daddy please do not try your hand at slang. You embarrass me too much".

"Teenagers, these days. What are you here for?"

I was ecstatic; I had just received the test results and a wallet size sonogram. My father was becoming a grandfather and I, a mother.

"I am in my twenties dad. Blood work"

"Parents stop being embarrassing past the age of eighteen. In a hospital, Madhu tell the truth", he snatched away the sonogram. A glow spread on his face, displaying vibrant red hues.

"Scottie, I love you. Come here girl".

"No, parents can be awkward no matter the age. I am going to surprise him tonight daddy".

"Fine, you win. The eyes remind me of Rishabh, don't you agree?"

"Most definitely. Split banana kulfi? My treat".

"How are things with him? I am always a bit reluctant to watch you two on the red carpet. Are you comfortable?"

"Of course, the camera makes him happy".

"And you?"

"I am dancing", he was not convinced. "In movies dad. I am dancing on screen. People come and interview me. They ask me for autographs and to judge TV shows. I have the whole world ahead of me".

"Are you happy Scottie?"

"Yes", I reassured him like I reminded myself that every day with Rishabh was a blessing. That my marriage was a fairy tale and that the baby would a seal of infinity.

Why did my infinity have to be so small?
I messaged him for the hundredth time. Rishabh, I am coming home early tonight. The shoot got cancelled and I have surprise. Call me when you get this.
No response. I assumed he was busy, what I did not consider was the activity keeping him engaged. I looked toward the clock then, at the time on my phone. Nearly a minute had passed since my last text but, this was a piece of news difficult to keep to myself. I rushed over crossing leaps and bounds to tell him. Little did I know it was disaster waiting for me in my bedroom.


That cold breezy night of December, I talked to my child, the first words I shared with my baby were your father is a very nice man followed by he cheated.

How is my infant to believe her mother when I contradict myself in a sentence? I found myself asleep on that bed the next morning. Those sheets, her smell was still there.

It was on my body. I scrubbed and I cleaned until...maybe she had been in bathroom. Nothing was pious anymore.
"Madhu", he knocked, he begged, he pleaded while I stood thinking if I should tell him. When I rolled my tongue to formulate words, he would speak and silence me.
"She and I, we..I...her, I. . .I don't know why I thought this was reasonable. I am sorry I".
He would say sorry and I would blank out, stare at the ceiling, listen to the birds, do anything but hear him speak of the many reasons he was sorry.

This went on for a week. I called up divorce lawyers, social workers, counsellors: anyone bound by confidentiality that could help. I was told to leave him, keep mum and leave him. So, I did. I want to tell him more each passing day. He will be a good father, I am sure of it.

But, I don't know if I can mother. I don't want to the keep the baby. I failed at being a wife. I can't fail at being a mother. I cannot keep this pregnancy.
Edited by iiDona - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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oh no did she abort it? no she didn't fail as a wife...and she wouldn't fail as mother...poor Madhu...she doesn't deserve this...

wonderful update thx

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