keh ke na keh saku tujhe part8 pg23 updt nov 1 - Page 3

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so finally i can upload my music
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Hey dear sana🤗
Congrats on ur new FF
Awesome start yaar ,,,,loved the concept and intro"s Except the villians😳Anyways iam looking Forward to D and N first meeting ...Hopefully soon ...u take care and jaldi update karna ...and Pm me when u update
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Part 1

(plz play the tone)


A girl packing her stuff talking to someone'''.

Wearing nice yellow color chunidar '. Long black hairs moving freely with wind

Her back to screen '' folding cloths

"Waise ab tak mene ghar nahi dekha par dada ki Choice hai acchi hi hogi ... I am to nervous nayi jaga, naye log par tum ho Na mere sath hamesha '.. Ab bolo bhi kab se meh hi bole JA rahi hoon "she turned

She is naku ''' walked towards something. Took photo in hand as she was talking to it

"Kabhi toh bolo kab tak aise chup rahoge" '.tears comes from her eyes '.fall on photo

She clean it with her hand "kitni bar pukarti hoon dutta '.dutta

Dil ki awaz nahi sunai deti tujhe "

She sat on ground with her knees close to her chest crying.

Focus shift

(plz play tone below )


To a big room

A guy doing boxing practice punching really hard ''' The boy takes a bottle of water, drinks some and throws some of his face. The water slides down on his back making him wet.

It was none other than our dutta ''. He takes off boxing cloves and sat on bed ''. Suddenly

Hear 'dutta' his name with pained voice as immediately walk to cupboard '' there was wooden box which he hide under the cloths.

He opens it there was a photo of young girl around 10 years

Cares the photo by his hands ''."Pata nahi aaj

Kyu lag raha hai tu dukhi hai '' roh rahi hai''. Tujhe udas nahi dekh sakta naku"

Imagine screen spilt in two parts

plz play tone


Naku stop crying" meh kyu roh rahi tum mere pass ho Na '.. Mere sath hamesha "wipes her tears

Dutta "tu our meh dur kaha hai ''. Tu mera saya banker mere sath chalti '' Teri khooshbu meri saaso meh basti hai ''' meri dhadkan tera ahsas hi toh hai ''."

Naku stood up move to mirror "kaise dikhte hoge tum ''' pehle jaise ya thode alg'.. Bachpan meh kahte the meh salman jaisi body banawuga'. Such batao jalte the Na usse kyu ki mujhe woh pasand tha ''' dikhte hoge fit n handsome" n smile to herself

Dutta "thoda badal gaya hoon '.. Tumhe salman pasand tha Na'.. Kaise Na jalu usse batao jab ''. Mere sath hokar jab usski bate karti thi toh bada gussa ata tha Mann karta tha ki bus usski'''.. Par jab ussko dekh kar tum hasti thi toh mera gussa thanda padh jata tha'.

Chalo meh Jo hu waisa hoon tum kaisi hogi ''.

Bilcul mere sapne ki tarha '.. Utni hi massom, bholi, har baat par ghabara Jane wali''par utni hi khoobsurat '' aisa chehra Jo samne aye toh duniya tham jaye ''. Baate aisi ki bus Mann kare suntan hi jau "a big smile

Naku" meh toh waisi hoon jaise pehle thi ''..

Abhi bhi ghabara jati hoon, par jab bhi aisa waqt aye toh tumhe yaad karti hoon darr bhag jata hai ''. Tum bhi kuch kam nahi ho duniya ke samne sher bante the par chipkali ghabarate the ''aaj tak ye raj mene Kisi KO nahi bataya tumne kasam di thi Na "

Dutta looked at the things in the box small ribbon, a car, a button n other small thing

"Yaad hai tumhari ribbon jab hamari ladai huyi thi our mene tumhare baal khiche the .kyu ki uss din lupa chupi meh haar Gaya tha .galti meri thi par galat tumhe thehraya '.har baar toh aisa hi hota tha .mujhe gussa jo itna jaldi ata tha'..

