New FF: The Reality of Dreams Ch8 pg31 Jan 9

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Madhia

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Posted: 15 years ago

#141

OMG it sooo sweeeet😍 aaawww i like it very much,...2 goood😳🤗

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amu142

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Posted: 15 years ago

#142

haila!! yeh Nakku itna lecture deti hai, aur yeh Don Bhau, chup chap sunta hai!!

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flowergirl_O

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Posted: 15 years ago

#143

hi fuppi😃...i finally am giving a good comment😉...for a while it was weird cuz things sorta changed for me but now i think i'm going to be more active on the forum from now on😉...about your update🤔...of course it's awesome🥳...i always love them and especially this one since it has dutta in it😳...you know you're such a awesome story-writer i think you should write a story for palkon ki😉...and in it make karan die but that's too much work...especially now that you're a viewbie...congratulations👏👏👏...i know you're going to do a fantastic job fulfilling you're duties and i know that for sure because that's who you are😉...a trustful and responsible person😛...i even think you're the best viewbie😃...no offense to any other viewbies...it's just i don't know you and i haven't see you work but i know fuppi works a lot on this forum👍🏼

about the update i just want to say again i loved it👏👏👏👏....starting from dutta walking down the stairs all the way to dutta left thinking about what naku said...i can't wait till both idiots find out that they love eachother😍...i can't call dutta an idiot but i can call naku an idiot cuz seriously...why does she listen to her strp-mom and just show her eal beauty😡...

i really liked the song⭐️...every time you use a song in your update i allways listen to it while i read...idk why it just helps me get in the mood of the story...i'm so weird😆...but his song is really nice...because of you i go tot listen to it...you allways bring out the good songs

my first favorite scene of today was when dutta went downstairs...i just loved how you described him😳...when nkau said she wanted to touch it i could totally tell she had a crush on him cuz i have a crush and i would so want to touch that guys hair😳...but i don't understand why she thought it was bad thinking of him😕...i know she probably thinks what she wants will never happen but so what...i know i'll never get my crush but it never stops me from dreaming😍

then i got really pissed when sups latched her arm on dutta's arm😡😡😡...she's jsut like karan🤢...she's trying to take away dutta from nkau even though we all know that dutta does and will allways love naku eventhough he doesn't know yet...she hsoyuld be ashamed of herself...how dumb is she that she can think dutta will ever love her...i just hate her😡...just reading her name makes me mad

i could connect to naku since everytime my parents leave home i watch tv because when they're here i can't watch anything😉...i even stay home just becasue of that jus like naku watching history channel...i can also connect to her because i love to dance in the rain eventhough i never really did play danced in the rain

i wish dutta realized who the girl in the rain was but it made me happy when he noticed the similarities with naku😃...but then i got sad since dutta thought it was ridiculous🤢...he should follow his heart and search naku's room to see if she had the payals and the stupid naku lied to dutta that she didn't have payals😡...what's the worst that could happen if she said yes😒...grr...sometimes i just don't like when girls like naku say you should never lie but lie themselves😔

i think my favorite thing about this story are the conversations between dutta and anku😛...they don't really have romance but the conversations is one way i think they bond😳...you write the conversations in an awesome way and i love how dutta is allways speechless after each leecture naku gives him😉...especially this one when he's left thinking about what she says...she has such a great effect on him which is how i think the love is starting😉...that's another thing i like about this story is that it's different...it's not really love at first sight but there is some conncetion...reading it makes me smile...sometimes i don't even realize when i start smiling😃
what i really want to happen is that becasue of naku dutta becomes a better perosn...not that he should stp his business but atleast better with his mom...then i want him to love her and i think she already loves him but is just to afraid to admit it😳...the only thing i'm anxious to know is if you're goig to make dutta fall inn love with ugly naku or the preity naku😕...also i want sutta to save naku from her step mom and sisters like prem saves heer from her chachi

the best part is a person like dutta bao who never listens to anyone is letting a maid lecture him and instead of arguing he listen and is allways speechless😲...plus she's the only one other than baji that he actaully talks to when there's so many other people in the huge mansion they live in...that reminds me does nakua nd her family know about dutta's business?😕...i forgot

fuppi i'm so sorry for commenting so late but atleast i was able to comment before you updated😉...i'm getting more excited to read the next part and your story is the only reason why i like this couple cuz in the show dutta hates naku but in here they're freinds and slowly falling in love😳...i can't wait for the next update😃...i love you🤗

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-Fivr-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#144

*takes a swig of her Pepsi*

I've totally decided on commenting on BOTH your FFs tonight before I head off to bed, so here's my comment.. This comment might not be as long as the one for the other FF - that FF had moved me a lot more (because of the content and definitely NOT the writing) than this one. But there are a few select things that stood out to me.

