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Posted: 14 years ago
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Hey guys just thought of starting a ff. I have Never written one 😆so her enjoy i will update after i get sme review bck 😆

Character Sketch
DUTTA SRIRAM PATIL
also knew as Dutta Bhau; a gangster with both illegal and legal business profession. he loves his family to the core and has one weakness name Nakusha Mehra.

Nakusha Mehra

Nakku everyone called her. She is bubbly, charming, funny, witty and kind. She has one dream and that is to become Nakusha Dutta Patil.

BAAJI ASHMIT PATEL

childhood friend of dutta and Nakusha he has no family except dutta and Nakusha there mean everything to him.

Karan Mehra

legal business man and Nakusha half brother how brought her up after the death of there father he love her and will do anything for her happiness except one thing.

Tina Mehra-

Nakusha half sister how hates her but never shows it. Because her brother Karan love Nakusha more . She want to see Nakusha unhappy , sad and alone.

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Index of chapters

Chapter 1 https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1707165&PID=43579725&#43579725

Chapter 2 https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1707165&TPN=2

Chapter 3 https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1707165&TPN=4

CHAPTER 9https://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=1707165&PID=44063099&#44063099
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Posted: 14 years ago
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CONGRATZ!!!😃GREAT INTRO!!
rely interesting 2 see dat tasha love eachother...
n dis time its nakus step sis who hates her n im assuming karan dsnt like dutta n dsnt want naku 2 mary him
baji as always soundz lyk a sweetheart😳
pls do cont soon
pls add me 2 ur pm list :)
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Posted: 14 years ago
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great start tasha already in love good .please continue soon and add me to your PM list .update soon.please show dutta a bit romantic in your ff if possible.
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Posted: 14 years ago
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congo dear !

add me :D
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Alveera ! ! ! ! Long time no chat ...hope ur well :)

and please add me to pm list

and Update soon !

Dutta already intro with weakness haha great ...good good

now dont keep us waiting
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Posted: 14 years ago
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new FF great
good start
add me to your pm list...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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here is 1st update enjoy dnt not forget to tuch the like button lol

Chapter 1

I was running around in the forest trying to find my way out, lost. I know this forest by heart. Why was I getting lost? I couldn't think straight. My head was spinning. It didn't help that it was pouring down rain either. I was backing up suddenly I hit something; I turned around to see what it was, or who it was. I was scared. It was Dutta, had he come to rescue me? As I turned around I felt his chest. He was so close, I couldn't look straight into his face the force of the rain was too hard on my face. I was startled I fell to the ground. Crying, sobbing, and screaming. "Its okay, Nakku im here.", but it wasn't okay. It was only then I realized that voice didn't come from Dutta. It came from my brother, Karan. "I had the same dream again why the hell do I have" I asked Karan in a worried voice "maybe because u hang out to much with a gangster have you ever thing about hang out with normal people" Karan said. "Dutta is a normal n will u stop calling him that please" I replied back " but my sweet Nakku Dutta Shriram Patil is an gangster n I cant say he normal because anyone in the right mind will not get into that Karan bhaiya please can we not get into this again please" karan looked at me and said "fine go back to sleep you've got Uni in the morning" He kissed my forehead as karan was about to leave I griped he arm "Bhaiya please can u sit her by be for a while Im scared I feel safer if you're here with me." He sat on the bed next to me and I cuddled into his chest.

