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meriyaar

@meriyaar

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#71

Originally posted by: -daya-

Haha I thought you did this OS with NTL in mind LOL, glad I pointed it out then 😛
It will be interesting if you add this in NTL will be nice to see what Naku's reaction will be 😆
Update your FF soon, and would love to read more of your OS' thanks for the pm's 😃
take care and see you around yaar! 😃🤗

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Iridescence

@Iridescence1

Alumni

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#72

Originally posted by: tahera57
daya nice OS i liked dutta being afraid of nakku being upset he lost the ring dutta always looked scared of upsetting nakku even when they were just friends hefr being pleased with him mattererd a lot to him. in this he does what anyone in love would do to make the person they love happy . i like how u included baji in this os always there to get bhau out of trouble. please write some more os they always make an interesting read . and add romance to tasha story.

Thanks Tahera ! Glad you enjoyed the attitude from Naku and Dutta's concern lol...
of course Baaji is a must 😉😆
and as for more OS's if i get an idea surely will do so :)

Originally posted by: meriyaar

Haha I thought you did this OS with NTL in mind LOL, glad I pointed it out then 😛
It will be interesting if you add this in NTL will be nice to see what Naku's reaction will be 😆Update your FF soon, and would love to read more of your OS' thanks for the pm's 😃
take care and see you around yaar! 😃🤗

Meriyaar ! Nope not at all...maybe subconsciously NTL was in my mind 😆 but defo did not realize it...you're right it would be interesting certainly but i think i'll not use it in the FF...uhmm i will try to UD as soon as I can...would like to try and set it on a path of finish before i post the next UD...glad u like my OS's, certainly will write if ideas pop up...thanks for ur comments ..love em...yes mate see you ! 🤗

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-bharti-

@-bharti-

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#73

Hi daya

As ever late these days i am.. But loved the OS. it was cute how dutta worried n naku rooti rooti, then as usual i was about to say manana, but this manana was different😉, n naku toh pigalgayi ekdum 😍

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

#74

Make it right!
Look umpa lompa! Dayaaa... can I make it right with you?..hummh.. woh kya haina baji .. you know me busy shsy with many other issues in life.. look you are not the only bane of my life! Aacha chaal gimme a high five..! here's to our dosti... glug! glug! aand washing it down aaahhh sooo good!..
Ok now to the OS... renamed by me.. "the day after the night before" . Daya as soon as I started it was dj vou ...the same pair the same setting , and the same aftermath of events.. Baji and Dutta sloshed in the lion's den. The hyperactive Baji never letting go of an opportunity to wind up his Bhao and Dutta with his repetitive threats of wielding his flex on him!. You brought back that lovely feeling Daya of which we never tire! The lion obviously by the looks of things has behaved badly ,so much so that he may have committed a cardinal sin in an emotional attachment. The fearless lion realizes what could be worse for a man than to lose his engagement ring.
Enjoyable it is certainly to read, Dutta banking upon Baji to investigate the misplacement of his ring. You have painted well in words how people tend to rehash things over in their minds when an object dear to them is mislaid. But much to our amusement we see that for Dutta it also means that he is told off by Naku for being a lying toad and I thought he told some fibs..salle did'nt realize ke he lapses into untruths!.. Yet if this not all for chastisement he also receives all the touchiness she gives him up straight! with regards to not wanting to wear his engagement ring!. Made my laugh to read the truth about the mislaid ring and how it eventually ends up on his palm... could actually visualize their expressions , and feel the cold war between Dutta and Naku.
Of course, what follows is nothing but desirable sweet treats we all crave for , the romance at the laying of the table, the cuddle from behind the at the sink in the kitchen... and the kiss on the terrace... hummmh loved the way he reckons .. why did he bother to appease her at helping her in chores! when all he could have done is... just gone for her lippy's...hummh..
It's amusing the way you have described the feelings, sequence of events, and finally the conclusion of this OS. Your intention was to arouse nostalgia and provide amusement, in a quick blink of an eye which you have successfully done so in a beautifully scribed manner. Thank you billy choo! and well done; along with other forms of writing ,it seems writing OS too is your forte .. so do continue, my mate.
Oyeee.. incidentally I, Me and Myself dedicates this OS to Hammie & Warda ...hooo haaa waise daya thujhe tu mera pata hai..ye apun ka eshtyle hai re!... hooo hooo.. high five over and out...xx hammie.

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Warda.

@Warda.

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#75

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

Oyeee.. incidentally I, Me and Myself dedicates this OS to Hammie & Warda ...hooo haaa waise daya thujhe tu mera pata hai..ye apun ka eshtyle hai re!... hooo hooo.. high five over and out...xx hammie.

ahmm hainnn *rolls eyes* now this is called chorri bhi and seena zoori bhi😆

btw that day i was actually ohhh my tummy hurts now *daya must be looking for her bat*😆

ummhh thankyou for the dedication 😳😛...

Edited by Warda. - 13 years ago

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Iridescence

@Iridescence1

Alumni

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#76

Originally posted by: Warda.

ahmm hainnn *rolls eyes* now this is called chorri bhi and seena zoori bhi😆
btw that day i was actually ohhh my tummy hurts now *daya must be looking for her bat*😆

ummhh thankyou for the dedication 😳😛...

😲 oh my word my jaw literally dropped reading hammies end off *rolls eyes and shakes head in disbelief* ...Oh you are soo right warda...this is so calling for a blow to the head with my bat...!

Edited by -daya- - 13 years ago

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Warda.

@Warda.

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#77

Originally posted by: -daya-

😲 oh my word my jaw literally dropped reading hammies end off *rolls eyes and shakes head in disbelief* ...Oh you are soo right warda...this is so calling for a blow to the head with my bat...!

LOL yeah daya this is a zabardasti wali dedication 😆...

but i guess I...Me and Myself justifies it 😉

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Iridescence

@Iridescence1

Alumni

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#78

Originally posted by: Warda.

LOL yeah daya this is a zabardasti wali dedication 😆...

but i guess I...Me and Myself justifies it 😉

Oh I can totally bet on it that hammie dearest was laughing devilishly while writing that bit...i swear to spite me ! 😆

Warda my hand is itching to grab hold of that heavy metal like bat and take one darn good swing ...err her and her "I, Me and Myself" 😵

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

#79

okkk daya... tera lIye tu jaan bhi hazar hai... are ja ! ja ! dialouge tha...

gana tera liye hai... oyeee spare the bat before i give you a ghuma ka apni clenched fist ka mooka! aur warda shokhee kerne ki koi zaroorat nehi.. pata haina mera ROARSSS ka... ya yaad karoen...glaring at both of you stooges

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K3eAkgottC0[/YOUTUBE]

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Iridescence

@Iridescence1

Alumni

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#80

Originally posted by: Hamlet53
okkk daya... tera lIye tu jaan bhi hazar hai... are ja ! ja ! dialouge tha...

gana tera liye hai... oyeee spare the bat before i give you a ghuma ka apni clenched fist ka mooka! aur warda shokhee kerne ki koi zaroorat nehi.. pata haina mera ROARSSS ka... ya yaad karoen...glaring at both of you stooges

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K3eAkgottC0[/YOUTUBE]

Oh for this song I am totally going to spare you and my bat
🤣 haaaye dekhte hi dil yeh slip ho gaya
aur mein bhi slip ho gaya ...literally on my arse
O tere peechhe peechhe peechhe chal pada
ye mera mann baawraO

Edited by -daya- - 13 years ago

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