Okay. I LOVE LOVE LOVE the "silent" conversation that goes on between Dutta and Nakku. I mean I LOVE it! I love how she notices him rolling his eyes when Supriya latched on to him. Sarey ghar k samne, sab rishtedaar k samne they seem to have their own PRIVATE moment! Literally sab ki naak k neechey!! And I love that! It makes their relationship so much more exotic to me! And if Nakku notices his subtle gestures then he's not far behind in his ability to read between the lines and understand what she isn't saying. When she tells him about her not owning any payals I love how he already knew she'd been lying. He could tell that her eyes said something different and her words narrated a different story - and off the two, her eyes were definitely the truthful ones. They're not in love (yet! Not that they know of at least) and yet they read each other so well and are so completely aware of each other. I really like that. I say Babi can try all she wants to thoopo-fy her daughter on Dutta but in this instance "dulhan dilwala le jaye gi!"!! 🤣🤣🤣🤣

The other thing that stood out to me was the "dance" scene in the garden. Nakku was thinking of Dutta even though she was trying hard not to. She had always been able to shut out her "dreams" but in this one instance she wasn't being able to detach herself and it perplexed her. Her heart was more strongly attached to this "dream" so much so that she couldn't shake it free of the dream - she hasn't yet realized the hold Dutta's beginning to have on her and if she has she's in total denial. Both of which are interesting to watch. And I like even more is that when Dutta saw "Nakusha" he didn't fall for her beauty. It was her grace that did him in - the same grace that he can (and I am sure will) see in Nakku. Since his "attachment" to the girl in the garden isn't stemming from her "beauty", he would not short list Nakku yet and I like that.

And I would like to take this moment to say that whoever tells me that men "mature" up with age are LYING to me!!!! A small part of every man (and maybe women too) always remains a child - and Dutta's instance, a child that holds a grudge against the woman that "married his dad and took his mother's place". He's stubborn and he refuses to acknowledge that the facts of his life prove otherwise - that she's there to be with him in any capacity he wants and not to set a standard for herself. But it intrigues me to notice Nakku show Dutta the metaphorical mirror. Sometimes we need an "outsider" to tell us what's right because we take for granted those that are close to us. And that's what Nakku did for him here - she simply told him he was wrong. And that how he's lived his eyes for the past years was wrong - it was a simple fact and she wasn't ready to "debate" it. *sigh* And Dutta had begun to realize she was right.. I would love to see how this conversation affects Dutta. Every conversation with Nakku has left him restless and pondering - I wonder what this one will manifest itself as. 🤔😃

Sorry yaar, it's not as long as the other one. But mere nanhey sey demag mein itni hi baatain ayen.. 😆

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Jazmin

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Posted: 15 years ago

#145

Originally posted by: *Guli*
Babe ji!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😳 hello ji!!!!!!!😃 im here and that too right after you update!!!! or else i will forget and then you will be gussa with me!😡😡😡 and thats not a good thing!!!!😭...... but haila...... and see... i didnt steal ur color this time!!!! i used a teal sort of color!!!!!!😆 babe-ji!! 🤗...i can never be gussa with you..we are the same person...no fights ever...only when it comes to Arman (😳)/Sid (🤢)...and the Lakers (kobe sucks! 😃😃) ...lol...love you!!

haila another update and omg he saw the pretty Naku.... uff how come he couldnt recognize her?? wat is this babe.... sooo not cool!!!😭 and Dutta believed her about the whole payals!!!man he shouldve done some jassosi... i mean just like that... Dutta ko kya hoga!! no no no...he only saw Naku's eyes...not her face...pay attention...the tree branches/shadows were covering her face...you are going too fast 😆😆😆

Man this naku is always giving lectures to Dutta!!😆😆😆 so funny.... whatever the topic maybe.... in the end he's the one thats dumbfounded!! which is quite funny to see!!!!😆😆😆 she may talk a lot sometimes... but she does have a point!! but now thanks to her... he's always left thinking and scratching his head!!!😆 but haila... wat she said was right i agree with her!👏 one thing that my naku and show ki naku have the same...lectures 😛😛😛...but you gotta admit...her lectures rock! 😉😉😉

lets see what happens now.... plz cont soon babe!!! and i mean soon!!!!!!! not a month!😡 lol...it wasnt a month...just a few weeks 😛😛😛

