* Lambi Judai- FF* Chap-21[Page 44]* - Page 14

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Posted: 17 years ago
oh no plz dont stop writing ur story is much better than whats going on the serial right now
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Posted: 17 years ago
yea plz continue....i will start commenting more from now on if it makes u happy 😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
Chap 11



Karan and Mihir take KT to the hospital, where the doc diagnoses that she is suffering from intense shock,and that any further shock could put her in coma. Mihir is really worried…Tulsi calls..
T: Mihir, KT kaisi hai?
M: Doc ne kaha hai ,ki use aram ki zaroorat hai..karan yahain par uske saath hai, mein Lonavala ke liye ravana ho raha huin..
T: Mihir..
M: Hain Tulsi?
T: Yeh kya ho gaya Mihir…hamara kisna..
And Tulsi breaksdown…
M: Tulsi, sambhalo apne aap ko..is katin waqt mein, tumein hi bharosa dilana hai sab ko, ki saab theek ho jayega..aur fir Ganga aur Saahil ke bare mein bhi to socho..
T: Mihir, mein tumhare saath chalungi..
M: lekin Tulsi..
T: Nahi, tum ghar ao, mein tumhare saath chalungi..
And Tulsi keeps the phone.

Karan walks upto Mihir..
K: papa..aap ghar jaiye..mein huna, yahain KT ke saath..
M: theek hai, mein ghar se kisi ko bhej deta huin.
K: theek hai papa..
And Mihir leaves for SN.

In SN, every one is mourning, no one can believe what has happened…
Mihir reaches there.. Tulsi eagerly walks uptohim..
T: Kt theek hai na?
M: Hain, baas aram kar rahi hai..
Ekalavya walks towards Mihir..
E: Dadu…(he looks down ashamedly…and sadly)
M: Ekalavya, chinta mat karo, KT ko kuch nahi hoga…agar tum chaho to tum hospital mein uske paas bait sakte ho..
E: Theek hai, mein ja raha huin..
And Eku leaves for the hospital…

Tulsi and Mihir tell everyone that they are going to Lonavala, and Gomzi says, he would accompany them too, so the three of them leaves, after taking Baa's blessing.
Baa is crying, and is unconsoalble..Damini and Mohini try to calm her down..
Baa: Mujhe Kisna se milna hai…hey thakurji, yeh kya ho gaya…mera kisna mujhe wapas lauta do bhagwan…
Damini: Baa, ap chaliye..apki tabiyat kharab ho jayegi..
Baa: Nahi Damini, jab tak mein apne kisna ko nahi dekhungi tab tak, pani ka ek boond bhi nahi peungi..
Damini and everyone gets very worried..and a deranged Baa leaves for her room..accompanied by Archita and Dakhsa…

In Lonavala, Saahil reachs their guest house. It's late in the night, he wonders how he is going to get to the hospital now…He gently picks her up from the back seat of the car and takes her into the guest house. He puts her down in one of the room and begins to leave…when ganga slowly wakes up and holds his arm…

G: Maat jao Saahil..mujhe chod kar maat jao..
S: kahin nahi ja raha huin Ganga, mein yahin par huin…Baas tumhara luggage la raha tha..
G: Mere paas baitho ..
Saahil walks up beside her and sits on the side of the bed..
Ganga looks blankly outside the window and tears roll down her eyes..
S: Ganga, maat ro…mein samajh sakta huin tum kya mahsoos kar rahi ho…lakshya hamara beta tha…
And Saahil looks at Ganga with lots of affection, Ganga takes his hand in here…
G: Mujhse wada karo Saahil, tum Lakshya ko mere paas leke aoge..
S: Lekin Ganga..
G: lekin kuch nahi Saahil…mujhe mera beta lauta do Saahil…

Ganga cries and hugs Saahil…Saahil consoles Ganga and they share a warm hug….
Saahil waits beside Ganga, till she falls asleep..he keeps looking at her ..and somewhere in the guest house the song "Tere chare se nazar hatti nahi , kya ham karrin" aptly plays. And with the passing night, worn out from the day, saahil falls asleep sitting by her side,holding her hand…


In Ganga's car, her cell phone rings again…and in vain again…

Rishabh reachs Lonavala and takes a captive tripti into a warehouse. There he ties up Tripti to a chair, takes her gag out and lights cigarette..he lets out puffs of smoke onto Tripti's face, who turns her face..
R: arey arey sweet heart, tak leef ho rahi hai tumhein?? Hain??
Tripti looks on disgustinlgly at Rishabh..
T: Tum itna gir jaoge mujhe maloom nahi tha…meine kya bigada hai tumhara? Mere sahare to tum aaj yahain tak pahunch paye ho..
R Sahi kaha tumne Tripti…mujhe tumhara istemaal bahut pahle hi kar lena chahiye tha..
Ab dekhona..bacchpan se aaj tak, mujhmein bantne ki aadat nahi hai…ab 50 karod to mere hai hi, kal ke deal se milne wala advance bhi mera ho jaega…fir mein tumhara kya karunga, Tripti??
And he laughs out loud! Tripti is shocked to hear all this..
T: Tumhein mein itni asani se nahi jane dungi Rishabh…bahut pachtaoge tum is dhoka ke liye..kaal sab ke samne mein tumhari sacchai la dungi..
Rishabh laughs and says..
R: Kya baat hai, umra ke saath dimag bhi satak gaya hai kya tumhara?? Yahain tum kaidi ho, aur mein baas..(he pulls out his gun and looks at it) kal kaam ke baad trigger dabane ki der hai..fir kaun Tripti, kahain ki Tripti..koi tumhein miss bhi nahi karega..are mein to shantiniketan ka ek kanta hata rah huin…
And he continues to laugh..while tripti looks on shockingly at the gun and unbelievingly at Rishabh..
R: Oh waise..tumhein to batana hi bhool gaya..kaal jab mein tumhara kaam tamam karunga, tab tum, apne pati, Saahil, aur Bete ko bhagwan ke paas jakar, mere taraf se hi bol dena..samjhi?? Hhahahah..
Tripti cant believe what she just heard..she tries to say something, Rishabh gags her again and leaves..