Sab mujhse darte the par tu hamesha mujhe manati thi our meh tumhari baat maan bhi jata tha ''.Ek bar baba ne mujhe our tujhe paise diye the hum dono gola khane Gaye. mera gola gir gaya'''. tab tune tera gola mujhe diya jab ki tujhe bhi gola bhahut pasand tha '' par tu sab karti thi meri khushi ke liye hai na? Kyu thi itni samazdar bol? "

Naku walk up to window saw the whole sky

"Tu Jo itna buddhu tha ...Hamesha jaldi ke chakkar meh gadbad kar hi deta tha .our phir itna SA muh karke ruth jata tha ''' kitni baar tere liye dath khayi teacher's se, maa se, kaki se

Our Jane kis kis se ''par sach kahu bura nahi laga ''. Tu bhi toh mere liye kuch bhi karta tha

Ek baar jab mein kaha mujhe imli khani hai toh tu mere liye pedh chdha imli bhi layi. Par pedh se itni jor se gira ki ghutne se khoon AA raha tha Na'..waise hi bhagkar mere pass aya our imli dene laga ''..tab woh khoon dekhkar teri jaga meh rone lagi .our tu dard bhulkar mujhe chup karwane meh laga raha''..kitne suhane din the na woh lagta tha ki hum sabse khushnaseeb hai par''.. "

plz plat tone


He clears his throat as he was absorbing pain

"Sab kuch badal Gaya uss hadse ke baat ''. Hum dur huye woh bhi aise ki phir Na mile'

Meh logo ke liye dutta se bhau ban Gaya ''

Patil wadi ka raja''' a gangster ''. Khuni

Kabhi kabhi lagta hai kyu nahi hai tu mere pass

Mujhe yaad hai woh akhari mulakat hum '.. Ret meh khel kahe the '.. Ghar banaya tha hamne '' tabhi babi kaki ayi our tujhe le Jane lagi tu roh rahi thi chila rahi thi''.. Mene unhe rokne ki koshish ki par ''.. Nahi rok paya tumhe''tuth Gaya woh ghar naku... Kash rok liya hota tujhe ''.. Sochta hu jab tujhse miluga kaise chuguga tujhe inn khoon bare hatho se ''' bahut pyaar karta hoon tujhse naku par '''..ye halat majboor karte hai mujhe"

Naku also started crying after remembering that incident "baad meh, dada our maa Mumbai aye ''maa mehnat karke mujhse our dada KO padhaya''.. Dada bhi kabil bane ''.

Hamne bure din dekhe hai dutta ''..iss liye

Unke dil meh tumhare parivar ke liye gussa hai'.. Par ye sab mere liye nahi mayne lagta

'.. Meh'meh pyaar karti hoon tujhse' jabse se pyaar KO Jana tujhe chaha hai '.

Ab dada KO job mila'. hamare halat bhi badal Gaye hai'..

Meh law ki padhai kar rahi hoon ''..

Jab hum mileng toh mujhe pehchanoge''' mera pyaar mehsoos kar sakoge '.. Par tumne apne liye Kisi our KO chunliya toh'..mar jayegi ' agar Naku dutta ki nahi huyi toh jine ka matlab kya ''. "

Dutta "meh tere Siva Kisi our se kabhi pyaar nahi kar sakta ''' ab tak tere liye jita aya hoon Varna toh kab ka mar Gaya tha tera dutta'.. Sirf tera dutta '''. Nakusha meri

Naku '' hum kabhi milenge? Aap toh sab jante hai Na ''." And he walks up murti of ganpati bappa

Naku also moves towards bappa placed on table and both of Tasha close their eyes took blessing form bappa

Naku "bappa aaj tak mene Jo bhi manga tune diya... par apni har dua mehne dutta KO socha usse hi manga, bappa usse khush rakhna usske dukh mujhe dede meh seh lungi ''.. Mujhe mere pyaar se mila de bappa dutta se mila de "

Dutta "janta hu meh woh hamesh mere liye hi dua mangegi aisi hi woh par tum sab jante ho bappa ''. Bahut acchi hai woh usse har kushi Dena jiski woh haqdar hai, akho meh jaan baki hai ussko ek bar dekhne ke liye, logo ke liye taktwar hoon meh par kuch nahi kar sakta usske liye''.. Naku se mila de bappa usske bina sab hote huye bhi kuch nahi hai mere paas"

"Naku "someone called her name and knock the door ' immediately she hide photo

Open the door '.. It was babi who wearing a silk sari with thin chain around neck

And faint smile on lips ''''

"Kya kar rahi thi tu darwaja band karke" naku was standing blocking her entrance to room

Naku "woh meh '' aai bus yuhi 'packing packing kar rahi thi "

Babi "thik hai packing kar rahi thi par tujhe itna pasina kyu aa raha hai bol ''. Chal Jane de

Ab aise hi khadi rahegi ya mujhe indar ane degi"

Naku make way for her while clearing her sweat "tu bhi aai ''. Kuch bhi "

Babi also start packing her stuff "tu tayar hai na 11 baje gadi hai chut jayegi '.. Tere dada ki nayi naukari hai waha pe '.. Par usse toh woh kya kehte ho tum log haan 'joined '

Toh parso hona hai '..Par tera vakil (lawyer) wala

Collage toh kal se hai '.Varna tujhe akeli nahi Jane deti ''' janti hai meh ghabara jati hai tu '' par ghabra mat meri bacchi aaj tak sab thik huwa hai aage bhi sab accha hoga "and she kissed her on her forehead

Naku saw tears in her eyes ' she wipe out them' naku "aai roh kyu rahi hai tu aise acchi nahi dikhti"

"Haan jab muskura de toh bus ashwarya rai dikhti hai "someone said in sweet voice

Babi n naku turn to door ''.it was young handsome kind of guy in formal ware and laptop in hand ''. He walked up to them.