luv u babeji!!!!!!!!⭐️ ME TOO!! 😳

Originally posted by: kshreya2002
Hey jaz...I liked how u described dutta. now let me tell u a secret...even i feel the urge to run my hand thru dutta's hair...and i keep thinking woh naku karamjali aisa kyun nahin karti. hope she takes care of it after marriage. hola yaar! 😃...im glad you liked Dutta's description...he he...as for fingers in hair...you're gonna have to wait for Naku to take her turn...and who knows...shayad beech mein Supriya bhi aajayeh 😉😉😉
and yeah good u described his clothes...nowadays i iamgine dutta in that maroon shaadi wala dhoti kurta. i forgot what he used to wear otherwise. in fact just to refresh my memories i saw some of the old episodes. im so happy he is out of the shaadi outfit...im behind on this entire week...tomorrow is my catch up day so i can do the LTL...but thank god that the pathanis are back 😃😃😃...lekin ek baath hai...i wanna see him in a suit/blazer 😳
btw in the discussion with aai..dutta didnt sound the mature guy we know. i also liked that dutta didnt like sups trying to touch him. I remember we used to hate his touching supriya. anyways thats over now...aur dutta ne kya touch kiya naku ko...jee khush kar diya. 😆 lol...ya...this dutta is just a bit off from the usual Dutta...but dekhna...he's gonna be sudarao-ing soon 😛😛😛

Originally posted by: cool.sindhya
OMG Jaz!!! cann isaayy merii aannkheinn bharr aayii!! *wipes tears* that was soooo sweeett!! Maa to bas.. maa hoti hai1 soo straightt,, soo truee... And then the dutta allmost catching nakku bit! *covers muh in shock* sachh kab bahaarr nikalegaa jee?? ☺️

sindy!! 🤗...whats up yaar...did you really cry...i mean...kya saach mein akheein bhar aayi teri? 😕😕...aaisa toh maine kuch nahin likha 😉😉😉...saach ka samna hone mein dehr hai...Dutta needs to fall for Naku...not a pretty face 😛😛

JAZ

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Jazmin

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Posted: 15 years ago

#146

Originally posted by: Tina-Saigal2002
Very nice update.. This is the first time I'm commenting on your FF but I have been a silent reader of your FF for a long time.. I really like your FF and thank God that Dutta did not find out Nakku's real colour.. Want him to fall for Nakku's inner beauty first.. Well Nakku's Bashan part about Ma was a master piece and I really appreciate Baji-Dutta frndshp.. if Dutta is not eating so does Baji.. He is a true frnd.. and I like this thing a lot about Baji.. Nice FF do update fast.. Ab toh intezaar karne walo ki line mein hum bhi shamil hai.. Aur humein zyada intezaar karna pasand nahi😉😆

hi...welcome to the ff...thanks for breaking your silence and commenting...i love hearing from readers 😳😳😳...thats what makes all of this worth it 😃😃....and yes...he will fall for Naku's inner beauty before anything else...just wait and watch for what i have planned 😉😉😉...i had to make Baji nice here...cuz on the show...he's annoying me right now 😡😡😡...sorry for intezaar...but full blame on Fivr 😛

Originally posted by: Dew-drop
Reserving this post 4 aaram se reading & then giving lamba comment ..!🤣 maine bhi aaram se reply karne aayi hoon 😛

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Okkiee me bak 4 the lamba comment ....God help me ..🤣

There he stood, looking absolutely lethal. He was dressed in a pair of dark blue jeans, black shoes, gray collared shirt and charcoal blazer. His hair brushed back, but still natural. Suddenly Naku had the urge to run her fingers through it. Immediately she mentally smacked herself for such ludicrous thoughts

Haila ,,,U again described Dutta like this ...Hayeeee ..😍
Deko ab mera dhyan read karne mein bilkul nahi lagega ...☺️
to phir main comment kaise karoongi ..😆
Arey ye kya ,,,😲😲Naku hat door ,,,,,😡😡Dutta k baalon mein mujhe ungliyan pherni hai ...😍😍 tu bhi...drooling..like Ksh...line mein khadi hoja...if you want a chance with Dutta's hair...Naku and ksh are in line already 😆😆😆...besharam ladkiyaan 😛😛😛

Arey arey ,😲😲,,Naku ko hataya nahi k Supriya chipak gayi ....
hat mawali k paas ja ...😡😡 lol...sups ke liyeh...no mavali in this ff...shayad uski line Dutta ke saath lag jayeh 😉😉 *jaz running for cover* 😛

Wow ,,,Naku in the silver white dress is luking so pretty ....just like she danced in the shw wid Babi ..Such a pure beauty ..
Nice song ,,,,I loved it ..👍🏼 yes...that scene was really awesome...Mahi looked beautiful!! just gorgeous...so simple in a white and pink outfit...haye haye...Dutta dekhta toh behosh hojate 😉😉

Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy ,,,,,Dutta is bak ..😍
but he doesn't recognize her ....awwwwwwww gadha kahin ka .. kaise recognize karta...he only saw eyes...vaise bhi...her 10pounds of make up is missing 😆😆😆

Awwwwww so sweet Dutta has Naku payal ....ab wo usse din raat dekhe ga ..such a romantic thought ..😳 story tu likh rahi hai ya main? 😆

Naku phir bhasan dena shuroo ho gayi ,,,,ye ladki kab sudregi ..😡
But i liked wat she said ..."maa to bas maa hoti hai ,,"😭 but one thing you have to admit...at least she doesnt say "meri aayi kehti hai"...this is why i made Babi step mother...no more aayi type lectures 😛

The Cv sbetter not turn aaye negative in the shw ..😡😡Ooopppss out of topic ..🤣
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My latest cutie pie Baaji ko bhook lagi hai ....hayee ..😳
Luving the Dutta & Baaji frndship here also ...👍🏼
nww ,,ab ek achchi si ladki le aayo Baaji kk liye .......
Sun rahi ho na Jaz ..🤔 baji ke liyeh ek koyal 😉😉...kaun kaun...tujhe bej doon 😆😆😆 what an idea!! omg...special cameo in my ff by none other than shabz 😛😛😛....

Chalo bas kaaafi lamba ho gaya ..😆
Awesum update jazzie ...luved it very much ...👏
& plzzz plzz plzz update sooooooooooooooooooooooonnnnnnn .....!😉 awesome...just awesome comment...update soon..very soon...blame fivr for delay 😳😳..or my laziness...which ever you want 😉

Originally posted by: sinak
Jaz that was Awesome. Naku your too good. She is the only one who can make Dutta speechless.

glad you enjoyed it...thanks for commenting...and of course..only our sherni can shut our sher up 😉

JAZ

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Jazmin

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Posted: 15 years ago

#147

Originally posted by: nazia.icycool
OMG..jaz!!!!!!kya tha ye??KYA THA YEH???it was outstanding!!!!!!!initially it was a lil emotional..u knw nakku n his father etc..and later on..the payal thingy..the TASHA convo..were simply fantastic!!!...nakku ne kya dialogues mare abt MAA..!!

jaz.. well done ya..i enjoyed a lot readin it..

haila...when i saw "kya tha yeh"..i was sure you were gonna say...what crap is this 😆😆😆...but you didnt...im glad that you liked it...Naku is on a roll...ek ke baad ek dialogues..kyun? 😉😉

Originally posted by: sosweetsumi
lovely how naku make dutta understand about aayi saab
lovely how dutta caught nakun is that outfit.
oh i love this story
do continue
bye sumi

glad you like it Sumi...next part up soon...and dutta doesnt know he saw naku now does he..not just yet 😳😳...😉

Originally posted by: PremLeoManav
Lovely...........WAITING FOR NEXT PART SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😳

thanks 😊

JAZ

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Jazmin

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Posted: 15 years ago

#148

Originally posted by: mariescott14
Hey jaz...awesome yaar
really loved dutta and naku interaction especially when naku spoke about mothers...really touched me

really feel that song suits Tasha loved that sequence...wish dutta realised she is the same naku

hope u update real soon

i love that song...i wanted to do a dance scene...cuz i love dancing...but i was thinking about songs and couldnt come up with something...finally i heard this on youtube and haye...i fell in love all over again 😍...one of my fav hindi songs 😳😳😳

Originally posted by: swati2008
awesome part jaz........naku started her bhasans.......liked how he touched dutta's heart.......lagta hai ab dutta ko akal aajayegi......n that payal falling scene was so scene......remembered cinderella leaving her silver shoes.......is dutta going to find her cinderella with the help of the payal.......update soon.......so excited.........

thanks swati 😃...Naku bashan deh...aur Dutta ko aakal nahin aaye...aaisa hosakta hai kya? 😛😛😛...of course...naku couldnt leave glass slippers...so i used a desi touch to a classical scene 😃😃😃...

Originally posted by: yasu09
oh my good god .......your here toooo????