I woke up in the morning with my phone ring I really hope it want tina call me from her bedroom asking to get ready to go shopping with her I answered the phone with out looking how called me "Hello" "Jism se rooh tak, hai tumhare nishaan' Bann gaye tum meri zindagi' Jab se tum ho mile, jaan-o-dil hai khile' Tumse waah basta hai, har khushi'Tum ho mera pyar, tumse hai karaar, Tumko hi basaaya maine yaadon mein' Tumse hai nasha, tumse hai khumaar, Tumko hi sajaya maine khwaabon mein' Good morning baby how is my love today. It was dutta he woke me up by singing to me how romantic with a big smile on my face I answered back "Im find but how are you and what have u done to my dutta waking me up with a romantic song" this made him laugh o god I love hearing him laugh " yeh nakku ur always saying im not romantic n I dnt know nothing about romance so I decide I will show u how romantic Dutta Shriram Patil can be just wait and watch Nakusha Mehra" I was about to say something when tina came in screaming at me " nakku what the hell is wrong wid u you should have been ready by now we have to leave in half an hour I dnt want to miss the sale now hurry up and get ready btw how are u talking to" before she could answer her question she took the phone off me and said " how is this fool u talking to hello" I didn't know what dutta said to her but when she handed me my phone back she had tears in her eyes " SORRY DI can u please get dressed so we can go shopping" " sure I will u go I'll coming" I replied back. Tina left my room I put the phone back to my ear "Dutta what did u say to Tina she had tears in her eyes" He laughed at my question "I will tell you when I see u later I cant give all my secrets away now can I" he said " and what that how to make girls cry" I said "well some if there are rude to my Nakusha" Dutta said I couldn't help but smile I never seen this side to Dutta and I was enjoying it " Dutta I have to go now but I will call u later after I come back from shopping with Tina and remember u have to pick me up today" " nakku you hate shopping with Tina why don't u just tell her" asked dutta " because- because she ur sister dutta said finishing off my sentence. "Yeh she is I really have to go now dutta I will see u tonight n by the way Karan bhaiya is home today so u might see him when u pick me up" I said with a smile dutta didn't get on with karan as much as he did with Tina "cant wait see you tonight love you" dutta said " I love u too Dutta bye" I said and got up to get ready to go shopping with tina God this is going to be a long boring day but end of the day I will see my dutta and I hope he and Karan can be nice to each other for ten mins.

"Who knew we would get so much in sales"

Tina said with excitement. "Yeah, who knew I would get a work out carrying eight bags." I think she got well I hoped she did . "Nakusha can I ask u a question" said Tina "sure Tina ask away" I replied " why are u dating dutta is it because of he's money I mean got get me wrong I will do the same go out wid the guy if he rich but I never thought u will date an one like dutta hell isn't he old than u to I thought u wont date anyone and u will marry anyone the Karan pick for u" I smiled back at Tina question and answered back "tina im dating dutta because I love him n I think that answer ur question" "What a b*** im dating dutta because I love him we will see how long u stay wid him I bet he hasn't even kiss her cme on how wat to kiss her anyway with the way she dress so old fashion" Tina through in her mind. "Nakku has dutta kiss u yet I mean ur been dating him for a how long now" I looked shocked at tina how im I to answer that question I just smiled back "I think that's personal information tina and we should get going I have to get ready for my date" Tina thinking in her mind "b**** rub it in that ur going out with your sexy hot handsome boyfriend god what do he see in her" fine lets go home anyway I want to see how bhai is going to act when dutta come to pick u up" tina said I smiled weekly at Tina "god why did she have to say that" thinking in my mind I got in my range rover which dutta gifted me for my birthday I didn't what to keep it but dutta said if I love him I will keep it so I did I drove back home hoping everything will be alright what's the worse could happen .

Pre-cap: nice to see u Mr Patil so how ur business going on that I need ask anyway I didn't come to sit down and chit chat with u I ve one role one keep ur bloody murdering hand off my sister he said with hatred in he's eye..

I will keep my hand off her but only if she want my to said dutta
Edited by alveera_rckz - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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res :)


Edited:

Congratz my dear for the FF

and lovely start

a protective brother ...i like the concept

not liking Tina lol dont really need to explain that do i 😆

hmmm Dutta trying his romantic side...


so they are dating...i hope u have a story about how they met and started dating ...

would really like to know that

pre-cap seems interesting...can't wait

continue soon 😳


Edited by daya0628 - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Plez no res sport I would like 2 knw u reviews in words
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: alveera_rckz


Plez no res sport I would like 2 knw u reviews in words

sory bt i wntd 2 b 1st ..wil edit it asap..2nyt tho so dw😉😳

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