He said in mischief voice "Kyu hai Na"

Babi smile n hit him hard on head" kyu re apni aai ki muskari karta hai "

He was veer ' veer "aahh'hhh tu bhi kya aai"

Careing his head

Babi goes down for some work

Naku hug him "veer dada''aap itni jaldi ''.

Par aap toh nahi ane wale the Na toh phir ye'."

Veer broke hug" bus bus kitne sawal ''waise toh kam bolti par '' kabhi toh '..Haan ab sunn kyu meh tujhe surprise nahi de sakta ''aaj jaldi aya tujhe station chodna hai Na'..

Toh chale ''' sab ho Gaya Na'.. Tu aaj JA rahi hum parso ayege'.. Ghar ka kuch saman waha pahucha diya hai '.. Toh waha tu acche

Se reh payegi baki ke saman ke liye mene truck bulaya hai woh bhi parso ayege '' ghar accha hai chinta mat kar "

Naku "meh bacchi nahi hoon Na Jo har waqt aap meri chinta karte ho '.. Meh aap ke liye

Pareshani hoon '.. Baat baat par roti hu '..Darti hu '' buri hu meh"

Veer smile place his hand on her head "kisne kaha tum hamare liye Pareshani ho'.. Tum toh

Hamari har khushi ho ''.. Chahe tum darti ho

Roti ho par aaj tak tumne galat kaam nahi kiya.

Hume naaz hai tum par our tere sanskaro par'

Our meh janta hu tu lawyer banker bhi hamara naam roshan karogi"

Naku "haan dada meh aap ka sar kabhi niche nahi hone dungi '' mera wada hai apse "

Babi niche se awaz deti hai "kya kar rahe ho tum bhai behen dono chalo niche aao '.."

Veer "ab chal warna ashwarya ko gussa aa jayega aisa huwa na toh ''. Hume abhishek bhi nahi bacha payega"

Both laugh and go down '.veer carries her stuff

Babi was stood in front of mandir with puja thali in hand

Babi start singing arti''.

After that naku take blessing form bappa '..

Babi "bappa tujhe har musibat se dur rakhe meri bacchi "

Naku went towards photo of her baba on wall took blessings' veer "dekha aai kitni samazdar ho gayi hai "babi smiled and nodded her head in agreement'.

And departure for station

Focus on dutta

Who was still standing in front of bappa and

Just his phone rings

He kept all stuff in cupboard''. Clear his voice

He picked up the call

Dutta "ha boliye nana shaheb "

On other side nana "deva chi kripa dutta '' sab thik hai Na? "

Dutta "sab thik nana shaheb '' aap fikar mat kigiye 'aapne itni subha phone kiya kuch kaam

Tha "

Nana "kuch nahi re bus ye kehne ke liye phone kiya tha ki ''meh kuch our din yaha Dubai rahega '' mere khabari ne kaha hai ki rajan kuch locha kar sakta hai'. tu waha patil wadi security tight rakhna '."

Dutta "ji nana shaheb chinta nako'' mere hote huye patil wadi ko koi buri nazar se nahi dekh sakta "

Nana laughed a bit" janta hai meh '. Iss liye toh tu waha ka raja hai ' par phir bhi... Baccha hai tu mera ' haan par sunn jara bhi locha huwa Na toh mujhe batana '' phone rakhta hai meh ''.. Deva chi kripa "

And both cut the phone

Dutta put on his normal cloth like black pathani outfit, watch, and looks at his gun kept on dressing table

He picked it in his hand and aimed it

N said "patil wadi "

Focus on naku

Mahale family reached to station

The train was on time '.. Veer search for naku's sit ''.. He finally got it '' placed her baggage their '' naku entered in train and the train starts '.. Babi n veer waving their hand '.