Will come back and read this next week....

right now got tons of revision to do....

he he ya...yaar..message mila ke nahin? 😉

JAZ

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Jazmin

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Posted: 15 years ago

#149

Originally posted by: Irika95
OMG!!!THat was awesome jazz...plzz jaldi se update karoo...yaar

thanks...update will be up soon 😃

Originally posted by: jani-yeh
Whoa-K Jaz....got2 say that was wivout a doubt worth the w8...😉
2 gud...👏👏👏... he he...thanks 😳

the whole Naku changing & dancing in the garden n then Dutta c'in her was awesum...😳...Dutta holdin on2 Naku's payal...nice touch n soooooooooo cute...😳...Baji n Dutta are also 2 funny in ur FF...the way they talk 2 each other is jus lyk u wud c em doin in LTL...😆😆... i miss Baji and Dutta scenes on LTL (of course im one week behind) 😳😳...but i miss Baji and Naku scenes too...*sigh*...😃😃...glad you enjoyed the payaal bit 😛

hope Dutta starts being nicer 2 Aayi...she seems 2 care 4 him...... dutta kya karta hai...aage aage dekho 😉

cnt w8 4 the next part...i knw ur lyk doin tons of stuff...

lyk LTL xpress,CR other FF's n plenty of other things 2...but plz plz do upd8 soon...or i will b lyk the curious cat that died...😆🤣... ive fallen behind on the CR this week...but hopefully ill be back with full force next week...inshallah...i miss you guys 🤗...update this weekend for sure 😳

Originally posted by: sana786a
😲omg jaz u knw wat i cant begin 2 describe how gud dat was 👏ur 2 gud awesum honestly i was waiting 4 ages and ages 4 u 2 update dis ff and finally u did knw i want 2 read more please please can u update asap😃and knw u mite be thinking im odd i luv dis story it reminds me of a lnger version of cinderella and i loved da part where u wrote about da payal instead of da glass slipper kinda like desi style luved it god ur 2 gud🤗and also im tempted 2 print all dis ff and staple it up 2 make it into a book since im a bookaholic 🤣

sana! 🤗 whats up yaar...kaise ho...i hope the wait was worth it...nahin tha toh...dont blame me...😆😆😆...next update soon...this weekend for sure 😃😃😃...yup...payal = glass sliper...cinderella with a desi twist 😳

JAZ

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Jazmin

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Posted: 15 years ago

#150

Originally posted by: nsb416
"Maa toh maa hoti hai". Sigh, I miss my mom.

Very nicely written Jnawaz! I enjoyed how Dutta caught Naku dancing and he has her payal 😛 Wonder when she will get it back and how.

aww...sorry...🤗...im glad you enjoyed the update...next part up soon 😃

Originally posted by: SanRajDeewani
Hi Jaz… hi sanju! 😃

OMG… I been busy so couldn't read all the FF =( .. and finally got round to reading your FF's last night =) and wah.. I loveeeeeeeed it Jaz..
Its so just amazing.. wow...all ff's in one night...hope it wasnt a waste of your time 😳

Mee picking out bits now (Hope you don't mind).. TaSha in the study and Naku describing her relationship with her father as though she talking about someone else was so touching and the way you wrote the emotions was just laajjawab. thanks...i had to show how strong Naku's bond was to her father 😃😃...he's not there but he's important...😉😉

Surpiya doreh darling on Dutta but then running away from him cos of his lie about action movies and documentaries.. Lol.. Really amazing.. =) kuch toh karna bada...cant have her falling for Dutta...😉

TaSha convo over material things and Naku's likes.. Sweeeet scene.. Again really loved the way you described her innocence and simplicity. this scene is gonna lead to another very interesting and touching TaSha scene...just wait and watch...or...umm...read 😛

Naku dancing and Dutta comes.. =) One of my fave parts.. I like how she changed to her normal roop as she has in the drama many times and how the outfit her father gave held so much importance..
Dutta coming and getting a glimpse.. Was like OMG moment thinking will he know its her.. of course he cant know its her...itni jaldi toh parda nahin hata sakti main...or in this case...makeup nahin utar sakti 😆😆😆

The scene with BaiTaSha in the study.. Firstly the teddy bear and ji-ji.. I was laughing so much where you put Baiji telling Naku not to call him Jiji and again when Supriya calls Dutta "Duttaji" and Baiji laughing.. lol...Baji is the comic relief in this ff...😃

Last but not least BaiTaSha and the food scene in the study.. =) the bashaan Naku gave Dutta was really moving and had mee in tears with your maa dialogue.. aww...Naku here and Naku on the show share one thing in common...😆😆...the bashans 😉😉

Really love your FF's Jaz.. thanks 😃

Do Update Soon as I really can't wait to read more.. Its like a novel you can't put down and want to carry on reading.. Just really brilliant.. =) next part up soon...this weekend for sure!!! 😃😃

-Sanju-

Originally posted by: moully
plz pm me whn u update.😊

kk

JAZ

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