Someone checks into one of the rooms of the guest house in which Ganga and Saahil are staying…


Ekalavya reachs the hospital, laste into the night, and meets karan their..
E: Karan Chahcu…aap ghar chale jaiye..
K: You sure Ekalavya? Mujhe koi pareshani nahi hai rukne mein..
E: Nahi chachu, mein huin yahain..ap jaiye..
Karan leaves..Ekalavya comes and sits beside a sleeping KT..

He holds her hand, and in deep sleep KT tightly holds Eku's hand and calls out 'Lakshya'..Eku slowly withdraws his hands,..walks towards the window and thinks of how much he really loves KT,and how much he has hurt her….he thinks of how he used to be and how much he has changed…he turns back at KT, with moist eyes..and thinks of how much she indeed loves lakshya…and the fact that Lakshya, his younger brother is no more…tears roll down his eyes…He leaves KT's room and walks towards the murthi of Lord Ganesha..bends his head down…and speaks slowly..

E: mein janta huin, ki meine apne pyaar ko pane ke liye, apnoin ko dookh pahuin chaya…mujhe maaf kardo bhagwaan…Kt ko theek kardo…mein usse bahut pyaar karta huin…mein usse is tarah nahi dekh sakta…meine uski zindagi to usse nahi lauta sakta..paar mujhmein itni sakti do bhagwaan ki mein usse khush rakh sakuin…


He notices the flickering diya and takes ashirwad from it..he notices kumkum beside it…the night slowly turns stormy and heavy winds begin to blow…he picks up the kumkum from the lord's plate and puts a teeka on his head…


(To Be continued)



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Posted: 17 years ago
OKAY mr. eku ij, now you realize..pshh..i wish it was that easy in the serial.... so here's my personal note to you: I ABSOLUTELY LOVE your FF!! it's def. my fav.! you use realism in your ff (more than 'kyunki...'), and you cut straight to the point, no use of wasting time over stupid drama or 'faaltoo' stuff...I enjoy reading this FF alot, it def. doesn't loose my attention and the detail is soo great and you can vividly imagine stuff..so keep up the great work!! can't wait for the next part!!😊
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: desigrl05

OKAY mr. eku ij, now you realize..pshh..i wish it was that easy in the serial.... so here's my personal note to you: I ABSOLUTELY LOVE your FF!! it's def. my fav.! you use realism in your ff (more than 'kyunki...'), and you cut straight to the point, no use of wasting time over stupid drama or 'faaltoo' stuff...I enjoy reading this FF alot, it def. doesn't loose my attention and the detail is soo great and you can vividly imagine stuff..so keep up the great work!! can't wait for the next part!!😊



Thank you Jhanvi...you are one of the readers who keep me going...i would have quite long ago...i hate dragging the same story..again n again..no point...it would bore me itself..how can i expect my readers to read it...😊
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Posted: 17 years ago

(BIG GASP) HAAAAWWWW !!!! 😲😲😲
This is so realistic, im about to faint..
No , not kidding, seriously..
Just wish this all could happen in the show once ! 😕
Ohh Myy Godd ! Now , you have to continue ...
I'm so happy , Eku turned Nice , now i love him again ...😳😆😆
..To tell you the truth;
I have NO WORDS to describe your FanFic , in a good way because , obviously you are elder, and have more knowledge in using language and all that , but ...
This is like--
You should've totally been the Script-Writer or Kyunkii
And see how much the TRP's rise ! 👏
Ahha.. lemme use a word i made;;😉
FanTabulous ! 👏
Do Continue Soon Dii..
i am waiting Eagerly..😃

Edited by .::Kittu::. - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
FanTabulous?? are you kidding me kittu?🤣..besides that word, yeah i agree...!! but i still dislike eku, no matter how much a 'devtaa' he may turn into... 😳 personal preference...wow, this def. encourages me to brush up on my hindi...u know what, don't wait for comments, seriously, just continue, like NOW...i wanna read what happens next..lol, this is addictive 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
OYE!! Jhanvi , don't you dare make fun of my made up word for Suu Dii ! Or Else.. 😈
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Posted: 17 years ago
as every1 else has mentioned it was very realistic
i wish kyunki writers would use ur ideas rather than their usual boring stuff
ur story is unique
continue soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
Wow! Thanks guys...i realize i dont need more comments than the ones you guys put up..bcoz they r far more encouraging than others..you guys rock..and will continue in a day or so..have fun meanwhile...
Jhanvi, Kittu.. 🤗 🤗 🤗

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