Naku was standing in door of train also saying good bye to them

Babi continuously keep gauze on train till naku completely disappeared '''

Veer "aai chinta kyu karti hai tu "in questioned tone '.. Babi "kya karu maa hu Na usski '' pehle hi bohut kuch kho chuki hu USS parivaar ki waja se '' ab tum dono kuch huwa toh ''.. Darr lagta hai''. Ki koi tumhe mujhse dur Na karde "

Veer put his hand on her shoulder said "ab aisa kuch nahi hoga aai '.. Hume jitna sehna Na tha hum seh chuke '.. Tab meh chota tha jab UN logo ne mere baba KO mujh se chhin liya par ab mujh meh itni takad hai ki meh apni parivaar ki hiffajat kar pawu''.tod kar fek duga har uss hath ko jo mere apno par war karega ''.. Tu hi kehti hai Na humare sath bappa hai toh ab ye chinta chod '' Hume pura ghar bhi toh shift karna hai '.. Our haan aisi hi khush raha kar "

Babi smiled to her son "bahut bada ho Gaya re tu ''. Mujhe pata nahi chala '.. Meh toh tujhe ab bhi baccha hi manti hu'. Ab chal kaam pada hai ghar par "

Focus on naku

Naku in train managing her own stuff as she was nervous

Old lady who was sitting beside her asked "kuch Pareshani hai beta "

Naku smile at old lady said "kuch nahi aaji (grandmother in Marathi) woh yuhi bus nayi jaga akeli ja rahi hu na toh thoda darr lag raha hai "

Old lady "darr kyu rahi ho beti ...duniya meh har insaan bura nahi hota ''' kuch log acche bhi hote hai '. Ab dekh tu ne mujhe aaji bola '.. Tere roop meh mujhe poti mili kyu hai Na '' Bhagwan hamari jholi meh kya dalte hum nahi jante par Jo bhi ho Hume USS ka samna himmat se karna chahiye '. Ye kavita (poem)

Mujhe meri maa ne batayi thi ' woh padi likhi nahi thi par '' jindgi KO acche se janti thi

Meh bhi aise hi darti thi tumhari tarha

Tab unhone mujhe ye sunai thi

(Marathi meh hai ' chalega Na)

Ghantmi shukra bhag raj Kari

Re khinn mana bhag ata tari"

(It means raat meh chand ho Na ho par jugnu rote nahi apni roshni meh duniya dekhte hai '

Then poet says toh phir e dukhi dil tu kyu roh raha hai '. ) (iss poem ka credit meri dadi KO jata hai ''. unhone batayi thi ye lines)

Naku "ji aaji apne mujhe badi Sikh de hai meh ye hamesha yaad rakhugi"

Old lady gives a rose to her from her potli n said "ye gulab apne paas rakh beta Teri aaji ki yaad samaz kar ' iss meh mera pyaar hai jab tujhe koi pyaara lage toh usse Dena ''.waise tu kaha JA rahi hai?"

Naku take rose from her said "patilwadi"

Train vastly running on root

Episode ends

Screen divide in two portions

On one side dutta standing with gun in aimed and other side naku sitting in train with rose in hand

Background voice

Barso pehle bichade the dil kismet se

Ab phir milenge? Kya hogi takdir ki nayi chal

Next coming soon

Hope u enjoy this one

😊 LoveSana😊

Edited by sana141994 - 14 years ago
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i just luv u guys
thanks for those lovely comments
but i need more ( i am too gredy abt luv)
😉
so for all my friends


Edited by sana141994 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Sanaaa ! :D

i liked the way itz written ...going back and forth...
great update...liking the story ...both remembering each other
and feeling the connection ..tho miles away lol
thats tasha ..really nicce

and loved the music bits for each one
nakus...was sweet...and duttas for boxing liked that music..and then tasha music bit was really nice tooo

the music added to it ...i loved
keep it u
continue soon :P
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beautiful update...loved it...add me 2 ur PM list...
the music u used was gd 2...i loved tasha's convo...hw they both wer talkin 2 1 another despite being apart...
wow so naku is goin 2 patilwadi..i wonder if she wil meet dutta any time soon and wil she recognise him or nt
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Posted: 14 years ago
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love the updateyaar tasha milne waale hain thanx god
Edited by rrs1391 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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thanks for a lovely update sana.please update soon.thanks for pm
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sana this was just brilliant lady!... the whole feel of this story is very appealing ...
the FB,conversation between Dutta AND Nakku was suberb,the dialouges ,the thoughts ,especially his feelings towards her were ,heart rendering...quite impressed I was Sana by youR indepth of feeling you could Portray between them, inTHIS EPISODE... THE MUSCIAL EDITIONS were a novelty ,but the real beat my lovely were the dialouges ,got me a while to read them because they were in Hindi ,but in a way tha's good ,because I can concentrate ,tather then whizz through what you have written... wel done... waiting for next ... xxx remem😊ber smile hammie

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