FF: A Lot Like Love - Updated 10/04 - p.5 (part 2)

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aswaathi

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Posted: 12 years ago

#41

Superb update.. 😊Thanks for the pm.. Keep writing..

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Deepa

@harshdb

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+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#42

finally... he took her name not biwi... continue soon. waiting for the next part.

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PreetD

@PreetD

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Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: BrunoMars
Ohw My god! This is so good, I am really speechless
and amazed, but I still feel like you deserve a long
comment. I this so much, how Madhu does all this
without hesitating, you wrote it so well I totally understood
her, while she is in a confused state. I could relate so well
to her. Beautifully written!

I'm so glad that you enjoyed it. I was struggling with the whole idea of Madhu taking care of him. How can it be done naturally and within character. All the while she's not in entirely in love with the man yet but there's something beginning there. I tried my best, I'm glad it came across that way to you.

Thank you again for you wonderful comments. :)

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PreetD

@PreetD

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: shiv_parvati
Wow simply amazing. Can you pls pls become the scriptwriter of the show.!!!!!!!

Hey, I am looking for a new job. I wouldn't turn one down as a scriptwriter.. lol

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@-happilyunknown

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+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#45

Awesome work dear! i am def buddying you for this:)

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Foucaults-qalam

@Foucaults-qalam

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#46

Very, very nice. You have a knack for flowing action, and moving things forward, as well as for conversation. You pick up character voices v well.

Lovely, lovely story. The best bit of fiction I have seen on this forum.

But what would make it pop is a sense of place. Work on our senses. Make us see things.

Sorry, if that sounds too nit-picky. But as a writer, the most valuable thing anyone can give me is critical feedback, so I am being so bold as to presume that is true for you too!

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QuintessentialI

@QuintessentialI

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#47

Me waiting for part 3 😃

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PreetD

@PreetD

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: Foucaults-qalam
Very, very nice. You have a knack for flowing action, and moving things forward, as well as for conversation. You pick up character voices v well.

Lovely, lovely story. The best bit of fiction I have seen on this forum.

But what would make it pop is a sense of place. Work on our senses. Make us see things.

Sorry, if that sounds too nit-picky. But as a writer, the most valuable thing anyone can give me is critical feedback, so I am being so bold as to presume that is true for you too!

FQ, thanks so much for your feedback! Constructive criticism is always welcome and appreciated, it's never a bad thing if someone steps up and tells you where there's room for improvement.