Ss Take My Breath Away, Chapter 7, Pg 34, 1st Aug

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Iridescence

@Iridescence1

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

Tink ! Its amazing...I read both in one go and then I was like NOOO why its over ...love the story...and what annoying room mates she has to deal with ! haha a hottie who is full himself...and a psycho haa ...great story...am pulled in...of course you already know I am a fan of ur writing...so no doubt i will be here reading! continue soon ...and finish the other one too! love ya ...see you!

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sona89

@sona89

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

Hi tank

Thanks for the pm ….I must say very entertaining ud …………….baji entry superb ……………..both are pilots ……..poor naku have tough time …….I 'm sure will bond with them soon ……….hey the forum is active …………its all coz of you gr8 writers & lovely members ………amazing gals …………😊plz help it keep active ud soon & wht abt dewaani ?still waiting

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dilse14

@dilse14

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Posted: 13 years ago

#33

hi tink keep on writing we all love reading it 😊waiting for the next

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.scorpio10

@.scorpio10

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Posted: 13 years ago

#34

Wow ! I like

I have a fascination for Men in uniform ...Pilots , Navy ... Something abt them . They are highly intelligent and have certain Aura around them .

Ur SS is very diff ... good read ..

Btw I think , guys as room mates are kick ass , much better than girls usually ...

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Nakusha

@Nakusha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

hi tink

nice ud extremely funny & entertaining 😊loved reading it .yes the forum is active & u can more it super active by ur regular ud .don't forget dewaani .thanks for starting a new ff quite many have not finished wht they started with .i hope you 'll continue writing maybe this attract other too .ud soon tc😊

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-bharti-

@-bharti-

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Hi tink, lovely intro naku has with the two looneys, i would be surprised if she remain sane with these two around. How did the two even make it thus far in the trainin is the puzzle. Anyhow, naku is no quitter n she will find a way to get around n enroute instil some sanity in the crazy heads of the duo. As of now Dutta is non affected with the new entry n he has no plans to change himself for her. So the trio r ready to take off to unknown/unexplored😉 territory in their lives n looks like we r up for an exciting flight/journey tink...

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P. K. Rathore

@tinkerbe11

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Posted: 13 years ago

#37

Originally posted by: tahera57
lovely ud ,they say comedy is harder to do than serious acting. must be same for writing .but so far funny scenes youv'e written are very good. i laughed at nakku holding a sandle to hit baji. also good to have all three as room-mates. dutta so cheeky stripping in front of her, found ud to be a tad short wanted to keep on reading. thanks for ud. hope next one soon.

Thank you Tahera! Yes I've definitely heard the same, a comedian's job is surely a difficult task to carry out. I'm not sure about writing, as I've not written anything that belongs to serious humour but I'm honestly grateful to you for creating a comparision with my writing hun. Hehe as for Naku's sandal well I tried to think what girl in her position would really do, but glad you liked it. Yep Dutta is really cheeky, and I kinda love that about him, as his character takes toll itself, he kinda does whatever he wants to do, rather than me thinking of what to do with him lol.

Yeah I thought it was a little short but like I said I wrote this a long time ago, so I didn't really pay too much attention at the time. You're totally welcome for the update hun, and I will upload the next chapter tonight. 😉

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P. K. Rathore

@tinkerbe11

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Posted: 13 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: meriyaar
OMG! Tink, this is amazing yaar!
You write so beautifully! Really enjoyed it, it's so different and refreshing ever so unique! aur kya kahu???? Man you are just tooo good!!!!!
luv ya!
tc
xoxoxo

Oh thanks so much babe!

So good to know you're enjoying it even though the concept is slightly different, awwyou sure said enough!! A big thanks babe.

Luv you too!

xxx

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P. K. Rathore

@tinkerbe11

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Posted: 13 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: tamanna1391
awsem update tinkupdate ff dewani also

Hey, thanks so much babe. I swear I'm working on it, and I swear I'm having deja vu's with your comments lol 😆😛

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P. K. Rathore

@tinkerbe11

Dazzler

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Posted: 13 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

heyyy! Tinks you most certainly took hammie's breathe away! abhi tak hperventilating...Jadoo hai naasha hai!...no really as soon as sat I in the car with Naku ,with her ray bans on...I was complelled to sing..."in the summer time ,when the weather is fine...de ..de..".It's interesting you should start this FF now..for it is, as you and I are aware the beginnings of summer...welll spring in UK...had a at home feeling as soon as Essex was mentioned...

The setting, her social status and her vocation,are all wow factors to keep me hooked on, and then her character,the determined Naku...with a mind of her own! yes says a lot that she has a mind! and she is hell bent on using it! love it!

The complete description of the Cessna was throughly enjoyable,along side the take off and the airborne views...fantastically described in words, in particular loved how you described the take off..readers delight! enjoyed too the discussion between her and Paul regarding being "free" up in heavnly space..

Listen Tink ,chuckled at the tongue and cheek,cultural references to Asians and gorre ,haaa ,it was very much from how we see it ..laughing with, rather than laughing at satirical element!

I could not read both the chapters without out being over whelmed by the comic and light hearted way you handled, the events, the reactions of the characters...😆 pure entertainment every word you penned and how well you write mate! how blessed we are to have a fantastic writer like you, along with others on this forum!

So , the Batasha trio huddled together as roomies!..great! beginning to make connections with the original Dutta,Naku,Baji..characters from LTL1...already .So now waiting for more to unfold..Peronally I reckon she's already in charge of them two! now waiting for her to wield her power over them!

many thanks mate!...and oh how daft of me ..oye congratulations and many thanks for taking us on board this plane ride...looking forward to having a jolly with you!

much love xx hammie

Hey Hammie!! Itne dino ke baad mulakaat huwi!!! 😆 So I'm kinda glad ke I took your breath away lol, I'm wondering how that sounds right now. 😛 I know how you feel, the summer and long drives just go so well hand in hand innit, it's weird for you to say that because when I started to write this ff it was the end of Summer last year lool, can you believe it, waqt waqt ka faasla hai, and now I'm posting it, Summer's come round again, so I guess all iz well. Yeah at first I was gonna set it in India, but then I thought this is my chance to break the rules, so I thought 'the only way is Essex' 😉.

Nice to know you're actually enjoying it. Yep the take-off was the highlight for me too, I'm just taken away with things like that, so you can imagine that I enjoyed writing that part, although I didn't thinkg a lot of people would've enjoyed that part so much, as I know readers usually want details with the more steamy scenes lol. The being free part is true too, there's a lot that keeps you tied up up there, and people are often mistaken that they are free. 😉

I knooow, I didn't anyone would pick up on that to be hoenst, but yeah you're right, it's totally how we speak here in reference to the gore 😆.

Aww thanks so much, but even I gotta say LTL forum really has seen some of the best writers around on India Forums altogether, I swear it, including you, and for you to even consider me amongst them is a privilege in itself. 😳

Yep all three together for the moment, haha I like how you make that assumption about her running them, but you'll see who really rules the roost soon.

You're welcome babe, and thanks for your awesome comment, and same here, finally we get a chance to catch up huh, looking forward to it too, luv you too hun!

xxx

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